A user called Anon-A-Miss begins to spills the secrets of Canterlot High School, causing chaos amongst the school. To hide their identity, the user frames Sunset Shimmer and makes her an outcast of Canterlot High School. Sunset Shimmer now fights to reveal the truth and clear her name before the entire school.
However, through her search, she discovers a more nefarious supernatural plot under the surface. As she is dragged into the supernatural world, she is bound to an artifact called with Witchblade, an sentient object that grants great power, in all of its glory, and all its horror.
Sunset now fights not only to discover the truth behind Anon-A-Miss, but for her loved ones against Demons, Cyborgs, ancient assassins and crusaders. Though the world seems to be closing in around her, Sunset is determined to go down fighting. For she now wields the Witchblade, and all those who seek harm to her loved ones, will cower before her.
Heads will roll, for even when the night is darkest, Sunset Shimmer will fight till the bitter end. Will she have the strength to fight off the forces of evil? Or will she be consumed by them.
Inspired by Michael_Ravencroft Witchblade story. Read it, it's really good and solid story, but it is rated Mature.
The title is "The Witchblade EqG: Mystery Murder Files
I hope to do the characters, and the source material justice. I take inspiration from much of Michael Ravencrofts story while also incorporating parts of the comic into it.
I have read as much of the witchblade comic as I could.
This is my first fimfic story, and my second attempt at a fanfic. I hope you enjoy :)
Can't say much for Witchblade. but you've failed miserably on EQG's part of that, precisely because you use that comic that does literally nothing right with the characters.
A friend tipped me off that someone had done a Witchblade crossover, so I came here to have a look.
First off, let me say, I am deeply flattered and happy to see that my Witchblade Trilogy inspired someone to create their own work, as that was the whole intention of it, to give Witchblade more exposure and hopefully get others to dive into that sandbox.
Second, the romantic pairing you have is good, and I do understand your reasoning for putting Sunset with Gilda. I personally chose Pinkie for a few reasons, A: she seemed like the other most likely person to believe Sunset wasn't Anon-A-Miss, or at least would be persuaded into believing it wasn't her. B: it was a challenge to myself, as I don't often write Pinkie Pie types of characters, it was good practice. And C: I wanted to try my hand at a different Sunset ship. Sunset's just so damn shippable with almost anyone in that show.
Third, as far as the fight scenes go. Listen, don't worry. Fight scenes aren't everyone's forte, but you did pretty well. And as far as advice when it comes to writing one, well, how I do it is different, but all I can say is watch a few anime fights, and some fight scenes from some movies, get an idea of how people move, the position of their bodies, how they move in the air and on the ground, etc.
Fourth, I like that you kept the dynamic of Sunset and Witchblade the same as my fic, it just works too well. And you kept another aspect of it that I introduced, of which I approve.
Overall, I like what I see here. The drama, the action, doing good for your first fic. I will say, while it's good to have a template, don't feel like you have to be strictly adherent to certain storylines, especially if they don't quite fit with certain characters or the like. The lore surrounding the Witchblade and the Artifacts I kept intact = well, I took some creative liberties with a few of them because their powers weren't exactly fleshed out from what I researched, and I combined aspects of the comic Witchblade with the anime Witchblade, and then threw in something extra for some spice. But that's also okay.
Don't be afraid to take the story in the direction you want to go, for better or worse, you tell your story. And most importantly, have fun while doing it. Just be ready for the gut wrenching feeling in your heart when you have to write a certain characters' death scenes...trust me, it was not easy for me, nearly teared up a few times. But that was also fun - in a weird way.
Anyway, keep it up!
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Thank you for the statement, But if you here to show your hate for the comic and be insulting on someone using for a fic, , then don't read it.
Nobody forcing you.
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I came here because I do like Witchblade. I just seriously question why that comic has to be a thing in this universe.
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I appreciate the criticism.
Just to let you know, I am aware of the criticism of the comic in how out of character all the characters are, as in how they all seemed to have lost their brain cells. I have also noticed that many Anon-A-Miss fanfics also turn the Main 6 into a group of mustache-twirling villains at worst and stubborn morons at best.
However, I have plans and am working to rework the Anon-A-Miss storyline. One of the changes was making Anon-A-Miss smarter and making it so that it isn't just the Crusaders but a bunch of villains like Chrysalis.
The reason why I use the comic is mostly because well ....I really like it. It has potential; it's just being wasted. Honestly, Anon-A-Miss needed to be an episode and not a short comic lol.
