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    On a sleeper train in the frozen north, sleep is eluding two travelers.
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    Nights in Canterlot are for sharing secrets. Ten years have passed, and the six friends have begun to walk their own paths. A burdened princess meets a friendly face among the crowds.
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  • 44w, 4d
    In Her Blood is Back

    Hey guys,

    First of all, sorry if this is sort of a blunt blog post. I just wrote out this whole entire 1500-word post and then my computer decided that the page desperately needed refreshing. So right now I have literally no desire to try and remember what I said (although I do have a pretty severe desire to direct my computer window-wards, or make an entire blog post consisting of 1500 words' worth of AAAAAAAAAAAA). But I digress.

    Anyway, you know what they say, a 9-month hiatus can do a story good.

    No, wait. That's not what they say. Nobody says that because it would be a silly thing to say.

    The good news is, however, that In Her Blood is back! The hiatus mostly happened in the first place due to an unhealthy dose of exams and university application nonsense, which sapped most of my time and all of my motivation. Once the momentum stops on a story like this, getting it back again is pretty difficult, which is why I decided to write the relatively-short Shadow of a Doubt, before jumping back into a big multi-part project. However, the essays are written, the results are in, the nails are bitten, the paperwork is sent and then interviews have been sat. Until next summer (which will be infinitely less insane) it's over, for now.

    Which of course means I can get back to writing on a more regular, committed kind of basis. Honestly, I can't apologise enough for leaving you all hanging for so long on this story. I'm ridiculously sorry, it completely sucks. So anyway, without any more waffling, have a new chapter! The one after this is already 2000 words deep in the writing mill, so with any luck you won't be left waiting until September 2014 for it to happen.

    Also, to make up for making you wait for so long, I'm also currently working on another project, namely the multi-part AppleDash story I plotted out with Tchernobog several aeons ago. The first chapter is written and the second one is on the way; my plan with this story is to write the whole thing (probably 5-6 chapters) and then post the whole thing, rather than posting each chapter as it's done. That way I get to go back and edit earlier parts, look at the finished thing and make any necessary changes, and generally avoid all the godawful and unchangeable early-chapter-plotting-errors that plagued me with Bluebird's Song. I'll see how that works out. All it needs now is a title! In other news, it contains a pair of Only Fools and Horses-style cockney merchant ponies who are far too fun to write.

    Obviously, I'm writing this on the assumption that anyone still remembers/cares about In Her Blood. To anyone who's still here and reading this, thank you so ridiculously much for sticking with the story. To anyone not reading this, I can completely understand why.

    Once again, sorry for the 9-month hiatus. I swear I've not been pregnant.

    Pony on, etc.

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  • 56w, 6d
    The Shadow of a Doubt

    Hi guys!

    Okay, long story short, I realise I've been pretty useless these last few months in terms of actually putting out fresh poni-words. However, I've finally gotten back on the horse dammit gotten back to the keyboard and finished up that one-shot I've been talking about for years.

    Originally it was planned to be a shortish one-shot of around 3000 words, but it went and did a Bluebird on me and ended up around 18,000 words instead, hence the irritatingly long writing time. It's still technically a one-shot, but I've split it up into 2 parts so it's a little more readable.

    Anyhow, the story is currently in the approval mill, so if all goes well a healthy dose of RariLight should appear sometime tomorrow.

    Sorry again for being absent from the write-o-sphere for so many months; it wasn't a loss of interest, it was more a case of real life and varying degrees of exam stupidity getting in the way. It's actually really nice to be writing again, and I'll hopefully keep doing so for the foreseeable future. For those of you who've stuck around and are reading this, an enormous thank you. It really means a lot.

    Onwards to horse romance!

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  • 62w, 6d
    A Progress Report, and In Her Blood info!

    Bonjour peoples.

    Obviously there's been quite a long silence since my last blog, for which I apologize loudly; these last weeks have been packed up with everything from learning to drive to personal statement writing. However, they've also been filled with writing of a more poni-ish variety, so here's a quick blog to keep you guys informed as to where and what I'm up to with my stories. I know I've not posted anything new since the last blog, but I've written about 25,000 words of various well-on-the-way projects since then, so the time has by no means gone to waste.

