Scipio, with the help of his friends, intends to use his advance theif skills to steal the crown of the evil queen Golden Star. Scipio decides that this plan will be dangerous but still gets all his friends involved. Will Scipio steal the crown or will he be trapped forever?
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made a spelling mistake in the title, it's spelt 'thief'. just thought i should point it out
you could work on the pacing. slow things down, and try going into detail. you've got a good skeleton for a story here, you just need to put a bit of meat on those bones.
1223685The word thief is men tto be mis-spelled throught the story as a way to further show is childlike ignorance. the title was a typo. thanks for that and i am still working on the whole detail thing.
Since you still haven't posted any new chapters, it would be wise to take this time and edit and revise you're current chapters.
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there are no new chapters since I will be working on the second Scipio story after I finish the one I am currently working on
just something to look forward to
Well it says the story is "Incomplete." You might want to change that.
Well acendon, you certainly have improved quite alot. I found this quite enjoyable to read, however, you still need to learn about unoriginal OCs, and you need to put more emotion into these stories, because right now I don't see alot.
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Emotion?
1497409 "Oh no, its Scipio. Please take what you want but please dont hurt me." Sounds more like a couple of kids taking drama class.