A young pegasus from Zephyr Heights learns a valuable lesson when a camping trip goes horribly wrong.
I feel like the flow or pacing of the story is........
It needs work.
Starlight looked over her shoulder. “I’ll tell you what’s going on, you ran into the woods and almost became lunch for this thing… bad timber wolf! Go home!”
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“I think it’s planning to fight you!” Fluttershy warned. “It seems really agitated!”
No kidding, Its a timberwolf.
The pacing needs to work at well as the narrative and dialog. Everything is going to fast.
11715895A wild animal may choose to fight or to leave.In this case Fluttershy is providing her opinion that "Yeah, it looks like it isn't leaving."
I feel like the flow or pacing of the story is........
It needs work.
????
No kidding, Its a timberwolf.
The pacing needs to work at well as the narrative and dialog. Everything is going to fast.
11715895
A wild animal may choose to fight or to leave.
In this case Fluttershy is providing her opinion that "Yeah, it looks like it isn't leaving."