Damn, but can Miss Mountainflower be anymore protective? I'm pretty sure Rarity has been the most well mannered mare that day, and Kaika nearly incinerated her with a glare! Definitely getting some serious Overprotective Dad energy here.
And I know you mean it in good faith, but I hear "temporary hiatus" and get instant flashbacks to all those lost stories...
11044477 I'm not leaving anytime soon, but four stories at once and studying tends to give me a sense of uncertainty. When I say that I might put a story on hiatus, I mean like 1 or 2, this story and Equestrias Wild Card have recieved a lot of love. I realised that Kingdom of Predators might have been too big for a first time story for me, so I want to think through the plot properly to give it a solid conclusion.
My special talent don't offer me a lot of job opportunies. In fact, the only job I ever had that lasted me for more than a couple of months, was when I worked at a Rockfarm. I even manage to meet a kindred spirit there that also felt like they didn't really fit in with other ponies. She even had the same blank expression like me, only her's was closer to looking completely emotionless, making it hard to read her. But I spent enough time on the farm and with her to become familiar and learn to read her body language. The trick was to look at her ears. Her younger sisters were a bit creepy however, one of them was always stalking me and I'm pretty certain the other one wanted me dead. Why though? I'm not certain. But, around the time were things seemed to be going smoothly, her parents began complaining to her that she was going too slow with me and almost forced her to "take me for herself", that did not sit well with my mother and she practically broke several laws to get us as far away from that farm as possible. Which is sad, considering that was the closest I've ever gotten to finding my special somepony...
Limestone, you better stop before you do something you will heavily regret. Kaoru shouldn't be underestimated! Neither his overprotective mother either.
You mean, "Overprotective Mom"? Anyway, she needs to chill around with the actual decent and nice mares. Otherwise, she is gonna get arrested. Besides, Kaoru can literally take care of himself.
It's interesting, but it makes me wonder where the story is going? I mean, is it a sex-centric story or does it really have a story? It would be great if it was story-centric
Nah, overprotective dad. She gives me the impression of running the full gambit from 'if you think you're good enough for my little girl(colt), you'd better be twice as good as you think you are', and 'have my daughter(son) back before midnight if you know what's good for you', to 'if you break my child's heart you'll be a smear for the two weeks it takes the clean-up crew to mop up the spill'. Remember, RGRE. She's giving overprotective dad vibes because the mares are equivalent to real world men.
It's nice to see you again K-A and thanks again for another amazing chapter. I have to say I'm getting some pretty chilly Pamala Voorhees vibes from Kaoru's mother. lol. I really enjoyed all the dialogs this chapter as well as the inner monolog of Kaoru about his experiences. Also loved the bit of fine detail your putting into your character building with Kaoru referencing both Hondo's career and the rock farm. I'm excited to see the next instalment of this story and wish you all the best of luck writing your next chapter. Cheers!
11044491 They barely moved in. These chapters are all about the impact of Kaoru and her mother just by being there At the very least, We still have to see Applejack, Fluttershy, and Twilight's reactions to Kaoru. That, and maybe Celestia and Luna will learn of his existence.
Somehow, I knew Kaoru would like Maud. Few words, she gets to the point, and she just lacks facial expressions. (She does show a little bit of anger in very few situations, like when she scolds Pinkie Pie in that rock course thingie.)
I'm waiting for what Rainbow Dash does, and Applejack/Fluttershy/Twilight's reactions to him. Maybe Celestia and Luna, too. We'll see in the future.
I wish you luck with your plans and well, sooner or later we'll see in the next chapter
11046512 Thanks! Honestly, you're one of the reasons why this story even exists. While it was my fifth story idéa I came up with, I had no clue how I was going to write it. It was only after reading a couple of chapters from your fic, The Anomaly in a Mare's World, were I finally began to picture how I wanted this fic to play out. So yeah, you inspired me.
So, quick question. Are prostitutes and brothels male or female in this universe? From the way they talk about it, it seems like it's still female but in a universe like this, it makes more sense for it to be the males.
11047092 This is an RGRE-fic, meaning the roles between males and females are swapped and the mares outnumber stallions. In this type of setting, stallions who are willing to "show off" their bodies, are highly praised and considered very important for society to such a point that if they were to eventuelly get married, it would be considered a tragedy for single mares.
11047104 My version of Ponyville have around 40 stallions in it, including colts, and a total population of around 450 ponies, that's the number that most people seem to agree upon.
I would say that there are a couple brothels in Ponyville. A future chapter were Kaoru checks it out could be interesting, if not hilarious with some mares thinking he works there.
11047123 I'd definitely like to see that since barely any RGRE/Matriarchy and Herd fanfics ever touch upon subjects like that. I've always also been curious as to how the school and the kids function since most of these stories always focus on the adults.
