Diary of *illegibly smudged*

Found in what remained of Ponyville XXXX years after the Event.

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Secundum

Secundum #1 · Jun 26th, 2022 · 1 · · The Last Page ·

What was the context? I couldn't find the timestamp.

Still, I liked the Lovecraft-esque.

FanOfMostEverything

FanOfMostEverything #2 · Jun 27th, 2022 · 2 · · The Last Page ·

Oh. Oh no.

Fascinating and horrifying way to weave together the generations. I can’t help but wonder if this is the origin of Morpho Knight. Nothing less than the all-consuming Void can overcome this monstrosity. Thank you for this, and best of luck in the judging.

TheAncientPolitzanian

TheAncientPolitzanian #3 · Jun 27th, 2022 · 3 · 1 · The Last Page ·

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In the Maretime Bay Adventure video game, there's a butterfly named Shimmerwing who guides you to your next objective if you get lost.

Starlight Nova

Starlight Nova #4 · Jun 27th, 2022 · · · The Last Page ·

Why isn't there a tragedy tag?

Thought Prism

Thought Prism #5 · Jun 27th, 2022 · 2 · 1 · The Last Page ·

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Tragedy is generally when the bad outcome is due to faults in the protagonist's character. In this case, it wasn't really the writer's fault. He was being manipulated by an outside force.

Thought Prism

Thought Prism #6 · Jun 27th, 2022 · · 1 · The Last Page ·

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Yep, you said that on my review of the game, too, haha.

Captain Neckbeard

Captain Neckbeard #7 · Jun 27th, 2022 · 1 · · The Last Page ·

Poor *illegibly smudged*. He/she deserved a better father/husband. But no, he had to bring doom upon Equestria!

Comment posted by overdue deleted Jun 28th, 2022

Neece

Neece #9 · Jun 27th, 2022 · 2 · · The Last Page ·

Darkest Dungeon vibes, the good ones. Good story!

Green121

Green121 #10 · Jun 28th, 2022 · · · Page 55 ·

Well that's not ominous at all

Green121

Green121 #11 · Jun 28th, 2022 · 1 · · The Last Page ·

Aw hell naw G4 got cosmic horror'd 😭😭

The Blue EM2

The Blue EM2 #12 · Jun 28th, 2022 · 2 · · The Last Page ·

The video timestamp doesn't seem to be working. Could you indicate the relevant part of the video?

Prince Apollo

Prince Apollo #13 · Jun 29th, 2022 · · · Page 14 ·

Ok, at this point in time, we know the following about our mysterious writer
-fully grown
-stallion

lochbessie

lochbessie #14 · Jul 5th, 2022 · · · Page 14 ·

Stars! I met the most beautiful mare today, and we just seemed to click immediately! Her name is *illegibly smudged*, and she's positively radiant. As charming to converse with as she is to look at! She works at the local salon, so it was no wonder we hadn't met before now. Of course, I turned into a gibbering mess when I tried to introduce myself. I'm a full-grown stallion, not a schoolfilly, I should know how not to trip over my own tongue by now. How embarrassing. That doesn't matter, though, because she didn't seem to mind. I got a date regardless! We're meeting again tomorrow at the park, I can hardly contain myself! I'll be sure to write how it goes.

https://youtu.be/Nu1NX6Rt6vY

Edit: turns out the main character isn’t Twilight Sparkle, so nevermind ignore this comment

lochbessie

lochbessie #15 · Jul 5th, 2022 · 1 · · Page 55 ·

EEEE! She said yes! She said yes! I'm so happy! We're going to move in together immediately, and I'm taking care of the logistics there while *illegibly smudged* plans our wedding! We shall beckon our friends and family from all corners of Equestria to be there on our special day, a day of purpose fulfilled! The firmament quakes in anticipation of our glorious union, and joy shakes my very being! My destiny is nigh at last! Does the way I phrased that seem weird at all, diary? Eh, it's probably nothing, I'm just overcome with emotion right now and the words just sort of flow out! Still, I should probably stop, though. She's waiting for me, after all!

