Weaver of stories of action, drama, love, sex and a loyal knight of the Sunset Empire! Hail to the phoenix empress! Sunlight & Sundagio are # 1
The saying goes 'there's a first time for everything' and for Sunset Shimmer that statement couldn't be more true. She's been given a chance to start over, to make amends and to truly experience friendship for the first time and as the saying also goes; 'One never forgets their first time'
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Fluttershy's warmth and kindness reminds me so much of Megan. They really do have that in common.
Well, you started off by getting my curiosity Midknight, but now, you have my attention.
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I've wanted to do a sort of 'origin' of my own for Sunset for awhile, the fact the show movies kinda rushed her redemption arc always bugged me
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I have long taken issue with how rushed the whole EQG thing was in general, so I totally get that.
So many grammar errors and other mistakes. I highly suggest re-reading the whole text.
Here are some:
WHAT DID SHE EVER DO TO DO? <- do to you
WHAT DID SHE EVER DO TO DESERVE SUCH VENOM WHEN ALL SHE EVER SHOWED YOU WAS KINDNESS?!” <- such venom, when
SO WHAT HUH?! <- So what, huh?!
“YOU’RE FILTHY DAMN LIAR!” <- You're a filthy...
I mean I naturally upvoted the story because I love your writing, but you sure did rush the editing here.
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ugh crap didn't notice that I missed those in editing T_T to be honest I legitimately took time to slow down and check my work more this time but I always miss stuff considering I work alone here
Why isn't there a sex tag?
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Those were just a few, there are more. Sorry to be "that guy".
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Because there's no sex in the story?
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Nah. I've just been trying to get better at editing. Again hard to do when I have really bad ADHD and am working alone. I can't get everything 😭
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No sex in this one. They are still in high school.
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She told me that it helps because once she writes her thoughts down they don't change all the time and she can go back and see what she was thinking about before.
Hehe, I know what you mean. My niece has ADHD and some form of autism, and she loves to write stories which I end up reading/listening to - whether I want to or not.
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Pretty much the situation for me. I get new ideas swimming around in my head all the time and so I had this one and had to get it out. I just wish I had more people to help me proofread and edit.
I take a lot of pride in writing these and I don't wanna disappoint people
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You're improving all the time and like what you do, so isn't that the most important thing? Just read guides on grammar and style, like for example punctuation guides and stuff like that, and you'll see your errors more easily.
I wish I could help you with editing, I really do, but there's so much on my plate in life that I couldn't possibly do it in any reasonable amount of time.
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Don't worry I know everyone has their own lives. Hell I'm jobless right now after having gotten fired almost two months ago so I get it. There is a lot going on. I also wrote this to try and relief some stress. Literally been losing my fucking hair cause I've been so stresses out.
nice i hope you update this and your old stories