An (almost) perfect day

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Bright Mac and Pear Butter, two star crossed lovers with a romance for the ages.

But what happens after happily ever after? What’s the day to day life when the fairy tale romance ends? And what scare are left behind when you don’t get everything in the end?

Let’s find out as we follow Bright Mac and Pear Butter as they wake up and live their (almost) perfect day.

Submission for the Ancestral Tribute Contest.

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Jake The Army Guy

Jake The Army Guy #1 · Oct 16th, 2022 · 1 · ·

Bright Mac and Oear Butter, two star crossed lovers with a romance for the ages.

Typo.

General Alduin

General Alduin #2 · Oct 16th, 2022 · 1 · ·

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Thank you my rabbit friend.

new55

new55 #3 · Oct 16th, 2022 · 2 · ·

That was a good story.

FanOfMostEverything

FanOfMostEverything #4 · Oct 17th, 2022 · 2 · 1 ·

How many eyes do yah see?

Nice touch. "How many hooves am I holding up?" isn't the most viable concussion test.

“For the one time a year we end up walking in the rain?”

I mean, it's your fault for not bringing umbrellas when rain was on the schedule.

And that's the thing. "Freak weather accident" doesn't work well in a world where pegasi were assembling the thunderstorm earlier in the story. Yes, life is fragile and death can strike at any time, but the vagaries of nature lose some of that ineffable sting when somepony probably got fired for that lightning strike. (Something blowing in from the Everfree is a possibility, but again, that explicit mention of weather workers putting clouds in position makes it clear that this was prearranged.)

And then there's the kids. Remember, the point of this prompt was to feature the parents without their children (or, really, their role as parents,) and the Apple siblings aren't just scene dressing here. They're a key part of the emotional climax. It's close, but I have to say that this one edges too far into territory that you explicitly weren't supposed to explore. My apologies, but I have to disqualify this one. Still, thank you for the entry.

SuperPinkBrony12

SuperPinkBrony12 #5 · Oct 17th, 2022 · · ·

A good story, though I feel like more focus should've been on Bright Mac's guilt over Buttercup being cut off from her father. And it seems kind of weird he'd be having those feelings by the time he's gone and had three kids with Buttercup.

Ghost Mike