It's the Early Cretaceous period. Herds of sauropods, hadrosaurs, and ceratopsians are abundant in the territory of a pack of Utahraptors. The pack was in the middle of running down their next meal when they were distracted by a bright light in the sky. The next thing the pack knows, they find themselves in a strange place. It wasn't their territory. The pack didn't recognize the wildlife here. They need to find food. Perhaps they could eat these weird colorful big-eyed mammals they found.
Chapters (6)
Great first chapter, looking forward to seeing more of this story.
Until they became sentient raptors.
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What is this supposed to mean?
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I'm just saying that if the raptors went to Equestria, then the magic will affect them and made them sentient.
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That is not what's going to happen
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Okay, I hope the ponies don't get eaten by raptors.
I'm so glad that you cleared up what the pink thing was. I was worried it was an infant.
Good story, I'm a HUGE fan of dinosaurs and looking forward to seeing more of your story. Keep up the good work.
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I will.
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As much as I’m not opposed to having kids die in horror or dark stories, none are dying in my dinosaur stories.
I'm really enjoying this so far.
I hope we get some pov of the ponies soon, I want to know what their reactions will be
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Good to hear.
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I'm getting to that today.
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That’s not always guaranteed, to be fair. There are stories where the magic in Equestria actually kills or negatively affects the one transported to this world.
In this case, The Raptors not being affected at all is actually plausible. They weren’t born in Equestria, they were introduced.
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Exactly. When Twilight went to the human world, she couldn't use magic and she was obviously a human, but apart from that, she was still herself. I've read stories where humans who loved dinosaurs get teleported to Equestria as dinosaurs.
Great chapter as always, nice magic trick with Trixie.
I didn’t want to make the whole thing about the trick, so I cut it off right as Trixie was about to perform it.
Well here's a premise I don't think I've ever read before. Forget Human-in-Equestria; now we have Dinosaur-in-Equestria! Beyond that, your prose was well-written, especially in the Vora segments. The fish-out-of-water perspective was a good touch, although I think you could have been a little more detailed with your descriptions. (It took me a minute to recognize what the pig was.) The pony segments were competent, although the dialogue felt a bit utilitarian. I'm interested to see where things go from here, and I hope you find time to write more of this.
As a side note, you should probably add the "Violence" tag and consider bumping this up to at least a "T" rating. I'm not gonna report you over a pig being brutally killed in an "E" story, but someone here might.
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Thanks for the tips. I’ll definitely keep these in mind for the future.
Nice chapter, looking forward to the next one.
Good to hear.
Another good chapter with plenty to talk about. You have a good sense of detail; your description of Vora's condition was sickening, but not unnecessarily so. I do have a couple of things I feel the need to bring up through. For the life of me, I can't really picture someone as free-spirited as Tree Hugger running such a structured facility as the one she is here, although this is a nitpick. I recognize you needed somepony to run the sanctuary and that she was the obvious choice of character. More importantly though, I feel like her personality isn't being conveyed properly through her dialogue. In the show, every line of dialogue she has is dripping with personality, but here, she speaks in a much more boring way. Given the circumstances of this story, I can understand her being a bit more serious, but I still think you need a bit more of her eccentric mannerisms thrown in than you're currently including.
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Treehugger was the hardest character for me to use because of her unique personality and mannerisms. I just can’t figure out how to properly write her.