Wait WTF it’s been one month????
This stuff right here is why America nearly has a 50% divorce rate.

lochbessie

lochbessie #16 · Jul 5th, 2022 · · · Page 144 ·

*illegibly smudged*

OMFG was writing “redacted too overused???
Me after reading illegibly smudged for the 10000 time
https://wiki.teamfortress.com/w/images/f/f0/Scout_dominationsol02.wav
https://wiki.teamfortress.com/w/images/3/37/Scout_dominationdem01.wav

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #17 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · · Page 1 ·

Contrary to its name, Ponyville is the friendliest place in Equestria when it comes to other creatures, so I was obviously confused. I asked around, but none of my friends knew why they were leaving all of a sudden either. Even when pressed, no Breezie would say. Something has them quite spooked.

do love depictions of post-canon Ponyville striving to be a place for all creatures, and that definitely makes the Breezie migration more ominous!

I got pulled into a song with a bunch of creatures and we got the place rebuilt lickety-split. It was surprisingly rewarding. Maybe I should take up construction as a side hobby. I got this indescribable feeling of accomplishment helping turn a pile of materials into a finished structure.

aww, hints at how pony psychology differs from our own! it certainly would explain just how often and how enthusiastic ponies are about getting wrapped up in group songs, as well as just how easily and often ponies seem to rebuild their buildings

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #18 · Sep 12th, 2022 · 1 · · Page 6 ·

I'd seen yellow and black ones before, but never any with six wings.

if this is referencing something, i have no idea what it is, so i guess i am in the horseshoes of the unnamed narrator here! i would definitely be a bit freaked out by this strange bug

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #19 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · 1 · Page 7 ·

I never thought I'd say this after moving here, but Ponyville is beginning to grow monotonous.

aww, already a contrast with just how nice the narrator's life was in the first chapter!

Since I had the whole day to myself, I decided on a whim to actually follow the butterfly. To my pleasant surprise, it led me to the arcade. I'd never been, believing such flashy indulgences to be merely a way for parents to keep their foals distracted. However, I ended up having a lot of fun aiming for high scores in skee ball and Pac-A-Sprite.

well that is a very mundane place for this mysterious bug to lead the narrator to! glad they had fun at the arcade, though

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #20 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · 1 · Page 12 ·

I may not be a national hero like some of my neighbors, but thanks to Lucky, things seem to be looking up.

hehe, Ponyville is dense with those, isn't it?

For example, the only time Lucky leaves my side now is when I'm in the bathroom, as if it understands I need privacy then.

that definitely concerns me more than if Lucky did not do that.

I'll stick to my nothing, thanks.

hehe, a sentence that can only be said in the context of Equestria, augh i love this place. also, i bet Rarity and Maud's fashion show was really great! pearls before swine...

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #21 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · 1 · Page 14 ·

Her name is *illegibly smudged*, and she's positively radiant.

what a beautiful name!

There's this little quirk she has where her ears flick whenever I complement her, it's too adorable.

augh that really is too adorable

*illegibly smudged* tried to hide it, but she seemed a tad unsettled by my relationship with Lucky, who watched us the entire time.

yeah i don't blame her...

Less magical, more primal, with points of light within akin to unfathomably distant stars. My eyes begin to ache if I stare for too long. No other creature seems to be able to see the trails.

curioser and curiouser!

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #22 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · · Page 55 ·

Both she and Lucky have been so good to me; I have to convey the full extent of my gratitude to my love and my guardian angel both.

aww, so cute!

But the more closely I listen, the harder I try, the more clear it becomes that the message is too complex for my comprehension. And yet I cannot stop. I must understand. For at its end lies true purpose, the ultimate will governing reality, far beyond even the alicorns. Whew, okay, it's out. All good, now! Hooves crossed!

oof, that is quite the contrast to the previous paragraph!

