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these image inserts are awsome
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Indeed, they add amazing depth to the story
This is interesting and I am enjoying it, but I just have to say... SPEEEEEEEEEEEED. We have gone from confused beginnings to first contact to feared monster to confrontation to prisoner to sort-of-friend. We have already hit nearly every plot point in the plotline of a friendly monster story, and I am pretty sure we are still on the first night. I feel like I have read an entire story and it should be wrapping up now it has gone so fast. It needs days in between these events to feel more natural. Nothing plot wise needs to happen in that intervening time, it could be as simple as "I spent the next week wandering the forest alone and practicing my speech before I encountered another pony (Luna)." or "She left me in the dungeon for 4 days, only entering to bring me food and watch me. It always felt like I was being judged as she sat outside my cell. Her stare silently searching for a reason to condemn me as a monster. I left her wanting each night." it is just important that an illusion of time is presented to make changes in the situation and character's stances more fluid.
The start of the story was okay, but now he's best friends with someone who hunted him down,beat the shit out of him, and intended to keep him around as a punching bag to torture? All for the crime of looking scary? That's kinda shit. I would expect Celestia would have to slap Luna and Twilight's shit in first before the ponies could be trusted.
Heh, ponies and their instant trust. It's a good thing Beepy isn't one to take advantage of such things...
Nice
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yeah. im pretty confused as to why luna is all buddy-buddy with a literal walking corpse. especially after she beat him to unconsciousness. less than a day ago. also, the Romance tag is kinda off-putting, really hope luna and the corpsemonster dont start dating or something. the mc literally has exposed bone and rotting flesh hanging down his body.
A world where Pony biast go unpunished.
Pony can attempt hurt or kill others and get praise for it. The Equestria shows its darker side...
I’m not far, but I feel like a ship is happening already, heck I even saw one of the chapter’s names that included NSFW
View's amazing no doubt