After Opening the country, Queen Novo wanted to share the idyllic paradise of Mount Aris and Seaquestria with the world and so the hippogriffian tourism industry was born. After the first very successful spring months the summer began and with it the tropical rain. While the rain never lasted for too long and was quite the spectacle for some tourist, an approaching hurricane however led to many tourist canceling their vacation in Hippogriffia.
With only a few tourist remaining and the hurricane upon them, many tour guides and hotel staff are left with nothing to do. One of them being Azurmar, a tour guide working on the surface platforms of Seaquestria. During these calm workdays, Azurmar´s mind starts to wander, was she happy with being a tour guide or did she crave for the trill of her last occupation? The Hurricane was starting to dissipate yet Azurmar´s mind was still cloudy.
This story takes place in the Equestria at war universe, which is a mod for the game Hearts of Iron 4.
This is my contribution to the Sixth Annual Equestria at War Writing Contest.
The Art is concept art from the mlp: fim movie.
I read your story shortly after it was published, and now that I've read it again, I'm leaving a comment.
I think you need to remember to read and edit your own work before publishing. There are a lot of places where punctuation is missing. Nothing major, but it does bother the reader a bit.
Your English is definitely better than in the previous story, so congratulations!
As for the story: it's simple but enjoyable. I really liked the "storm in paradise" atmosphere (which applies to both the weather and society).
I am waiting for more!
Thank you for the comment.
You are correct, I need to give my story more of a fine touch, I thought about letting my story rest for a week after finishing them, before touching them up and only then to publish them instead of giving them just a minor touch up after finishing them, that way I can incorporate some new ideas.
Nonetheless Im glad you managed to enjoy it and that I was able to hit the themes I wanted and gain a bit more experience, as well as experiment a bit.
I have sadly little time for writing right now, however I already planned my next story, I hope to get it out mid/end of February.