Tired of how creepily Zephyr stares at Rainbow, Rarity takes action.
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Was it ever revealed why zephyr liked rainbow dash?
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To my knowledge, no. I could be wrong though.
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Just wanted to make sure.
11660505 Blue fetish.
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That’s surprisingly believable.
Zephyr Breeze deserves the slaps he got from Rarity
A heart? Are you a fellow tablet user?
"The athlete", "the rainbow-haired girl", why not just say "she" and "Rainbow Dash"? It’s way easier to understand.
Unnecessary space between the exclamation mark and the quotation mark. Also, "chuck" doesn’t seem like a word Rarity would use.
Unnecessary profanity. Two fucks and a bitch probably warrants a T rating.
That, that could seriously hurt someone, Zephyr is definitely messed up. Atleast, I think Zephyr, it’s hard to tell who "the boy" is.
Skin scraped? Mhm, what about her a bone breaking!
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This fic wasn’t anything special, really, I liked it. This gets an OKAY.
One gripe, this plays out exactly like the real life scenario in your blog, just the characters have been replaced.
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Yes, I use a tablet. It may be simpler to use Rainbow Dash and she, but I had an editor who gave me a few tips, one of which was to not just stick to those two. I guess chucked isn't a word she'd use, I'll have to edit it soon. It's already rated T, from the day I published it. I probably should've mentioned it was a plastic chair.
Thanks for commenting!
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Sorry, what I meant was that it would warrant a profanity tag.