    3 ongoing projects at this point, really, so I might as well trot them out in the order they're likely to appear.

    Firstly, that time-skipped Rarity and Twilight story I mentioned. I can finally drop out a title for that, which will be 'The Shadow of a Doubt'. Set roughly 10 years after the first episode, when the Mane 6 have begun to go their separate ways, it follows Rarity taking a down-in-the-dumps Twilight out for an evening in Canterlot. It's a bit experimental; hopefully it works out. It got a little out of one-shot territory and is currently floating at about 18,000 words, so I may chop it up into two or three chapters, although it was written (and should be read) as one continuous chapter. In any case, it's about 95% done, and should be baked, seasoned and ready to serve up soon enough.

    Next, a project I discussed in quite a lot of length with the AppleDash deity Tchernobog more than half a year ago... It's an AppleDash story (naturally!) and is set shortly after Dragonshy. The first chapter of that is about 80% complete. I wanted to write something a bit more lighthearted after my recent spate of dark/psychological stuff, and an old-style Season-1 AppleDash romance-comedy seemed just the thing. It's given me a chance to write some dragon lore, which was fun.

    Now, finally, In Her Blood. The hiatus on that one has really gone on for entirely too long by now, and to tell the truth, it was because I didn't know where to go with it. Don't get me wrong; I know exactly where the narrative is headed, but I couldn't figure out a good way to make the next couple of chapters work, plus I wanted to make a bunch of changes to Trixie's character which may require a bit of early-chapter editing. As a result of a whole bunch of little worries combined with the great big sense of 'well damn, how do I make these chapters work?', the story got shelved and, quite honestly, I've procrastinated getting back to it.

    However, I'm about to get back to it now. I've figured out a much easier way of making the new chapters work, and I finally feel motivated to pick up the keyboard on this one once again. I'm going to be away for another week from tomorrow, although I'll have my laptop meaning I can make progress while I'm away. So expect a healthy fix of TrixieShy in the near future! :yay:

    So now y'all know what's going on! Sorry once again that I've not dropped out any new writings since May-ish, however the writey dry spell will soon be over.

    Pony on, etc.  

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  • 72w, 1d
    Not-deadness, new stories and rusty turnips.

    Hey guys,

    I'm back, in typical Ardensfax fashion, a month too late with a pack of excuses. I'll simply say this, however; screw exams. Screw exams in every available orifice with a rusty turnip. Okay, I think I got that out of my system; basically, exams are over, things are easing off a little, and story stirrings are happening. Assuming anyone's still here.

    To be honest, after two solid months of writing nothing but politics and history essays which are about as dry as toasted sand, I feel like it's taking a bit of time to get into the old process of creative writing again. However, things are happening.

    Firstly, to deal with the elephant in the room; In Her Blood. It isn't cancelled, but I don't honestly feel confident or motivated enough to continue it right at the present moment. I'm honestly sorry, I'm not normally one to start a project then leave it hanging, but I honestly don't want to mess up the last act, and I also need to re-evaluate what I have currently and decide if it needs salvaging or not. However, I'm currently 5000 words deep in an unrelated one-shot (to give a short summary: Twilight, Rarity, ten years in the future) so I will be coming out with some fresh pony-words soon enough.

    In addition, I'm planning on finally undertaking those rewrites to A Bluebird's Song which I've been putting off for so long. Hopefully when they're done, the grammar should be fixed, a few new early chapters should be added to pad out the relationship a little, and the plague of one-word 'thankyou's should be eliminated. It might take a while, but on the whole I'm pretty proud of Bluebird, but whenever I look back on it, I just remember the godawful rushed romance in the first few chapters. I guess I just don't want to remember it as 'that one fic that wasn't quite right'.

    Also, I'm vaguely considering something else entirely new, hopefully a bit of a departure from the dark stuff my longer stories have turned into. No concrete facts yet, but suffice it to say it will be two things; extremely weird, and multi-chapter.

    Hope you people are all okay, sorry again for my absence, and equally sorry if this blog reads like half-drunk musings, because right now it's 2 in the morning and the sleep madness is punching me in the middle of the face.

