Sunset's determined to make her last year of college worth remembering. Three new freshmen are determined to start their collegiate life with a bang.
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It's been a hot minute since I've read an erotic story from start to finish. Usually I just look for the lewd bits and enjoy, but this was worth the entire read. Seriously, awesome work as always! You're able to write the sex scenes well still, don't you worry.
I look forward to reading more from you! Keep up the great work!
~SolidFire
Maybe it's not that you suck at writing sex now, maybe you just have trouble writing more than three characters fucking at once? Try writing a short sex scene just for yourself and see how you do.
I'd love to see a EQG BDSM Diamond Tiara X Silver Spoon fic from you. Or any fic from you. I know it'll be quality regardless.
In my honest opinion, I don't think you've faltered when it comes to writing sex scenes. Hell, it's mainly the reason why you're one of the writers I keep track of on this site, which doesn't really happen a lot. You give great premises and execute them with damn good efficiency. Now I'm not sure what the reason is for your doubt, but I don't think it's warranted.
Actually, my last post wasn't terribly helpful, so let me explain the problems I was having with the sex scene.
Chill with the flowery descriptions during the sex. By all means, have some but I was having trouble keeping track of everyone's positions and who had their tits out during the scene. For example:
I was thinking, "wait, when did Sweetie Belle get undressed?" Also, when Sweetie Belle was licking Sunset's vag while Applebloon ate her ass at the same time as Sunset was eating Scootaloo's pussy, I genuinely could not figure out how that was supposed to work.
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Gonna have to second this. There's, just too much flowery prose here, too much metaphor.
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I wasn't satisfied with the outcome. I probably was drunk when I wrote the thing and just didn't feel like I could get a genuine grip on the thing.
Sorry.
Most clopfics on this site treat sex as the end product. You treat it like a cherry on top. A big, juicy cherry.