I'm a little mixed on this. I get why some of the Main six would be turned to brained washed slaves. But why Fluttershy and rarity, Fluttershy the most, she could worked with them in the end.

Still a good start whew!!

nice work.

You really need an editor, hon.

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No Offense, but is that the ONLY thing you say in every Fic in here? I do seen you in many stories in the comment section. And you only say 'nice work' to the authors and their stories.

It's not a bad thing. But, saying ONLY those two words in every story, for just all this years, tends to be weird, and a bit annoying to some people.

No hard feelings.

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none taken just a man of few words

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It's okay. Just want to know why.

Interesting premise. But, needs some work. Dark themes aside. It would benefit from slowing down a bit and stretching it out a bit, into multi chapters. As well as some editing. Like the first half is enough to start making a multi chapter story on its own as a prequel. But to have it shoved out all at once like that is a bit jarring. Also the sudden switch to violent rape, brainwashing and torture was out of now where. Maybe think about some warning tags in the description, as well as a bit more info in the description. Also have you read a story called Sunset’s herd. Cause your origin for sunset coming out of the mirror into a vault and having to survive on magical ingredients is right out of that. And that story is like 4-5 years old. Sorry if I sound mean.(I don’t intended to) I just wanted to give some critical feedback. Like I said. Great premise. Could be a kick ass series. But needs some polish. And now after looking into your other stores I see you wrote Sunset’s herd...maybe...Cause this doesn’t match previous writing style and I have seen accounts stolen and people pose as the original.......are you a spy......I hope this was just a thing of boredom and not like stolen account.

I loved everything, the premise and the violations ... although I felt confusing the part of the Mane Six, it would not be bad if you expanded more on that part. Otherwise, all good.