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Luster Dawn makes some assumptions about Lil' Cheese, and puts her hoof in her mouth repeatedly. Cheese Sandwich and Discord have a conversation.
my favorite part
Pinkie grumbled, “You know, I swear, that’s like, the fifth pony in a row that thought that Cheese Sandwich was Lil’ Cheese’s father!”
“Don’t you mean fiftieth?” Fluttershy said, not taking her eyes off of the back of her biological son’s head, with whom she shared 50% of his DNA, the other half coming from Pinkie Pie.
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Chapters (1)
Talk about spouse exchange to the extreme.
Somewhere far away, a chill inexplicably runs down Twilight Velvet’s spine.
Nice story, and a very fluffy extension of your usual themes of bittersweet change.
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ok but actually this was really sweet and such a good take on the canon ending!!! i always wondered why they had lil cheese have fluttershys exact colour scheme like… its not like its a very common colour scheme within background ponies or anything lol?? like they colour picked right from her. a story like this is exactly what i need. plus, cheesecord (CHEESE CURD) is so freakin amazing haha! i love the way you wrote discord here!!!
This was super cute! Loved Luster just awkwardly taking the L there, and there's some really cool ideas here about the nature of Discord hinted at. Also I am choosing to believe Fluttershy is trans like I do given even a hint of an opportunity to, and I love her.
Gets dreamy eyes and swoons.
Actually I'm thinking of inventing kissfic as a genre. Like. It's paced like erotica, but they just kiss and hold hands/hooves/paws and nothing else.
Loved that! I was in a maze of twisty little loving and supportive relationships, all different.
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You may have a misconception about Twilight's parentage
L'oof, little bit too real there. CheeseCord is such a cursed ship, of course you had to make it hurt
Based Pinkie Pie, super duper ultra special best platonic friends forever deserve all the tender kisses in the world.
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Cute story, and while I'm not accepting it into my headcanon it is an interesting take. Though how were they able to reproduce? Magic?
I'm going to assume that there are some really passionate Pinkwich shippers in this here comment section.
It's worth remembering that Cheese Sandwich is literally just Weird Al; somebody else can link the Aragon comic, although at least it's less creepy than what some writers have done with Wind Sprint.
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Yeah, he's voiced by Weird Al, and his whole thing in the show was that he took somebody else's
songshtick and made it wackier with polka.I personally never felt like Cheese's backstory would make for a particularly healthy relationship with Pinkie Pie, but what are ya gonna do?
Clever
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I simply assumed as he grew older Cheese simply couldn't just wander like he did before, probably still going out for particularly important "party emergencies" a few times a year. I like him and Pinkie as a couple.
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Pinkie and Cheese work well as a couple without looking too deeply, but I have a serious problem overthinking things.
To explain how I feel about them, imagine this:
Imagine that you are at your job, and one day a girl (or guy, not really important) transfers to where you work. And she acts like you and she dresses like you and she has all the same skills that you do but better. And eventually she tells you that she saw you one time when you were eight years old and decided to base her entire life around becoming exactly like you.
Do you:
A) Form a romantic relationship and raise children with her
or
B) Become terrified of this obviously unhinged, potentially dangerous stalker who has apparently been keeping an eye on you all these years in preparation for this fateful meeting.
It's perfectly fine to like Pinkie and Cheese as a couple, but the implication of his backstory makes me deeply uncomfortable. If he was just some colt that happened to be just like Pinkie, I would have no problem with it. He even seems to have the same weird powers that only she ever seemed to have before him, and that almost seems unfair to me.
Aww, this story is adorably sweet!! It's sad to imagine Discord being confined though, he deserves to be free to roam with his stallion
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I got a feeling a lot happened between Cheese and Pinkie before they got together. Also I guess I just think it's statistical unlikely than more than 2 of the main 6 are gay/bisexual?
Nice, and interesting. :)
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Yep. I'm one of them but I'm not that aggressive.
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That's cool and I appreciate your temperance towards your ship. I don't have anything against any particular ship or their shippers (outside of my desire to express my own thoughts about how they would work out.)
But look at all the red thumbs floating around here, under this innocent little story. There's obviously some strong negative emotion being expressed here in an non-constructive way. I'm pretty confident that most of it is coming from people who ship Pinkie and Cheese, and not anti-lgbt folk, people who are upset that Discord is "dying," or people who accidentally clicked on this story while trying to order doordash.
