Sunburst lives in a perfectly synchronized society, where every second of his life is dictated by his Guide, Flurry Heart. But one day Flurry Heart goes awry.
Entry for the Science Fiction Contest. Based on the short film Kodemus, but watching it is not required to read this story.
thank you for the entry into the contest!
Ooh. I like this!
I definitely need to watch Kodemus after reading this.
Me watching Kodemus:
I mean, it was about what I expected out of something from the 70's. And I couldn't find a version with subtitles, but I reckon I got the gist of it. It made for an interesting point of comparison at the very least, and I'd say you kept the best parts of it as the basis for this story and massively improved on the rest.
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European cinema always takes things to the next weird level, but you can't deny that there are nuggets of good ideas and concepts hidden underneath the weirdness. I mean, I've seen people have full panic attacks when something happened to their cellphones, not too dissimilar from Kodemus in the film, so it's unsettling how a Norwegian writer predicted our dependence on technology all the way back in the '70s.
And thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it, this was a bit out of my comfort zone but I'm glad it paid off.
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70's-era cinematography aside (it was honestly an assault on my eyes and ears at times), I'm very glad to have been introduced to Kodemus. Sci-fi often manages to predict the future in weird ways some times. I doubt anyone back then would have honestly expected that we'd actually carry around little computers that would tell us where to go and what to do all day or how lost someone would be if they lost theirs, and yet here I am responding because my "Guide" beeped at me...
I'm gonna have to try hard to beat this one out. I haven't felt this kind of coordinated chaos since watching Playtime.
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And I have no doubt that you can do it. Thanks for giving my story a chance though.
This was enjoyable! The anarchic immediacy of the pony's Guide really drove the story to its (somewhat traditional hopeful dystopian literature) flourishing finish. I could hear its voice quite distinctly as I read. The style was unique and exciting!
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Thanks! This was a fun piece to write. Flurry definetly stole the show in this fic.
the chapter title/fic title combo is already great
ha, that is very much how i expect an AI named after Flurry Heart to behave!
starting to get a sense of the heuristic these AIs use to resolve ethical problems
now that is a regimented world!
aww, that's our Flurry Heart!
so true! and none of that kind of stuff in our nice, TV-Y Ponyville!
always great to have a scene transition hinge on A Button
delightfully ominous
i enjoyed this descwork! really underlining the contrast with the underground city
i was wondering when the titular Starlight would show up!
aww! classic breaking-free-of-regimented-dystopia feels! and a bonus for StarBurst shippers. if anything, i wish we could have had more Starlight in this! i really liked the use of Sunburst and Flurry in this, with the foalsitter relationship inverted, and Flurry being the chaotic demon one would expect her to grow up into. really enjoyed this one, thank you for writing!
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Thank YOU for holding the contest (and for the insightful review)! It was a lot of fun!
Wait was this rewritten?
Wasn't it about Starlight?
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hmm, no? it's always been this way that's why the chapter title is about Sunburst
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Hm... nice.
Jut asked because I got here thinking it was a starlight story then got shot off when I saw it was a Sunburn one.
With the comments I saw must be a pretty good one just don't mke me want to read it.