We shall beckon our friends and family from all corners of Equestria to be there on our special day, a day of purpose fulfilled! The firmament quakes in anticipation of our glorious union, and joy shakes my very being! My destiny is nigh at last! Does the way I phrased that seem weird at all, diary? Eh, it's probably nothing, I'm just overcome with emotion right now and the words just sort of flow out! Still, I should probably stop, though. She's waiting for me, after all!

oh yeah that is an interesting mix of registers. i do wonder where this will go

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #23 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · · Page 133 ·

After quite a harrowing yet miraculous ordeal, our foal was born today!

oh wow this guy is absolutely speedrunning these life milestones

Lucky gave us a name: *illegibly smudged*.

aww, just like his mother, how perfect!

His eyes are indeed black, and both of us had to admit that the other schoolfoals would think it was totally cool once he was a few years older, like a comic book character. Sure, it's a bit much, and more than a bit ominous, but at least it's easy to remember. The important thing is still to raise him right, keep him fed, happy, and safe. Very, very safe.

well this is making me speculate that Lucky is some sort of magical life-parasite, and the narrator's son is a continuation of its life cycle. also, yay Tempest Shadow!

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #24 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · · Page 139 ·

Yet the Book is but a lost fraction of a fraction of what it will bring. Each page is an oozing string, the universe is a fabric, and I am the needle, willed by limbs seen and unseen.

well then! that doesn't sound good!

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #25 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · · Page 143 ·

My benefactor and patron never falters. In fact, I don't think I've ever seen Lucky eat or sleep at all since we've met. Not even once. Truly inspiring!

yeah i guess the allure of a magical bug that watches you at all times except when you're in the bathroom would be a bit undercut by it needing to eat or sleep

Much to my horror, she swept up Lucky in a bug net to be released into the winds!

hahaha i do love this mental image, of the wife just effortlessly yoinking away the mysterious eldritch not-butterfly. honestly it would be a pretty funny comedic ending to the whole story if that is juts how it ended

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #26 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · 1 · Page 144 ·

*illegibly smudged* was shaking with fear, whispering about how no butterfly should be able to shatter solid oak, but I comforted her. She had nothing at all to be afraid of. I told her she should be glad her mistake had no lasting consequences, for surely they would have been dire given the magnitude of her transgressions. Yes, none shall defy. Why would you? Only miracles await us now! Endless, endless, endless.

oof, would really hate to be the wife right now!

The Book makes it clear. Lucky makes it clear. The reality of what lies at the dawn, the reality slowly peeling, peeling, peeling beneath my bones, as it unfurls and divides and tessellates, I am but mere steps away from the full picture without the picture without the picture. If she cannot see that, then she can go, taking *illegibly smudged* and all other distractions with her. In fact, I'll encourage her.

least insane Equestrian

When all is finished, I hope whoever finds this diary understands for posterity that my joy in undertaking this sacred churning, prying, tearing was just as great in magnitude as that which everycreature will feel once I share my findings! Now. Back to the task.

oh hey that's us we found the diary!

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #27 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · · Pages 145-192 ·

dang, 48 pages of this! that is dedication

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #28 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · · Page 193 ·

A new golden age for ponykind is about to begin, where the burdens of existence may be shed! None shall toil, but instead be moved! The atoms, the cosmos, even Princess Twilight Sparkle will do as IT wishes, as ITS will is the only will!
*illegibly smudged*
IT has left me, as expected. I am alone again, but not truly. I will wait for IT to return, for my existence has no meaning without ITS perfect guidance.

oof, that didn't last!

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #29 · Sep 12th, 2022 · · 1 · The Last Page ·

I only erased all the dates and mentions of our names so that I nor my family end up blamed for what my father did. What his desperation brought upon Equestria. It wasn't his fault. If not him, another pony would have been chosen.

aww, so that's why all the names are redacted!

And even if not, even if you forget your own name, you must remember this: do not obey the Six Winged One! Do not obey Shimmerwing! Do not obey!

hehehe, as a shaggy dog story that brings together an explanation of the G4-G5 transition and a way to make a video game contrivance make sense within the context of the universe, this was really great! and the contrast between the very bright and fun vibe of the game and the sinister implications of the eldritch creature behind it is just very fun. i am a sucker for stories with elements like this, and enjoyed them greatly. thank you for writing!

Thought Prism