Two siblings enter a club to celebrate their 20th birthday. What they don't know is that the Dazzlings are there, equipped with the power to use lust to power their magic. Can they resist their spell, or will both become the Dazzlings' newest pets?
“Anyways… My name is Moonlight River, proud dancer for the Truly Bare club. Can I assume that you and your sister will be going to the club today?” The thestral mare asked. After hesitantly giving her a nod the mare formed a proud smile.
11277762 Yep. Both in "What Do you mean We Can't Eat Nuts!?" and "Wolf Tamed". This Moonlight is different compared to the two, a major one being that she's not a Lunar Guard due to the fact that there was no need to increase the army.
Okay, the chapter was quite entertaining, not to mention that you also introduce us to a new character, which in fact, technically is not new, but we already know him, and again you give us a reason for his situation.
Moonlight, in general, is a character referring to the Lunar guard, and apparently, her entry into that regiment was restricted because there was no room for her.
Even so, the interactions between these three characters were much more fun.
I like where things are going, and the fact that above all, there is that effect of mysticism to meet those who made that great club.
It's worth mentioning, and it's something I'd like you to do. Being a club, I think that even if there are boys and girls, the right thing would be for there to be more hints from both the viewers, more specifically from those who want to have sex. After all, it's that kind of club.
Not to mention that considering Midnight, Lightninig and Moonlight's body, there would really be a lot of studs and mares that would want to take them to bed, or at least there should be groping and that sort of thing.
But anyway, you are the writer, I only make that known.
But certainly this chapter was interesting, and above all it puts everything for the next chapter. I'm anxiously waiting to see the next one.
11278427 Thank you. And hey, did you like the art? I made it myself, but well soon afterwards a friend of mine made something that's just amazing, so I'm taking time to rapidly increase my drawing skills. Want to improve my art by a lot.
11284650 My phone has a problem with autocorrecting my words. I meant I was hoping that sonata would be the kind of person to hug someone when they first meet them I don't even know where it got post from but my phone has that problem.
Haven’t you used this character before?
11277762
Yep. Both in "What Do you mean We Can't Eat Nuts!?" and "Wolf Tamed". This Moonlight is different compared to the two, a major one being that she's not a Lunar Guard due to the fact that there was no need to increase the army.
A gorgous mare and Blitzer can't get a break, can he? I mean, his sister is almost like moonlight in build and...Libido
11277769
You like the drawing?
11277764
Oh ok
11277777
You liked the drawing?
11277771
Yep!
11277778
Yeah, it looked awesome and gave me a better idea on what lightning looked like.
11277797
Thanks
11277799
You’re welcome
Nice improvement on the first chapter, like how the beach is connected. Lightning and Moonlight are hot! Can't wait for the club kinkiness!
11277966
Thanks. You liked the drawing?
11277972
Yep, nice to have a visual of Lightning!
11278000
Thank you. She looks very good hm?
11278002
Uh-huh.
11278003
Thanks. It was very fun. So what do you want to see next chapter?
11278008
Naked clubbin'!
11278016
Yeah combined with your other idea this should be quite fun! Wish me luck
great chapter
11278288
thank you. you liked the surprise at the end?
11278310
Yep
(A ver, A ver, A ver.)
(Sate, Sate, Sate.)
Okay, the chapter was quite entertaining, not to mention that you also introduce us to a new character, which in fact, technically is not new, but we already know him, and again you give us a reason for his situation.
Moonlight, in general, is a character referring to the Lunar guard, and apparently, her entry into that regiment was restricted because there was no room for her.
Even so, the interactions between these three characters were much more fun.
I like where things are going, and the fact that above all, there is that effect of mysticism to meet those who made that great club.
It's worth mentioning, and it's something I'd like you to do. Being a club, I think that even if there are boys and girls, the right thing would be for there to be more hints from both the viewers, more specifically from those who want to have sex. After all, it's that kind of club.
Not to mention that considering Midnight, Lightninig and Moonlight's body, there would really be a lot of studs and mares that would want to take them to bed, or at least there should be groping and that sort of thing.
But anyway, you are the writer, I only make that known.
But certainly this chapter was interesting, and above all it puts everything for the next chapter. I'm anxiously waiting to see the next one.
11278427
Thank you. And hey, did you like the art?
I made it myself, but well soon afterwards a friend of mine made something that's just amazing, so I'm taking time to rapidly increase my drawing skills. Want to improve my art by a lot.
awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter
11283960
Thx
Kind of hoping sonata is that kind of person that would hug someone upon meeting them kind of like pinkie
11284508
can you expand further?
11284650
My phone has a problem with autocorrecting my words. I meant I was hoping that sonata would be the kind of person to hug someone when they first meet them I don't even know where it got post from but my phone has that problem.
11284655
Yeah autocorrect is so annoying.
Idk I guess we'll see. The Dazzlings might be a bit different compared to their EG version.