But yeah, I'll keep the characters well ....character in mind when writing this. I have plans for them. I plan on giving them reasons and making an alternate universe of anon-a-miss as to explain their abandonment of Sunny. Rainbow especially, oh god do I have plans for that girl.
Anyways, thanks for reading, I appreciate the critique.
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It's the man, the myth, the legend, Michael Ravencroft himself!!!
Honestly, I'm honored that you even noticed my dinky little fanfic in this corner of the internet. This is my second time writing fanfic and I was extremely nervous. I wasn't very satisfied with my action scenes and was worried about keeping faithful to Witchblade while not tying it down as well. I was also worried about just making a discount version of your story lol, because there were a lot of inspired elements.
Just to let you know, I really liked your Witchblade story. I read all three parts and it took me about four days to finish, and I am an avid reader. Then after that, I rented out as many Witchblade issues from the library as I possibly could before then looking over the internet for other ways to read the issues. (For legal reasons I will not disclose how I got ahold of it.)
I thank you for the encouragement and advice, and I really hope to write a story I can be proud of that hundreds can read. So thank you, kind sir :). Your words of encouragement and advice mean a lot to me.
While I loved Michael's story, I do hope you won't do some of the... Unique stuff sweet home Alabama it did, I hope I'm gonna like the story as it goes.
I hope your Sunset will be much more spiteful toward her 'friends' and the true anon-a-miss too btw, because the fact she forgave them so easily in the other story is an issue I have.
"Long sought by the greed of men since the dawn of human kind, but only bestowed upon the women whose fate it forever scars... The Witchblade. Is it the righteous sword of God, or hand of the Devil himself? Now a new bearer has been chosen. And she must discover the answers for herself. As she stands on the brink of destiny, she is forced to seek the balance between ecstasy and ruin."
I'm only partway through and I noticed this glaring error. You meant to say "Sunset" right?
As I was looking for my place I also noticed this error. Not to sound phobic of any kind, but keep your pronouns straight when talking about this patron.
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Hello. I know this is a bit late, but thanks for catching that. I edited that part out, and I'm trying to be more careful during editing and writing lol.
The reason for the pronoun difference is actually because the demon intended to be male instead of female. I was in a huge debate about whether or not to make the first demon a woman or a man, but eventually decided on making them a woman. I tried to catch any previous instances of them being called a man, but it seems like I missed a couple.
I think the main issue was that the demon was a male, and the person was a female, so I was debating on what their form would look like. I finally decided to make the gender consistent in order to avoid headaches. Of course, this kind of kneecapped me because I had to find another deity or demon to replace the original one I had in mind.
Just a little fun fact.
Damnnn this is great so far! Didnt expect the featherfall ship
Well being a witchblade story ot should be mature.but not a fan of not being the cmc.
So cmc not to blame sorry but hard no.
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I kinda wanted to diversify Anon-A-Miss and add more people to the Anon-A-Miss conspiracy and make it so that they aren't the sole conspirators. Thorax was just the guy who took the photos, and the CMC are the ones who posted the images, but now, upon rethinking about it, I realize I didn't make it clear. I'm going to do a quick edit to fix it. :)
LET'S GO!!!! HYPE!!!! MORE SUNSET SHIMMER WITCHBLADE!!!!
Wow Bon Bon is way more cold blooded than Sunset ever was. I personally hate 'Greater Good' people because they commit horrific atrocities and feel justified.
Edit: I also really hope that when the time comes when Anon A Miss is revealed Sunset is in a healthy enough place to not just let them back in right away. I mean Pinkie called it plainly with Lightning Dust how after a bit of thought could see how stupid it would be for Sunset to have those things done plus has now been on the other end of stubborn when she walked from their lunch table. I also really hope Gilda gets to hammer it in again since shes been calling out just how two faced everyone else was when Twilight came over.
Also, I really hope Twilight does comeover and make the same call of 'Sunset may have been petty, but she was not stupid or shortsighted and making this account with a BLATENT nod to her identity is stupid and the things this character has done or had done is extremely shortsighted with no benefit to her. I may not like what she did when we first met but everything she did served a direct goal, what goals could these actions serve especially since there's so much Evidence now that she took so many pains to not even come CLOSE to leaving before.' That I have seen a couple times before about how OOC Anon a miss would be for Pre reform sunset because of how blatent it was and NOT pointing at a rival.
Interesting story. Added to my list.