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Not bad, is English a second language to you? I ask because English does not use upside down punctuation at the start of sentences. Also you had cartoon box’s in your story that were likely cardboard boxes and her department was probably an apartment. But all that said still it’s pretty good.
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Yeah, im a native spanish speaker, so sorry for any language mistakes. Also, yeah i meant to put apartment and cardboard box, probably at the moment my mind did not think of the proper words. Might correct it later. Happy you like it so far. Will try to upload as soon as i can.
Also, ¿any feedback or "2 cents" you can give?. Since this is my first story im thinking perhaps im rushing things, i tought about starting to introduce the Mare OC with actual clop with clients before eventually the thing with the religious extremist stallion. Might put some of that later as flashbacks or something though.
Ok, you caught my attention. Interesting first chapter
Dude, I loved this first chapter, need to read the next
Any chance of a next chapter?
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yup, working on it currently. I ditched the idea of redooing it from zero so i will finish it and THEN "remake it".
Why don’t you refer to the main character by name?
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I like to use context. See, while we readers know who she is, the ponies there at the time dont. So while writting her in a context when no one knows her name, not using her name in the narrating until it is mentioned and digested by the other entities of the context it allows to paint a more "in the story" kind of feel for the reader.
At least i feel its that way.
My Spikey would never use such language...
Yea, I was taught better then that
Bastard? Really?