I don't like most of their attitudes against Spike's new "body change". I mean, it's not that big of a deal????!!!! He finally grows up, and has become some sort of a Chad to them!!!!!
So, why the Hell aren't the Mane Six, and the other girls get horny on his handsome body. And are over reacting that he is the Hulk or something, and are so bothered by it?!
Heck, most of Ponyville and even the CMC mistreated him for his new body. And Celestia stupidity misinterpret what she says, that he is "dangerous", and has to leave???!!!
It makes me so PISSED OFF, that I want to punch Celestia's groin area multiple times! Johnny Cage and Cassie Cage styles!!!!
Edit: Why a dislike?! I just defending Spike's honor!
Not a bad start. I do see quite a few spelling errors though. Might want to take another look over it, or have someone else look it over. I can maybe try if you want.
One such instance:
“Is it true you are mortified of Spiders?” said Fluttershy
“Yes, a million times yes, I can even look at them without fainting,” said Sunset
Pretty sure you meant 'can't' there.
EDIT: Also it'd be "Asked Fluttershy" as she's asking a question.
However there is one BIG thing I need to point out. So you have Applebloom arrive at Zecora's and Zecora slyly says Applebloom can wait in her house for her to return. EXCEPT when Spike is walking through town:
“Nah, Applejack would defeat’im faster,” said Applebloom
How did Applebloom say this if she's stuck at Zecora's?
Not to sound like a dick when I say this, but this chapter is littered with misplaced "he"s instead of "she"s and some words are just misspelled outright. Again, not trying to sound like a dick but please be sure to check the spelling before posting the chapters. Other than that, it's a great story. Keep up the great work underrated Drake.
I don't like most of their attitudes against Spike's new "body change". I mean, it's not that big of a deal????!!!! He finally grows up, and has become some sort of a Chad to them!!!!!
So, why the Hell aren't the Mane Six, and the other girls get horny on his handsome body. And are over reacting that he is the Hulk or something, and are so bothered by it?!
Heck, most of Ponyville and even the CMC mistreated him for his new body. And Celestia stupidity misinterpret what she says, that he is "dangerous", and has to leave???!!!
It makes me so PISSED OFF, that I want to punch Celestia's groin area multiple times! Johnny Cage and Cassie Cage styles!!!!
Edit: Why a dislike?! I just defending Spike's honor!
Can’t wait to see where this leads up to.
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It'll all be explained in the next chapter... remember this is somewhat of a Nopor
ooooo new story
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No "Nopor"?
You mean no porno?!
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Porno
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Yeah, like I said. Hopefully, you should edit that.
So, they will be Romance, Sex, Pron and Fetishs due to the tags. But, it's the type that has a Plot Story, correct?
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Ye
So I'm dying of laughter atm. I'm very much invested in this
Not a bad start. I do see quite a few spelling errors though. Might want to take another look over it, or have someone else look it over. I can maybe try if you want.
One such instance:
Pretty sure you meant 'can't' there.
EDIT: Also it'd be "Asked Fluttershy" as she's asking a question.
However there is one BIG thing I need to point out. So you have Applebloom arrive at Zecora's and Zecora slyly says Applebloom can wait in her house for her to return. EXCEPT when Spike is walking through town:
How did Applebloom say this if she's stuck at Zecora's?
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Thanks, that went right over my head
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Love the story, hope to see more chapters soon.
Not to sound like a dick when I say this, but this chapter is littered with misplaced "he"s instead of "she"s and some words are just misspelled outright. Again, not trying to sound like a dick but please be sure to check the spelling before posting the chapters. Other than that, it's a great story. Keep up the great work underrated Drake.