    Also, I realise this is like a corner shop advertising for Wal-Mart, and that it hardly needs the signal boosting, but if you've not read University Days and like VinylTavia shipping, you really ought to. Seriously, that fic is pure gold (and it makes me wish I could write comedy).

    Anyhow, keep ponying on.

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  • 81w, 6d
    In Her Blood - Possible Hiatus

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Every rising star must eventually fall. Rainbow Dash is locked in a struggle against her own past, and with the help of Twilight is about to make a discovery that will change the way she flies forever. But what will she lose in the process?

Massive thanks to Furor1 and Nyuuchandiannepie for the ridiculously awesome artwork, you should really check them out on DeviantArt if you've not already.

Dedicated to Donald Campbell and his Bluebird, for chasing his horizons for no other reason than the fact that they were there. Also to Steve Hogarth and Marillion for writing Out Of This World, the song that inspired this story.

  

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23rd Dec 2011
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28th Jul 2012
#1 · 148w, 20h ago · · · Old News ·

Hi, just a quick request. If anyone wants to rate this story particularly low, it'd be much appreciated if you could leave a constructive reason for doing so in the comments, so that I can improve. Getting a 0.5 star rating for my first rating with no explanation whatsoever is kind of disheartening.

EDIT: It appears that some troll has been going down all of the stories posted today, rating them 0.5 stars. Well, yay for that. :facehoof:

#2 · 148w, 18h ago · · · Old News ·

trolls will be trolls i guess story looks intresting and with the anonymous ratings disabled cause of the rate bombings hopefully it will start getting the higher rating it deserves.

#3 · 148w, 17h ago · · · Old News ·

Thanks for the support! :pinkiehappy: Ah well, can't stop the trolls trollin', I guess...

#4 · 148w, 13h ago · · · Old News ·

Hey, I enjoyed this first chapter. Don't let the trolls get you down :P

#5 · 147w, 6d ago · · · Waiting To Happen ·

New chapter for you guys, relieved to have gotten this up before Christmas. Sorry it's a bit on the short side, but woo, internal monologues! :pinkiecrazy:

#6 · 147w, 6d ago · · · Waiting To Happen ·

This is turning into one of my favourite stories at the moment! I'm off to read the Wikipedia article on Imposter Syndrome now.

#7 · 147w, 6d ago · · · Waiting To Happen ·

>>85641 Thanks a lot! :twilightblush: Must admit I only heard about Imposter Syndrome myself a short time before I started writing this, but I thought it was a bit more varied than the straight up depression that Dash often suffers from in fanfics. Man, this fanbase loves to be cruel to its characters sometimes...

#8 · 147w, 3d ago · · · These Cold Reflections ·

Long chapter is long... :rainbowhuh: This one kind of ran away with me, decided to go for some background exposition stuff. Hope you all like it!

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#9 · 147w, 3d ago · · · These Cold Reflections ·

I don't mind log chapters longness, in fact I approve!

Awesome story really can't think of much else to say

#10 · 147w, 3d ago · · · These Cold Reflections ·

Great story, keep up the good work!

#11 · 147w, 2d ago · · · These Cold Reflections ·

:derpytongue2:4000 is about average from what ive read ive seen stories with capters anywhere from 9,000 to 14,000 words that i consider long.

#12 · 147w, 1d ago · · · These Cold Reflections ·

Thanks for the positive feedback, everyone! :yay:

>>93685 True, there are some pretty long chapters out there in the Fanfic universe. I meant in comparison to the previous chapter more than anything. The average chapter length for this story will probably be just on the upside of 3000.

#13 · 146w, 6d ago · · · All I Never Told You ·

New chapter for y'all, hope you like it. Over here it's been 2012 for 3 hours now... Happy New Year everypony! :yay:

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#14 · 146w, 6d ago · · · All I Never Told You ·

...:heart:

Sorry that's all I got.

#15 · 146w, 5d ago · · · Waiting To Happen ·

I apologise for the wall of text this comment's going to take up, but it's necessary IMHO.

