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The long-distance relationship bit makes it work.
Good story.
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Thanks,
Vinyl and Octavia would soon start a side-business for stimulation music with all that experience :D
Your style does a good job of creating imagery - a neat piece for sure.
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Ok, I didn't expect a comment like that from an established writer.
Thank you, it means a lot to me, really...
I was afraid I was telling too much instead of showing when I look at the writing guide.
But, as a bit of self-criticism, I'm relying heavily on the depicted image which isn't even mine. So that likely influences it more than I can take credit for.
it's alright pretty decent 5/10 for me.
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more than I can ask for a 1000 words.
Thanks for reading!
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There are a few points that maybe are a bit tell-heavy, but working out the best way to do that comes with practice. "Show, don't tell" is heavily overused, however - sometimes you do need to tell to get to a critical point. Telling's a great way to concisely convey information in detail, when done correctly.
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In 1000 words, telling can be entirely appropriate.
Nah, this one worked. It was good.
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Thank you for the follow-up!