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kempsishere


From elementary to college, I've been told I'm a great writer. What does FIMfiction think?

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Ponies are at war with the Diamond dogs and all of your favorite ponies are lending their talents to the effort. Applejack is on guard duty to protect the homeland, patrolling Sweet Apple Acres and keeping it safe and diamond dog-free.
Action, grit, and tragedy. Graphic description of gore and a death to wrap it all up.

Based on a short comic by pooryorick: yoorporick.deviantart.com. unfortunately, the account has been deleted, so the comic can be found here -->http://funnyjunk.com/channel/ponytime/Earth+Ponies+offsetting/nqjfGad/

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 8 )

Well, it's a good thing I read the comic first so I knew how dark this was going to be.

Good stuff.

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Relax. i submitted with a teen rating, gore on and it was approved. Besides, I was reading stuff like this when I was 14. Ever read Brian Jaques? Not quite as descriptive about blood, but there are swords and death.

This was a hella fun read. Thanks for the entertain........I think ya did good........Just outa curiosity....why not include Pinky Pie as one of the three.....shes an E.P. aint she? Then again it would have required a lot more planning and dialog......hmmm..... Idea for you....Pinkamina Diana Pie.....Spazmatic warrior of diabetic proportions.....:pinkiecrazy: Well this is much better than the polished turd I submitted :rainbowlaugh: I too checked the comic prior to reading this. I think the concept of an immortal Earth Pony on Equstrian soil is novel. This could prove to be fairly interesting of you decide to do a series of these sort of tales. I would hate to think what a Twilight/Rarity Unicorn team could do. Especially considering that Twillie is uber powered in magic :twilightoops: The royal wedding ep comes to mind where Pinky used Twilight as a Gatling gun. And lets not even get started on what kind of damage Dashie can do......Rainbow nukes destroy the.....well.....every bucking thing.:rainbowdetermined2:

Your just reward:
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Pinkie will have her own chapter. I'm planning out a tragedy spread out over the several years of war, jumping around the timeline for each chapter. Each of the Mane 6 will have their own chapter in which they lose something special(hint:twlight loves magic and RD loves flying). Although Pinkie and Fluttershy are going to be hard because I can't think of something solid to take away. I've got rarity and RD halfway written. I'm trying to integrate a little piano music for the emotional scenes with simple youtube links.

I'm teasing the idea of Twilight dying at the end, but nothing's written in stone. It's gonna be a while til then because I haven't had much of chance to sit down and work on it recently. I wrote this single chapter in one night though. Can you tell?

I have no idea whether I'm going to end it with all the characters broken, or give them back something to compensate

At any rate, thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Suggestions on Pinky And Flutters:

Pinky loves joy and laughter.......:pinkiecrazy:......Equestria put at war and the loss of multiple friends (as she is friends with everypony) would probably be a good start.

Flutters loves her friends and her critters........:fluttershyouch:.....with this a similar loss to what A.J. lost here (Winona) would probably be a good start... would the war take the lives of countless helpless forest critters send her into a Flutter-Rage? I dunno.

Can't wait for the the others.....I have come to enjoy these stories that deviate from the sweet fluffy friendship stuff (which of course is always fun). I kinda been getting burned out on the clop, shipping that is so popular. You can only tell the same story on love affairs with the same characters so many ways before they all start to become redundant. :derpytongue2:

This is great! Can't wait to see more!

:ajsmug:Applejack approved. ...Apart from the death of Winona, of course.:ajsleepy: So sad...

When can we expect more of this work?:rainbowhuh:

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