First off, let me say I've really enjoyed it to this point. The only thing that really jumped out at me was that one of the paragraphs was FAR too long. I've given a suggestion as to how to break it up below,

I hope she’s okay, Twilight thought concernedly* with concern as she closed the door. Turning away, she paused. Was I seriously just worrying about sounding flirty? She felt her face become flushed again as she remembered. Now that the haze of worry had passed, and she had time to think about it, the more bothered she was by the last ten minutes. Why did I hug her like that? I guess I was concerned, but still…If she was honest with herself, she knew that something else had come close to happening as they lay together in front of the empty grate. Twilight put a hoof to her head, mentally berating her heart for choosing this moment to spring something like this on her.Oh Celestia, this is such a bad time. I don’t know anything about this kind of thing! <<new paragraph>>

This was perfectly true. In the years she had spent under the Princess’s tutelage, it was rare that she would speak more than three consecutive words to another pony outside of study conditions. This isolation had been largely of her own creation, driven by her inclination for academic work, but had largely precluded her from having any kind of romantic involvement with other ponies. She was not entirely oblivious of the feelings involved in such situations. Indeed, she would be a liar if she claimed never to have harboured slightly inappropriate fantasies concerning her regal mentor, (she went even redder at this thought, rapidly locking it back up again in some sealed box in back of her mind.) However, she had honestly never even thought about that sort of thing since she had arrived in Ponyville, particularly not about her friends. She supposed that this was understandable, after all, fighting dragons, hydras and goodness-knows-what else was bound to be fairly distracting. But now, she was forced to accept that seeing Dash without her bluster and abrasive brashness had changed the way she saw her. Suddenly her friend was beautiful. <<additional paragraph break. Probably unnecessary, but it brings Twi's thoughts into sharper focus IMHO>>

“Why now? Why her?” she whispered. Remembering looking into her friend’s eyes made her heart pound almost painfully, seeing Dash’s gentler self behind the gleaming magenta windows, without the shields of boastfulness that she had spent so long building.

<<rest of text as is>>

That's probably about as good as I can do on splitting the paragraph, but that particular paragraph REALLY needs splitting. It affects readability quite a lot. I also felt "becoming flushed" flowed better than "becoming coloured" flows just a smidgin better, but that's *really* a nitpick.

With that out of the way, keep up the good work! That paragraph was the only thing I really have to criticise - the rest of it really is VERY good.

*I'm pretty sure concernedly isn't a word, and even if it is, it sounds clunky here. The comma's probably not needed here with the changes. I've also simplified a sentence there. The italics have been established with the first thought as indicating Twilight's thought, and it's redundant to mention it as her thought one sentence after this has been established.

You don't have to follow my suggestions of course, but I figured, what the hay.

Apologies for the ludicrously long comment.

#16 · 146w, 5d ago · · · Waiting To Happen ·

>>100518 Thanks so much for the epic comment! It's brilliant to get some detailed feedback.

Now I come to read back over the chapter that paragraph is rather on the enormous side! I'll definitely edit to chop that up a bit. Actually, now I think about it, the last paragraph change you suggested is right at a transition from 'Twilight's-internal-monologue' to 'Twilight-actually-speaking-aloud' so it could easily be regarded as a change in speaking character.

The online dictionary seems to think that 'concernedly' is a word, (although the Microsoft Word spellchecker dictionary doesn't seem to, so the jury's out on that one), but, existent or not, I agree it seems clunky used in that setting.

No need to apologise for the ludicrously long comment, they're the best kind. I'm glad you think that it's generally good!

EDIT: Changes have now been put in. Many thanks again for the feedback!

Brilliant! I know it's against Dash's new (or old, I guess) views, but I still can't wait till she rainbooms the hell out of that Lightning guy. :rainbowdetermined2:

And the Twidash is just superb! Really loving how it's progressing--maybe it IS a little rushed, but it seems to me that it's rushed in a way that is still believable.

#18 · 146w, 1d ago · 1 · · There's Nothing Stranger ·

TwiDash ship is best ship  

>>110300 Thanks a lot for the support! If Lightning's actually introduced as a character, he'll most likely be a quite background-ish one. (It's a bit too Mary Sue for comfort otherwise.) I wanted him to be more an outside force than an actual character. With regards to the speed the TwiDash's happening at, I wanted it to seem as if the characters themselves are rushing into it a bit, perhaps too fast for their own good, rather than making it seem that it's being forced along by the author. I hope it struck that balance.

