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Luna writes letters to Twilight Sparkle; as a show of appreciation...and possibly something deeper. There is one problem though; how much time will pass before Luna can gather up the courage to actually start sending the letters...
(Sylentmist87 has done a reading you can watch on youtube here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Nhp34kQPfY0&feature=relmfu)
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Never written anything even remotely similar to this before, there's a first time for everything I suppose.
And a fine job you've done.
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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.
This was so intimate I loved it! I was not prepared for the turn this would take. I really liked that you only used letters. You were able to talk as Luna and convey so much about her feelings. You were also able to talk about her as a character in a way that most people can't. Luna's feeling of regreat is something I think many people can relate to. Looking forward to your next story
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I really appreciate that, I'm actually writing two additional stories right now, you can expect to see them someday soon.
This was an incredible read.
for you.
I do have to compliment you on the understated, subtle implication of (SPOILER?) twilight having committed suicide. The rest of the story feels a little raw, but leaving a big element like that in clues instead of exposition adds depth.
... though, that having been said, 37 seems awful old for the premise as you describe it. *I'm* not even 37 yet, I'm several standard deviations above the average brony's age, and the show heavily implies that the main characters are all just barely on the cusp of adulthood.
1203002 that was amazing i cried at the end was it just me or did twilight die young or are we going on horse years?
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She did indeed die young, yes. And I'm glad that you liked it.
1203245
I thought 37 was a fair age, it shows that she was young but still lived for long enough for Luna to build up real feelings for her. If you think I should change it I might, it's not exactly the most important detail in the fic.
oh my gosh... brilliantly written... made me cry...
1203308 real horses live to be around 40 so its good
Dem feels.
1203323
I honestly had no idea. Maybe I should lower that age for any more technical readers I may have?
1203320
Thank you
I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Thirty-seven seems reasonable for "gone too young": it allows for about a 15- to 20-year period for poor Luna to torment herself. (Which, to Luna, is but a moment in time, considering how long her banishment lasted.)
For what it's worth, in my own work I've been suggesting lifespans roughly comparable to those for humans, assuming years about the same length.
1203362 perhaps it all depends on whether your using human years or horse years
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I think I might shave off a decade. Then it's short regardless of which lifespan I'm using.
What? What is this tear-like substance coming from my eyes?
And this pain In my chest?
Am I feeling?
What have you done to me?
Making me feel feelings.
*cries*
MFW I finished reading this:
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that was a nice storie but that was sad for luna :(
I really enjoyed this story, one question the comments make it seem like she died of natural causes, but the feeling I got from it was that she killed herself over heartbreak from the unnamed stallion, what happened?
Also.... Poor Luna, Everything was so sad, but I could totally see it all being the case
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I left that unspecified so that people could fill it in with their own thoughts. Some people find suicide sadder than others, and that's what they might think of. Others prefer to think like sickness or tragedy or something.
Originally I had planned for her husband to actually murder her, but I changed that thought and just left it to the imagination.
Urgh, right in the feels.
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feels, nuff said
That was magnificent and oh so beautiful.... Yet so tragically sad.
1369161 Thank you so much.
1369164 You're most welcome.
A writer of your talents deserves much praise. 
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Probably a good call regarding the husband.
It would probably be an ENTIRELY different story if Twilight's husband *had* murdered her.
I'm fairly positive that your Luna AND Celestia would invent such a world of pain to inflict on that stallion that even Discord would go "Wow. And I though being imprisoned in stone for an eternity was bad..."
i dislike sad stories such as this one immensely, i read it cause i didn't anticipate that ending at all. however, the story it self was very well written, and the "luna's thoughts in letter form" was executed quite well. i would suggest that you give a few more indications as to what kind of ending you went for other than a "sad" tag though (in the description i mean, like; there is a difference between normal->sad->very sad and normal->sad->happy).
That ending, Noooo!
Girly tears were shed today and it was good tears indeed.
1369910 Hmm, but I don't want to spoil the surprise too much. Perhaps an additional "tragedy" tag would get the message across without ruining it?
1370133 I'm sorry! If it's any consolation this fic tore me up to write!
1370240 Then I'm happy you liked it
The ending was predictable (for me, at least. I always find myself assuming someone dies...) but that was GREAT nonetheless
You got a knack for writing feels. Therefore, I encourage you too keep doing just that: Putting out more feels.
Gif relevent.
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yes, i feel like a tragedy tag should definitely be there.
on a side not; i don't know if you intended this; but i really thought the "romance" would be a two-way thing before i started reading, that lasted until i read the third (?) letter where she says she hasn't actually sent any of the letters yet, after which i pretty much assumed that it would stay like that.
They are bueatiful *Sob*
And now for the cries *crys*
1371365 Yes I guess the word "romance" kind of implies that any love had is reciprocated on both ends... This is an unusual story, I've never written like this so I wasn't sure what tags are entirely appropriate here.
Do you think I should remove the romance tag?
Way to yank the rug out from under us. Just as it was looking like it would work BAM! not a happy ending. Good story.
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possibly, i mean, it's still a kind of romance, it's simply one-sided, but you do get the wrong idea from the description. i can't really make up my mind about it.
if you could get the message through, in the description, that she has problems sending the letters, then one would assume that it's not the normal type of romance.
quick example:
"Luna writes letters to Twilight Sparkle; as a show of appreciation...and possibly something deeper. There is one problem though; how much time will pass before Luna can gather up the courage to actually start sending the letters..."
1374348 I've used what you wrote, if that's alright with you. I just don't want to upset any future readers, even if the purpose of the story is to make them sad.
1374744
i don't mind at all.
Oh well fuck you too.
1381314 Why?
1381322
Your story made me sad.
1381334 But that was the point!
You can't say I didn't warn you, the tags told you what's what!
Was it a good sad in any way at least?
1381345
Yeah, it's just that twiluna is my favorite shipping so this made me extra sad.
1381359 TwiDash is my favorite, but TwiLuna effects me the most emotionally. This fic was devastating to write lol
1381372
Twidash is awesome to. I don't know why ships with her are so awesome.
1381377 Because she's so adorkable!
Fuck that hurts! Right in the feels!