"His hoofs are huge! Like super duper hooper snooper huge! Feels like he could easily crush me right here, right now! And yet, there is something oddly appealing about it. Those big bulky, yet firm muscles pressing me against his body, smothering and crushing me into submission, wispering ' Ara Ara~ ' as he takes me as his own, right here on the stree-"
I know this is saying ara ara but of it was Jotaro I would be hearing ORA ORA
This is a very strong start. I can already see the plot points being planted for future chapters - little anecdotes about what happened in their previous travels, figuring out what'll happen when Pinkie writes home to her sisters about a special somepony they were interested in back when he worked on their farm with them, and Rarity's hero worship for his mom. This is really promising, and I hope that the people begging for more chapters aren't putting you off of working on this. Just remember that the majority of readers prefer to lurk and not leave little comments, so even though it might seem like there is hardly any truely thoughtful feedback at times, it is greatly appreciated . And that goes for all the rest of your work, too.
I can think of two directions for this story to go. I think this could easily work as an almost romantic story where he woos the Main 6 and makes them the happiest mares in Equestria, and I can see this having immense clop potential. A mix of the two could be best - I think his peaceful and quiet nature would mesh well with Fluttershy. Considering how trusting the animals were last chapter while he was asleep, they could work together. Plus, she's the only one in Ponyvile capable of holding her own in the Everfree with Kaika and Kaoru. With Dash pushing for a relationship, that's the start of a herd right there. Rarity will be more picky, of course, so I'm looking forward to seeing Kaoru actively trying to be attractive.
I'm looking forward to seeing what you write next. Thanks for writing.
there dinamic reminds me of jason vorheas and his mother what with him being tall silent and dangerous and his mom being extreamily over protective bordering mom Yandere zones you should use this for there nightmare night costumes
11106044 Hoofs grow back, so there's nothing to worry about. As for Twilight, she's actually one of the reasons why the next chapter is taking some time, I'm having some difficulty deciding. That and a have 2 assignment in University.
"That would be me." Mom says with a mature smile. "My main line of work has always been documentation, but designing and sewing cloths has always been more of a passion of mine."
Damn... Will he perhaps have the Main Six as Herd? Will Spike fight him for Rarity? Will Pinkie get her Pie stuffed? Will Derpy and Dr. Whooves make a guest apperance? Find put next chapter in: 'No idea what is happening here, but i like it anyway!'
11161700 Fall all we know he likes a good work out. Scales do make someone rather tough... Putting up a show for Rarity might impression on her for the little Flamerthrowers benefit.
Damn, but can Miss Mountainflower be anymore protective? I'm pretty sure Rarity has been the most well mannered mare that day, and Kaika nearly incinerated her with a glare! Definitely getting some serious Overprotective Dad energy here.
And I know you mean it in good faith, but I hear "temporary hiatus" and get instant flashbacks to all those lost stories...
11044477
I'm not leaving anytime soon, but four stories at once and studying tends to give me a sense of uncertainty. When I say that I might put a story on hiatus, I mean like 1 or 2, this story and Equestrias Wild Card have recieved a lot of love. I realised that Kingdom of Predators might have been too big for a first time story for me, so I want to think through the plot properly to give it a solid conclusion.
Limestone, you better stop before you do something you will heavily regret. Kaoru shouldn't be underestimated! Neither his overprotective mother either.
11044477
You mean, "Overprotective Mom"? Anyway, she needs to chill around with the actual decent and nice mares. Otherwise, she is gonna get arrested. Besides, Kaoru can literally take care of himself.
P.S. Those Flower Ponies have a VERY long way to go to get on Kaoru's good side. Then, you will have to deal with his mother.
Although, Maud might have a chance. Maybe the Mane Six?
It's interesting, but it makes me wonder where the story is going? I mean, is it a sex-centric story or does it really have a story? It would be great if it was story-centric
Loving this story so far. Well written and a good RGRE MC so keep up the good work hope to see more soon!
Great to see this update! I wish you luck with your studies
Small spelling error, Passion*
11044485
Nah, overprotective dad. She gives me the impression of running the full gambit from 'if you think you're good enough for my little girl(colt), you'd better be twice as good as you think you are', and 'have my daughter(son) back before midnight if you know what's good for you', to 'if you break my child's heart you'll be a smear for the two weeks it takes the clean-up crew to mop up the spill'. Remember, RGRE. She's giving overprotective dad vibes because the mares are equivalent to real world men.
It's nice to see you again K-A and thanks again for another amazing chapter. I have to say I'm getting some pretty chilly Pamala Voorhees vibes from Kaoru's mother. lol. I really enjoyed all the dialogs this chapter as well as the inner monolog of Kaoru about his experiences. Also loved the bit of fine detail your putting into your character building with Kaoru referencing both Hondo's career and the rock farm. I'm excited to see the next instalment of this story and wish you all the best of luck writing your next chapter. Cheers!
fuck, hiatus again
11044541
Fixed! Thanks for pointing it out.
11044916
Not this one, but Kingdom of Predators is definently getting it. Might release one more chapter before that, but we'll see.
11044491
They barely moved in. These chapters are all about the impact of Kaoru and her mother just by being there
At the very least, We still have to see Applejack, Fluttershy, and Twilight's reactions to Kaoru. That, and maybe Celestia and Luna will learn of his existence.
11045035
Can’t wait for the next update, cant wait to see how the princesses react to him!
