......Plausible Wolverine in Equestria?

Not written by a four year old with tourettes?

Don't screw this up. I see potential.

"Yeah... " He grumbled, tightening his hands into fists, "I'm definitely dreaming... Somebody fucking pinch me."

While I normally won't agree with someone using a troll face obey poster avatar, I agree please don't mess this up.

One hell of a start and getting past the thought of how his bones stay connected after being removed from the crystal, excellent so far in integrating Logan.

D.D... Daring Do lives!

Between this, the Hulk story and the few Deadpool stories out there, Marvel cross overs are rising.

That said, this story has potential like an untapped oil well and you struck rich on the first dig.

Now keep that rig pumping and make more angry Canadian oil.

EHeeheehee, back hand... of DOOM.

Great fic, it has a lot of potential, I'll be looking forward for the next chapter

nice so far. what i expect for the next chapter. this is Wolverine we are talking about so I expect bloodshed and chaos and a lot of dead ponies.

Other than a few grammatical errors, I'm loving this fic. Pleas continue delivering the awesomeness which is this story!

"Attack!" Shining Armor yelled, his pegasus soldiers firing their blasts of magic.

>>14633291463329 That is not the first time that he had all his flesh removed from a limb and the bone stayed in place. Heck I believe he survived being nuke before.

And here's the list of marvel characters in Equestria that i have read

Deadpool

Hulk

Spiderman

Iron man

Punisher

Wolverine

And now we need captain America, Thor (that one will be interesting), and the Fantastic Four.

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I know, I know, I grew up with a brother that loves X-Men. It's just I am a biology student and is currently  taking Human Phys.

Do you count Ponified versions of them? 'Cause I have seen Thor and Cap, not as their human selves but either as ponies or a MLP canon character taking up their role

>>14636111463611 Can you point those out I haven't read those.

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Don't remember their names, I think there is one called My Little Avengers which has Big Mac as Thor

The ponies' trust of wolverine is completely random and makes no sense. A better way to give them a little trust realistically would have been to have him do something to earn it, like sparing one of the guards. I really like this story, other than that.

Also: inb4 featured!

I think a movie avengers would be an interesting crossover

Or a war machine crossover

Great work Might want to add a few more tags though like adventure or comedy, but man I always wanted to read a Wolverine/mlp crossover fic hope you update

I give this a 10 out of 10 so far

LOL! Oh yeah Logan has ALWAYS been my favorite, just dont screw it up please!

>>14637411463741 well there is this one... and it has TwiSoarin for some reason... also surprise origin of the Elements of Harmony...

I've read another one somewhere, probably on Fanfiction.net, that had the main-six team up with the Avengers to stop a team up of Loki and Discord... That one was awesome to... now if only I could remember where it was

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I will try within my power not to disappoint!

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I'll keep that Canadian essence flowing!

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Thank you!

>>14638631463863

You're too kind

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I'll do what I can!

Excellent story and looking forward to more.

Here are a few thongs I noted while reading:

Ch. 1:

It's located behind the receptions desk.

Professor Heartstrings proposed that the existence of humanity existed out of the blue with no physical evidence supporting his claim.

Ch. 2:

On its lower body it wore what looked like blue jean pants, and at its feet were dark black books.

The dark red muscle soon began to encase the arm and 'hand' before a light colored covering, which Twilight guessed was skin, followed soon after. It had all happened within seconds.

A few moments early, beneath the balcony of Canterlot castle in a simple donut shop...

The creature heard her, but it couldn't comprehend what she was saying. It was running clumsily, not being itself at all. It's feral instincts had taken over, pumping the idea of survival into its head. At the moment, its conscience had been blocked by its animal tendencies. It was not likely it would remember what it was doing at the current moment it its strange berserk state.  

Also Celestia and Luna and Twilight are making a lot of assumptions about "him". And these seem unnaturally insightful. You really shouldn't try to feed the reader information that should be expressed or inferred by the story itself.

keep it up good so far please just like the others DON'T SCREW UP and don't let the story get boring

If you fuck this up, I will destroy your soul...

But good luck anyways!

Congratz,your featured baby!

>>14641821464182 I'd love too see a war machine crossover, it would be interesting to see someone write one. I'd do feel that there is a lack of iron man on this site. There's only two or three fics but they aren't that great

please do a good job.

mess this up and

but good job

You're doing really good with this so far--keep it up!

so how do you kill wolverine?

First Hulk then deadpool and then zombies and now Wolverine?!