>>110581 Must admit I'm more of a TwiShy fan myself under normal circumstances, but this narrative needed somepony who could realistically break a speed record, and Fluttershy... Well, she probably couldn't. :rainbowlaugh:

D'aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaw!!!

I love this story!! Poor Rainbow. I wanna hug her so bad. :fluttercry:

Hmm, your take on Rainbow's psychology is sort of similar my views in 'Faded Rainbow'

I love the shipping cuteness. TwiDash is adorable.

The story was really well written and the characters practically leaped off the page. Loved it!

Can't wait for more!

New chapter! Take that, writer's block! :pinkiehappy: I decided to include Rarity at last, after much procrastination and rewriting. Pinkie is probably sad now for not being included, but I have plans for her. :pinkiecrazy: (Probably.)

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Winning? You also totally had the same idea as i did. Good job with where you're taking it.

I like your thoughts on how Pegasi can fly with such disproportionately small wings! It makes a lot of sense, though it poses some unfortunate implications for my favorite Pegasus. :rainbowdetermined2: If every Pegasus knew they could potentially break the sound barrier just by believing in themselves, they'd be pulling off sonic rainbooms left and right! :rainbowlaugh: PREPOSTEROUS!

I somewhat agree with SatoshiKyuionpuno but this is a good story overall, like the concept of the wing thingy should make her fly better cuz shes in luv with Twilight and stuff. They also should join together and steal Celestias powers and imprison her, then they rule Equestria.

>>119765 Thanks! :pinkiesmile: I need to read your stuff so I can stop accidentally ripping off your ideas! :derpytongue2:

>>119795 I must admit, I'm kind of regarding Dash as having abnormal amounts of determination, confidence, the general 'winning spirit' as compared to most Pegasi. In my headcanon, based on what I've seen in the series, the majority of Pegasi are pretty tenacious, but Dash's instinctual ability is way beyond most. It's in the same way that Twilight's magical ability is so far beyond most Unicorns.

>>121582 Curses! My nefarious plans have been revealed! Cheese for everyone! :pinkiecrazy:

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>>121969 It's ok man! I never got around to finishing the one chapter I did have and deleted that story. I do have a strange fixation on the many pony psychology stories I keep running into....

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ONLY 1000 VIEWS? ALLOW ME TO CHANGE THAT!

(This story definitely deserves more view than it's current total.

New chapter time! :pinkiehappy: Sorry this one's a tad on the filler-ish side, I just wanted to tie up a few details of the TwiDash stuff before launching into the 'Experiment' story arc. Also I wanted to give them a nice ending to their first day. (Uh-oh, I'm empathizing with fictional characters. This way madness lies!) :derpytongue2:

>>121995 I must admit I have quite a thing for psychology fics as well. Actually, the original Pony Psychology series is still one of my favourite MLP fanfics out there.

>>122001 Well, thanks! :yay: I must admit, the lack of views compared to most stories with this many chapters is probably due to the fact that I have absolutely no idea about posting at peak times, etc. (I'm in England, so my chapters probably tend to go up at 3 in the morning or work/school hours or something.)

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>>124669 I know what you mean about peak times. I usually post around 1 am central, which for some reason is about the only time my fic gets any views. It still is crazy that your fic has so few views though!

Good chapter, great grammar. I think this deserves more views.

I agree with the rest, it definitely deserves more views!

Can't wait to read the next part!

>>124675 Well, I'm glad you think it deserves more! :pinkiehappy: Hopefully it'll pick up a bit now there's quite a lot of chapters.

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>>126686

Thanks a lot to both of you! :twilightblush: Just prepping the next chapter for publishing as I type this, actually.

#34 · 145w, 10h ago · · · Old News ·

Five stars!

#35 · 145w, 9h ago · · · To Catch A Bluebird ·

OOOOOOOOOOOHHHHH woooo Dash finally overcame her feaaaaaaaar.