Ah. It was a really good chapter.
Somehow, I knew Kaoru would like Maud. Few words, she gets to the point, and she just lacks facial expressions. (She does show a little bit of anger in very few situations, like when she scolds Pinkie Pie in that rock course thingie.)
I'm waiting for what Rainbow Dash does, and Applejack/Fluttershy/Twilight's reactions to him. Maybe Celestia and Luna, too. We'll see in the future.
I wish you luck with your plans and well, sooner or later we'll see in the next chapter
11046512
Thanks!
Honestly, you're one of the reasons why this story even exists. While it was my fifth story idéa I came up with, I had no clue how I was going to write it. It was only after reading a couple of chapters from your fic, The Anomaly in a Mare's World, were I finally began to picture how I wanted this fic to play out.
So yeah, you inspired me.
So, quick question. Are prostitutes and brothels male or female in this universe? From the way they talk about it, it seems like it's still female but in a universe like this, it makes more sense for it to be the males.
11047092
This is an RGRE-fic, meaning the roles between males and females are swapped and the mares outnumber stallions. In this type of setting, stallions who are willing to "show off" their bodies, are highly praised and considered very important for society to such a point that if they were to eventuelly get married, it would be considered a tragedy for single mares.
11047099
So, I take it there's probably a lot of them in Ponyville.
11047104
My version of Ponyville have around 40 stallions in it, including colts, and a total population of around 450 ponies, that's the number that most people seem to agree upon.
I would say that there are a couple brothels in Ponyville. A future chapter were Kaoru checks it out could be interesting, if not hilarious with some mares thinking he works there.
11047123
I'd definitely like to see that since barely any RGRE/Matriarchy and Herd fanfics ever touch upon subjects like that. I've always also been curious as to how the school and the kids function since most of these stories always focus on the adults.
I know this is saying ara ara but of it was Jotaro I would be hearing ORA ORA
11067033
Great, now I can't unhear a female version of Star Platinum whispering "Ora Ora~"
Hope to see more soon this was really good I can't wait for the next chapter
Could we get some moar chapters
I really like this fic
This is a very strong start. I can already see the plot points being planted for future chapters - little anecdotes about what happened in their previous travels, figuring out what'll happen when Pinkie writes home to her sisters about a special somepony they were interested in back when he worked on their farm with them, and Rarity's hero worship for his mom. This is really promising, and I hope that the people begging for more chapters aren't putting you off of working on this. Just remember that the majority of readers prefer to lurk and not leave little comments, so even though it might seem like there is hardly any truely thoughtful feedback at times, it is greatly appreciated . And that goes for all the rest of your work, too.
I can think of two directions for this story to go. I think this could easily work as an almost romantic story where he woos the Main 6 and makes them the happiest mares in Equestria, and I can see this having immense clop potential. A mix of the two could be best - I think his peaceful and quiet nature would mesh well with Fluttershy. Considering how trusting the animals were last chapter while he was asleep, they could work together. Plus, she's the only one in Ponyvile capable of holding her own in the Everfree with Kaika and Kaoru. With Dash pushing for a relationship, that's the start of a herd right there. Rarity will be more picky, of course, so I'm looking forward to seeing Kaoru actively trying to be attractive.
I'm looking forward to seeing what you write next. Thanks for writing.
11091981
Damn, this might've been one of the best comments I've ever recieved!
there dinamic reminds me of jason vorheas and his mother what with him being tall silent and dangerous and his mom being extreamily over protective bordering mom Yandere zones
you should use this for there nightmare night costumes
11094432
That's an amazing idéa!
Wonderfull story so far. Tho I am interested in what happened to his dad's hoof. Is twilight an alicorn in this version?
11106044
Hoofs grow back, so there's nothing to worry about. As for Twilight, she's actually one of the reasons why the next chapter is taking some time, I'm having some difficulty deciding. That and a have 2 assignment in University.
Updates please!!!
11106329
Working on it as we speak, but also busy IRL with studies. I'm trying to balance them out.
be - should be added.
Interesting start. Where are we timeline wise...
Damn...
Will he perhaps have the Main Six as Herd?
Will Spike fight him for Rarity?
Will Pinkie get her Pie stuffed?
Will Derpy and Dr. Whooves make a guest apperance?
Find put next chapter in:
'No idea what is happening here, but i like it anyway!'
11145948
Spike will obviously sadly lose in a "fight". Unless Kaoru wasn't interested with Rarity in the first place.
11161685
Could be fun
11161694
Not for Spike.
11161700
Fall all we know he likes a good work out. Scales do make someone rather tough... Putting up a show for Rarity might impression on her for the little Flamerthrowers benefit.
11161798
Who knows. IF Kaoru still wasn't interested with Rarity, but knows about Spike's predicament. He would be nice enough to "help" Spike out.
Bro.......update
11167882
Everyone has everyday stuff that keep us away. Best we can do is wait and hope for the best.
Bro update this thing.... Its good!
Old wound? Unless he got his eye cut again, his scars would be considered birth scars now.
11296390
He means that he got it when he was very young, I’m currently writing the chapter where it is explained.