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One morning in Pipp’s salon, Mane Melody, a body was discovered. Thank goodness for Zipp and her detective skills. She has decided it’s up to her to find out the culprit.
This will be the darkest mystery she ever dealt with but...
She’s not gonna give up!
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Even despite the errors, I already love this story! Can't wait for more!
Consider my interests peaked to their height.
That feather Zipp found gives me a bad feeling based on its description.
Instead of putting in a "dead dove do not read" disclaimer, you might have been better off fixing the issues and publishing later. Just a suggestion for next time.
Very convenient timing.
Dr. G who? [2 new Suspects.]
hmmmm.... what work exactly?
interested? what was the drinks? We need EVERY detail.
hmmm... Dahlia
Smell....
3 suspects: Dr. G, Dahlia and Posey.
Dr. G strangely left when the left were o.
And Dahlia was interested in the drinks.
Strange smell: Its highly to be poison then someone must've snucked in earlier to add the chemical. I doubt that rotten fruits are lethal.
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Feather......
What type of pony is Dr. G excatly?
Detectives on the case
https://images.app.goo.gl/fNLUpzfNqW5dePtb8
Assuming that the culprit is of the suspects given in this chapter, then I’m ninety percent sure it’s this Dr.G guy. Posey and Dahlia just don’t seem like the types to want to murder Jazz. But an OC character with no cannon personality….
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I have an idea that 2 or 3 of them are guilty but need more evidence.
(cant imedialtely jump to concludions.
After reading this, I'm so excited for what you got for us! Hope this case can be solved soon, and the culprit is put to justice!
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Thanks for reading! Glad you’re excited
Honestly its really not suspicious no matter how you look at it.
I knew that feather would lead to trouble. Hopefully this won’t end with sister betrayal. I still think it was Dr.G, but there’s some complications growing.
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You're Welcome!
Sunny its not your fault. You can't control everypony and harmony doesn't mean that there wont be bad things happening.
We humans know that a lot.
What room did he go in!?
Definitely poison. But how without witnesses......
ZIPP ITS NOT YOUR FAULT. YOU DIDN'T KNOW THAT SOMETHING LIKE THIS WOULD HAPPEN!!
ARE YOU SERIOUSLY SAYING YOUR OWN SISTER KILLED A GOOD FRIEND OF HERS ON PURPOSE!!?
but she was...... oh dear
Pipp's wings aren't pink
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you might wanna look into that a bit kore, because i can recall Pipp's wings are pink and fluffy
4 MAIN SUSPECTS
Dahlia,
Posey, Dr. G andPippPosey the least suspected
Pipp: motivation unkown
HEY HEY HEY DON'T JUMP TO CONCLUSIONS!!
Need more proof!
uuuhhhh what type of poison is that?
WOAH WOAH WOAH ZIPP!!!
YOU NEED MORE EVIDENCE!!
Exactly, thats why you don't jump to conclusions like that. YOU NEED MORE EVIDENCE!!!
Time to finish the case
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They very much are, to the point they look like they're composed entirely of down feathers rather then flight ones.
Geez, Zipp, think before you act! Why the hell would Pipp kill Jazz? The motivations are just stupid.
Regardless, that drama was finished quickly and hopefully we’ll get some answers next time.
When pipp went to try and wake jazz up a pink feather could've fell off. It really isn't evidence
Wow, Zipp is being a bit emotional and jumping to conclusions. Not bad, just a bit out of character. Also, rocky is still on my radar
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Really? Sorry about that
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Yeah, but only because she wouldn't accuse her own sister of murder, everyone else is free reign
Called it!
JUST AS I SUSPECTED!!!!
AS I SUSPECTED!
His job is a doctor so he's been the one who tested Jazz, but lied to have her clueless for his plan.
As his disappearance when the lights turned off,
It will make sense that he covered the first camera to not get seen, turned off the power from the power box, quickly as a pegasus went into the backroom where the jars are, threw in the poisoness pegaberries and left the place!
His behavior (and 'new name character' status) lean this way, but there's definitely some gaps to fill in.
And, of course, the question of if he intended for this to happen or not. Unfortunately, Pipp may not be out of the woods yet.
She is disturbingly sloppy with her products, after all....
Oh S#*%. We got a fighter. Hopefully we don’t have any more casualties. Unless it’s the fake doctor, he can die for what he did
Why?
This is what’s called disproportionate retribution.
You murdered somepony ALL BECAUSE OF YOUR STUPID HAIR!!!?
😨😨😨😨😨😨😨😨😨😨😨😨😨😨
welp
Case solved
Well that’s the last of him. Good riddance!
Jazz has been avenged, and no pony else died!
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Unfortunately that means the doctor and his girlfriend are still alive.
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Yeah, but they’re not going anywhere. Especially if Haven is doing the sentencing
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Yeah but you know.
Unnecessary full-stop/period/dot/point after "last night!" and Pipp seems a little too worried just because Jazz didn't clean up the store. Although, that last part might not be correct as I don't know enough about G5 compared to G4
Why do we need an explanation that little critters can die?
NOT JAZZ! This is just sad
This is just SAD
THIS IS JUST SAD
Also, in "Pipp' s muffled voice" there's an extra space between the apostrophe and the "s"
New suspect: RANDOM DOCTOR GUY
There's no space between the " wake up!" She gasped for air," also, THIS IS JUST SADDD
A–annoyed? There's a frickin' dead pony and you're... annoyed?!
New suspect: PI– hol' up, what? That's not right, oh well, gotta write it down, PIPP?
Shut up, you.
Whoa, can I have a bit more of an explanation on this?
How can you be that oblivious? Pinkie Pie could connect the dots faster
If it’s at the back of the stage, it’s backstage, and the one of the only purposes of a backstage area is to get ready to go onstage. Basically, this is redundant.
Those berries being pegasus only is either important or just a weird detail.
Yeah, how is it possible to get your hoof stuck in a bath drain?
"Dr" is an abbreviation which is mostly used along with a name, you should say "doctor."
Random stuttering.
So far the culprit seems painfully obvious, Dr. G.