and elder dragon from the universe of Monster Hunter, crosses over to the universe of MLP: FiM G4. let's see what happens when a monster equines meet cartoon magic equines.
Nice start to introducing the story and how the monsters actually some to be of why we usually see one of these at a time (I think, correct me if I'm wrong with my assumption) for example the ursa major/minor or one hydra. All of the to introduce a new being to the world of Equestria.
interesting start, I'll definitely be tracking it. P.S. isn't Oroshi on the cover? If this is him then why do we need to duplicate his image in the story? I certainly have nothing against it, I just spent about 8 minutes comparing images.
10591401 I tried to show what an Oroshi would look like in a more cartoon like appearance, then its realistic style from the Cover Image. like, how entering the universe of MLP: FiM G4 changes organisms to fit its style of reality. like how when a live human changes when they get sucked into animated universe to look like they fit in more, than be a clashing image against the setting.
However…no pony knows the real reason why the Everfree Forest is home to all of these unusual creatures. And the real reason is because the forest, is a dimensional hub, a focal point in where various points of different worlds align. And because of this, on occasion, anything that wonders into the focal point might end up crossing into the forest of Equus.
Reminds me of a door that appears in many locations, but with one exit destination, once you step through one of the various entrances of said door, you can't exit back out - a one-way doorway.
Okay, now that I've read this... I like it, an excellent fight, and from how you gave a sense of reason for the many strange events and creatures that exist within the Everfree, that is they may have come from other worlds via time-space displacement, it makes sense. Welp, I'm not disappointed, on to the next chapter o7
I like the oroshi's cartoonish style, but I am going to picture him like MLP:FIM style of art. While reading. Nevertheless, it is still a good imaginitive crossover.
There are many places within Equestria that are yet to be explored, or have unusual magical properties, or so full of mystery that no pony truly knows about them. for example, the Everfree Forest. Even when princess Celestia and her sister, as well as the Pillars of Light, lived in the forest in the old castle of the Two Sisters, the forest was still full of mystery and wonder. And despite the forest’s limited size, it always seems that its boundaries either shrinks or grows on a whim. This forest even had the master sorcerer, Star Swirl the Bearded, stumped in how the forests magical or paranormal properties work, same goes for the two princesses that used to rule within the forest in their youth. But despite ponies not knowing the full capabilities of the Everfree, or what it entails. But what ponies do know about the forest, is that it home to a surprising amount of unusual creatures and monsters. From Timberwolves, to Ursa Minors and Majors, Hydras, to Cragadiles, and many more creatures that are never seen anywhere else within Equestria’s boarders. Or even around the world of Equus. However…no pony knows the real reason why the Everfree Forest is home to all of these unusual creatures. And the real reason is because the forest, is a dimensional hub, a focal point in where various points of different worlds align. And because of this, on occasion, anything that wonders into the focal point might end up crossing into the forest of Equus.
This would explain why most displaced stories start in the Everfree Forest.
Now this should be interesting
already half way final drafting Ch.1. should be uploaded soon.
Nice start to introducing the story and how the monsters actually some to be of why we usually see one of these at a time (I think, correct me if I'm wrong with my assumption) for example the ursa major/minor or one hydra. All of the to introduce a new being to the world of Equestria.
interesting start, I'll definitely be tracking it.
P.S. isn't Oroshi on the cover? If this is him then why do we need to duplicate his image in the story? I certainly have nothing against it, I just spent about 8 minutes comparing images.
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I tried to show what an Oroshi would look like in a more cartoon like appearance, then its realistic style from the Cover Image. like, how entering the universe of MLP: FiM G4 changes organisms to fit its style of reality. like how when a live human changes when they get sucked into animated universe to look like they fit in more, than be a clashing image against the setting.
The intro was nice I'm looking forward to the next chapter
This looks very promising and it's a good start, looking forward to seeing this story play out.
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i'm glad you approve. hopefully this project keeps you intrigued.
You have multiple places where the plural of kirin is "Kirin's" as if it were possessive, not multiple. SHould be "Kirins"
Likewise, 'your' instead of 'you're' (for you are).
Good start, but needs editing.
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strange i thought i fixed them all. thanks for the catch.
“large pillars f ice” There is something missing here. Interesting premise so far... on to the next chapter.
A good start to a interesting story so far. I'm looking forward towards seeing what direction you take it.
Not a bad start
Another story that intrigues me!
Reminds me of a door that appears in many locations, but with one exit destination, once you step through one of the various entrances of said door, you can't exit back out - a one-way doorway.
Okay, now that I've read this... I like it, an excellent fight, and from how you gave a sense of reason for the many strange events and creatures that exist within the Everfree, that is they may have come from other worlds via time-space displacement, it makes sense. Welp, I'm not disappointed, on to the next chapter o7
Im liking how its starting. One suggestion i have is you seem to use 'monster' alot to describe things, a few times in the same sentence.
But as the monster stepped ever closer to the corner, something happened to the monster
I would try to mix up your wording once in a while so it doesnt seem as repedative. Use elder dragon, oroshi, horned equine etc
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i noticed that after i posted the last ch. so i'll try to vary it up a bit more.
I like the oroshi's cartoonish style, but I am going to picture him like MLP:FIM style of art. While reading.
Nevertheless, it is still a good imaginitive crossover.
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i tried to make the Kirin be in the G4 style, but i'm not good enough to hand draw show-accuracte style.
i like it
From Digimon to monster hunter okay then
Oroshi god hate it and it white original my body still twitches from fighting both I hate fighting elder dragons curse you worlds!!
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i like to have a wide range of content, whether its writing or artwork.
while do find it frustrating! to fight the Kirin's, i still like them. but yeah, DAMN YOU WORLD AND YOUR ELDER DRAGONS!
I didn't like how cliché these 'Hunters' sounded but whatever im sure its only a bit of the story
This would explain why most displaced stories start in the Everfree Forest.
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Exactly! this is how i've always thought the whole displace isekai thing happens in fanfics.
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Woahhhh that is really smart!