Princess Luna finds herself entwined in a passionate relationship with Private North Star, one of her most loyal guards. Dating and sex ensues.
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You don't have to justify yourself to me, I was just caught off guard. I saw your warning at the top but it was the non-con part that surprised me.
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So, I did bad on my finance exam, and after crying my eyes out and passing out in depression, I'm going to explain because you said "What were you thinking while writing?" You want an explanation, and you will get one.
If you wanted a realistic story where people ask for enthusiastic consent before every encounter, you're never going to get that from me. If I write non-con, you will KNOW I write non-con cause I will state that it's non-con. This situation was supposed to be a very lewd hentai scenario. No one up until this point had stated this was a problem or interpreted this as noncon, and I asked multiple people if this was fine. I just wanted to write kinky Celestia, and honestly, the chapter was a bit missable. If you wanted me to be slightly realistic about it, Celestia is technically one of North's boss who caught him in an affair with her sister, and considering that A) The last time Luna felt so mistreated and alone, she became Nightmare Moon and now there's a more intimate relationship, B) She doesn't know his true intentions, and/or C) She might be a bit jealous her younger sister is getting more action than her. There's a lot of ways to interpret it without going straight to noncon. Plus, North has gone through way worse than this, as I've implied in the story.
This hurts me more than you'd realize, cause I don't write noncon. People accuse me of it, but I just try to write weird lewds. I know noncon. I'm a victim of underage SA, and the fact you accused me of believing men can't be raped is an aggravating moment that made me angry for quite a bit. But, hearing people's words, even critiques, is how I'm going to improve, I guess. Maybe there is something I screwed up that everyone else I asked missed. After all, I'm a shit writer. I've always admitted it. Thank you for the feedback, and hope you find good stories out there, because you won't find them here.
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You’re not a shit writer. You’re an excellent writer, that’s why this caught me so off guard. And you’re putting way too much importance on the opinion of one overly sensitive guy from the internet. That is also something I understand well, as I said I suffer from OCD. It’s not the “I need everything symmetrical” thing everyone thinks.
My interpretation of the chapter was that this all happened against his will. I went back and reread it a few times to see if I could find a place where he decided to play along and I guess there are a few lines that could be interpreted that way.
As for my comment, I will apologize that it seemed like I was accusing you of thinking men can’t be victims. That was meant to be rhetorical. Reducto ad Absurdum as it were. But I do get that it comes across as accusatory. I tried to be as respectful as I could with my comment but I have no social skills. Sorry about your exam, I hope you do better. And keep writing because like I said you ARE a good writer.
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I want to apologize for last night. Truth is, I've been emotionally raw since I know I failed, and whenever I failed, I can usually expect pain of some kind. I shouldn't have been taking it out on you. I'm sorry.
Although, me being a bad writer isn't just you. I know I'm bad at everything, and that's what's important. I can always be better, and I'm going to improve. I'm sorry if I didn't sound it, but I do appreciate the criticism. I'm just dealing with a lot of stuff. I hope that you can enjoy the rest, and that I can at least make people happy. That's all I want. ^^
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Funny you should mention that. Gonna have a chapter with music involved, and another mentioning a couple of songs. I'm glad you enjoy, in regards to Luna, there will be some level of explanation.