Has someone been reading my diaaa-JOURNAL yes uh my journal

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Dude what do you mean Captain America? We need THOR.

Poor Logan. You woke in a pony fantasy land. Who did you tick off for that to happen?

"My room is also heavily enchanted, so my bed, dressers, and cake are all completely safe." - See even gods value cake above all else!

>>14632341463234>>14633291463329 No pressure..........................

>>14646201464620 You don't, he fought with Cap during WWII, fought in the Civil War and I think he even fought back in the Rev War

how does that beast fair?

foulsitter

he began to use his skilled stealth ability to quietly move

He didn't notice it before, but the creatures voice was... female. It sounded scared and young. He couldn't handle scared young females very well. After a moments hesitation, he withdrew his blades.

Overall, everything I've mentioned can be prevented from happening again by getting an editor/prereader or three, now that you've actually posted some chapters. They can even catch plotholes before you publish! ... Sometimes. Best of luck, since I'm watching you.

Was he finally going crazy or was he trapped in the imagination of a six year old girl? Ill have jean braid your hair.

I'm not even a marvel fan, but damn, this is brilliant. I'm going to track this, and bloody well enjoy it. Keep up the good work

You wrote pegasi threw their magic blasts... plz correct

"Ah kinda have to go with Rainbow on this one... " Applejack added, "That thing is probably all bony and dead-like. Everypony is talking about this thing going crazy and violent, but ah'm pretty sure it's as dead as Rarity's sex life."

hilarious

good ending to the chapter and gratz on getting featured

Last of the humans, because we all know him, the Hulk, and Deadpool would probably be the longest lasting humans in the marvel earth.

oh yes... Wolverine in equestria. Let's see the walking death machine deal with a land of friendship and magic. Keep goin and stay golden^^

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that is all

>>14650741465074 Set him in everfree and I think he'll be fine... maybe

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You did... Read it, right? He spared two and none of the ponies trust him at all. Twilight is just going by how tight his arm is, the rest are 100% sure Wolverine'll snap her neck like a twig at the slightest provocation. Celestia and Luna have him surrounded and Twilight, despite having her life in a passive-aggressive sort of way threatened led him right into a trap.

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No he won't all the creatures will be dead within a week.

*Looking through featured stories, sees this.*

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The amount of 'tell' is a tad annoying, though the idea could be interesting.

>>14641821464182 It was on Fanfiction, I read it there.  Can't remember the name, but just look up Avengers MLP crossovers to find it.

Excellent!

I am about to go to bed but I can tell this is going to be worth reading. Will take a look at this tomorrow

DO NOT SCREW THIS UP!!!!!!

Wolverine....Hmm.. immortal, unbreakable adamantine skeleton... yeah. They're screwed.

NEXT CHAPTER

NAO

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How did I miss that?

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yes you got to give us more this is awesome i cant wait to see what happens next        

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>>14651861465186 I don't think you understand what I mean by "spare." As in, deliberately not kill them, instead of knock a couple of them over because a) he was running away, and b) his claws wouldn't extend since he was trapped in a crystal for thousands of years. Deliberation versus convinience is the difference. He had neither the time nor ability to kill them, and if either of those things had been within his power, in this scenario, he would have killed them both.

Awesome story. Has real potential to become something big. If wolverine is alive does that mean that other immortal Marvel characters are somewhere out there? Maybe Deadpool or his son or X23? Depending which Marvel universe you are using.  

>>14649291464929 he wasnt alive then, he fought in the civil war and vietnam though

i really like this story but i think its a stretch for an arm to regenerate in a few seconds. if it was a day to regenerate that be more belivable.

any way good job

My prayers have been answered

>>14655401465540 Falcon punch?

Eaeagerly awaiting the next chapter

i audibly groaned when i saw "Dear Faust..."

gonna just ignore it and keep reading. i just hate it when people glorify Faust into a sort of deity.

but other than that i like where this is going.

This deserves a Discord.

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>>14646201464620 you wait until he is old enough, just like Hulk

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i await more. hope it doesn't crash and burn like some other fics i've read like this.

but at the pace it's going, you seem like you got a good head on them shoulders, so i shouldn't worry and enjoy every bit of this.

>>14631691463169 I think you're confusing Tourette's with Dyslexia. :U

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this was my reaction when I saw this in the feature box

I'm gonna go ahead and call this now...

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Apart from the grammar errors others have pointed out this is amazing.

I especially  love your excellent use of Characther, especially Celly and Luna.