That's really all I'm attempting to say without trying to be offensive.
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Oh! No no no, I didn't think that you were generalizing us. I was agreeing with your point and I see how that could have been interpreted, so sorry! I'm not the best at talking.
This was a fun story! I actually hadn't noticed that Lil' Cheese is Fluttershy's color scheme, lol.
very nice !
This quite a fun story, an interesting take about the ending that is both shocking and believable at the same time. I am a fan of crazy yet convincing stories like this, so I’d like the permission of translating it into Chinese and sharing it on our pony fanfic website Fimtale. I promise to put a link to the original over there!
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oh it would be such an honor, please do!
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He may dress like Clint Eastwood, but his six shooters full of blanks
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LMFAO youre so right
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Well, actually, Lil Cheese having that color scheme wouldn't be that out of the ordinary if Fluttershy was, in fact, the parent relation. I mean, assuming for a second Cheese Sandwich WAS the father, then Lil Cheese got their yellow coat coloring from him, and the pink mane obviously came from Pinkie. The hue of those colors has already been well demonstrated with other pony families to vary slightly with offspring, so the fact Lil Cheese's colors appearing paler wouldn't really be abnormal, at least for what we're shown in the show. In fact, I'd pretty much bet the resemblance to Fluttershy was entirely accidental on the show's part.
But as the resemblance IS there anyway...I mean, might as well have exploring it as a what if anyway, right? I mean, the show's staff said they'd deliberately kept all ships vague and open to interpretation by design for The Last Problem with the expectation that fans would do precisely this within the fandom, so I can safely say this fic is living up to expectations then.
*Sigh* It's just a vocal minority of CheeseXPinkie shippers who threw a babyish tantrum and is not remotely reflective of the wider group of shippers*. I know this for a fact, there is no doubt at all in my mind, but I still sometimes need to remind myself when I see things like this.
On the upside, not only is blanket-downvoting every comment on a story, regardless of context, incredibly childish, it's also insanely counter-productive, since it makes totally clear that whatever amount of downvotes these people (assuming it's a plural) have piled onto the story itself are in no way reflective of reality and can be safely discarded. So that's something, at least.
As for the story itself... well, I was inclined favorably towards it anyway since it goes against the (in my view) terrible bit of writing that was that moment in the finale (and no, that's not a denigration of the pairing, just the execution) and counter-portrays it with a ship I really like**, but the story itself... I think it was really good even discounting all that. I always like it when stories remind us the strongest bonds with others don't have to be romantic or familial, the explanation was both amusing and acceptable and the shipping at the end... I really like the idea of it despite not being fond of the two characters in question, so... yeah, I'd say that's a bit of an achievement.
Only criticism is that it felt a little rushed - feel like the story could have dived a bit deeper into Pinkie and Fluttershy's relationship, but I still enjoyed it.
*What do you call a group of shippers anyway? And I'm not asking either rhetorically or wanting snide answers - I'm genuinely not sure of the term and I think there should be one. I guess you could call it a subcommunity, but I'm not sure that works given they're not always part of such a thing and there should be something more specific anyway.
**Another reason I don't want to generalize about shippers - stones and glass houses and all that.
okay I absolutely love the story as can tell by my profile picture and my username pinky shy is my favorite ship. But I'm not going to lie this paragraph got me really excited because I thought someone else was wedding polyamorous Pinkie Pie i love polyamorous Pinkie Pie especially since my favorite ship is actually Pinkie Pie Fluttershy and Discord and I seem to be the only one in existence that ships that the perfect all three of them balance each other out so much
Howdy hi~!
This was a quite fun bait and switch with a lot of really interesting character dynamics and great comedic bits. I really enjoyed the little small mannerisms you give to the characters to breathe life into them. The fic is also quite cozy and I enjoy how much it is the epitome of slice of life.
Now, admittedly, I do have to somewhat concede that this borders into parody. There are moments where characters and descriptions become less aspects of the story and more mouthpieces to conveying certain ideas. It would have been better to have them more naturally included into the flow rather than the sort of record scratch moments that they do occur.
Overall though, this was a super fun read with a cute comforting feel. Thanks for the read, Bike :)