#36 · 145w, 7h ago · · · Waiting To Happen ·

This is a great story, some of the best characterization I've seen from a Rainbow Dash story. Psh, study for Praxis tomorrow? Nah, TwiDash is all I need! :rainbowlaugh:

#37 · 145w, 7h ago · · · These Cold Reflections ·

"She had never before heard Fluttershy accuse anypony of being a sack of anything,"

I love your writing style so much, this is such an easy read, my eyes drink it up. It's hard to describe what reading is like to me, but I can tell a really cohesive work when I see one and this is a prime example, a million awesome points to you!

"“I walked in on Twilight and Rainbow Dash kissing on the rug this morning!” he blurted out in a single breath, before he could prevent himself.

You’re dead."

I lol-ed, that scene was perfect, haha

"Twilight lived for the moments when she could simply gaze into those deep magenta pools, but each of those moments were tempered with sympathetic pain for the scars that her love still bore inside her, long after her father’s hoof-marks had faded, and long after the Flight School nicknames and taunts had stopped echoing in her ears. Twilight wished that there was some way for her to help, some way that she could change Dash’s past, but she knew that it was a challenge beyond her intellect. All that she could try to do was to give her the future she deserved."

Agh, I loved this paragraph, Twilight's adorable and awesome. Keep up the great writing!

#40 · 145w, 4h ago · · · To Catch A Bluebird ·

I totally expected Dash to pull a Spiderman there. Hover in front of and just above Twilight, and then roll upside down and kiss her. :rainbowlaugh::twilightblush: The thought was strangely both amusing and adorable all at once.

Woo, plot development! This was a very fun chapter to write. :pinkiecrazy:

>>129360 Thanks a lot! :pinkiehappy: Glad you're enjoying the story.

>>129757 Dang, I missed an opportunity there. :facehoof: I could even have slipped in a 'friendly neighborhood' joke as well!

Wow...shit suddenly got REAL!

LOVE IT

There must be some sort of purpose for them doing this, who knows? Perhaps Twilight might join them, or Dash, or both. Or one of the gets cut in half and only half of Twilight goes, or only half of Dash goes, or both of them cut in half goes.

But the being cut in half brings the possibility of dieing so maybe Twilight doesn't go, or Dash doesn't go, or both of them don't go.

Also, with the possibility of death means that the possibility that only one of them dies so maybe, Twilight joins or Dash joins.

Not to mention all the possibilities if only one of them dies, so maybe Dash joins, or Twilight joins, or even both

Or Twilight joins, or even both, or dash.

And, or even both, Twilight joins or Dash joins.

Also, someone they might not like, like Trixie may be in there group too, so this brings the possibility of revenge, okay I'm sounding retarded now with this piece of shit reply.

If this is a piece of shit reply, it brings the possibility of being hated on, which may start a flame war, and if that happens the owner of this site might ban us and track down our ips to kill us in real life.

Whew, got it posted in time. :pinkiehappy: This is part one of probably 2 or 3. This particular bit of the arc felt too cohesive to be split under different chapter names, but I didn't want to make everyone wait for me to spend all week bashing out a 10,000-worder. So, here's part one!

Awesome, the plot thickens. Can't wait to see Celestia kick major ass! :trollestia:

Oh, when will these random evil pony organizations learn that you don't mess with Celestia's favorite pupil (possibly the most powerful Unicorn in existence and an Element of Harmony) or the fastest Pegasus to have ever roamed Equestria's skies (another Element of Harmony who can turn herself into a living nuke and walk away without a scratch). Screwing with both of them at once is just asking for a beatdown, really... :rainbowlaugh::facehoof:

IT'S GO TIME. :rainbowdetermined2::twilightangry2:

>>141346 Stop! Celestia time! *Epic breakdown* :pinkiecrazy:

>>141722 This lot have done their homework... They know what they're up against, and they've got a few tricks up their sleeves. Hoping to get in a nice Flutter-Rage moment, though...

>>142692

Not homework so much as clutching at the straws of hope :rainbowlaugh:

Huh, I'm in suspense to who these people are, I mean, they could be anyone... very nice.

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