This is also  hilariously funny.   instant fave and subscribe

>>14636061463606 For that matter, we need Sentry, Power Man, Namor, The Inhumans, Dr. Doom, any and all members of the Avengers, Marvel Hercules, and Amadeus Cho.

"That thing is probably all bony and dead-like. Everypony is talking about this thing going crazy and violent, but ah'm pretty sure it's as dead as Rarity's sex life."

YOU NEED SOME ALOE VERA FOR THAT BURN, RARITY?

This is looking VERY good. 8D Like and favorite. Next chapter, and then the waiting begins...

I am enjoying this. Wolverine needs more sarcasm/dry wit.

dont fuck this up kid

Very good story. Eagerly awaiting the next update.

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Wolverine in equestria? ...with a legit reason?

(about as legit as far as fictional characters go, that is)

*reads*

like, read later list to see how it goes.

just don't screw it up.

Excellent way to end the first fight. Derpy ftw! Far more interesting, and far more satisfying than that "Princess solves everything because she is the ultimate canon mary sue goddess" shit. It's annoying and not interesting at all. Perfect characters = bad characters. Even if canon. Although actually, to be honest, in canon, Celestia has never actually been depicted as "all-powerful". Yes she can move the sun. But I highly, highly, highly doubt she's invulnerable. In fact...

I really hope the next fight is excitingly two-sided, even if it involves the princesses. Because two-sided fights are best fights. ;) No one wants to see a Curb Stomp Battle, after all. Those aren't interesting to read. They're *GASP* boring.

Anyhoo, this is VERY well-written. :D I love the descriptive imagery and intense moments. Definitely tracking.

And now I shall highlight some funny typos!

"Attack!" Shining Armor yelled, his pegasi soldiers firing their blasts of magic.

Oh, do you mean those alicorn guards we occasionally see in the show? :D Nice to see you including them. They deserve more love. They're just trying to fit into society, after all.    :[

"How did they meet anyway?" Rainbow Dash asked, flicking a pea on her plate, "I mean, yeah she was your foulsitter and stuff but when did they actually start dating?"

oh hoh hoh

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... I think this is a sign of some sort

I'll say this right now.

DON'T YOU FUCKING DARE MAKE WOLVERING TRUST THE PONIES IMMEDIATELY, IN ANY WAY, MUCH LESS AFTER THAT STUNT TWILIGHT PULLED. MOUNTHS BEFORE HE EVEN STARTS TO COOPERATE WITH THEM, DAMMIT!!!

You know Wolvering, he lasted a while to trust OTHER MUTANTS LIKE HIM, don't you dare make his give his life story to recently hostile colorful midget horses.

I want you to understand, this story has a LOT of potencial, don't ruin it by imposible trusting foundations. And for what i've seen so far, I can trust you will do this the right way.

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Angry Canadian Oil had me cracking up.

Too many humans in Equestria, crossovers, and superheroes. Why doesn't anyone at least write about a villain

>>14667811466781I am, sort of. He's treated like a villain at least.

Anyways, I saw this on the featured box, and I thought 'What the hell, let's check this out.' I do not regret it. Awesome story, can't wait to hear more.

He lives!

>>14661541466154 No, I mean that they aren't inserting profanity every fourth word so that it sounds more XTREME!!!1111

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Remove the head, I think. In the movie 'Wolverine', Logan was about to kill his brother, who is also immortal. Can't remember his name, but I think his brother suggested that removing the head with his claws would 'end it', or something along those lines.

Moar, make it good, make it awsome, make me jizz.

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Give the guy some credit instead of commanding him I'm not sure what you're trying to say, but judging by how he's done so far, he's not an idiot.

Tracking, can't wait for the next chapter.

It live's!!!!!

This story has an incredible amount of potential. I hope it's not wasted. I like what I see so far.

Please no god/perfect-princesses (or anyone else). Perfect characters are boring. Imperfection = plot, conflict, and potential character development.

Stay true to Wolverines character!!!

Wit is your friend!

Good luck, look forward to more!

Tracked and thumb

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trapped in the imagination of a six year old girl?

Right now, Wolverine is wondering if he did something to piss off Charles Xavier. Didn't Xavier threaten to make Wolverine think he was a little girl, at one point?

...

Somewhere, deeeeep in Wolverine's mind, he's shitting bricks. XD He's thinking he finally pushed Xavier too hard. XD

>>14650521465052 Don't you know? Deadpool is still around.

...

He turned into a pink mare.

>>14665781466578 Poor Alicorn guards. Everypony is always so stand-offish to them...