Sunset Shimmer and Capper Dapperpaws find out the answer to the age old question: do cats enjoy playing in the snow?
Written for eiggengrau for Jinglemas 2023
I am amputee bat pony. I am a former royal guard.
Sunset Shimmer and Capper Dapperpaws find out the answer to the age old question: do cats enjoy playing in the snow?
Written for eiggengrau for Jinglemas 2023
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Good fun, thank you! (So says the benighted individual who supplied the prompt for this story.)
Agreed
cue The more you know sfx
So I liked it, but Capper kind of trails on and off and uses a bunch of words that aren't really necessary.
Not only is it a pain to follow and drags the scene on for way too long, but does it not feel like Capper to talk like that.
Maybe work a little on your dialogue a little in the future.
If your looking to fill the word quota, a outing for Breakfast might provide some extra words to say in between the scene descriptions and setup.