Got an idea in my head after playing New Vegas.  Don't expect regular updates.

My first non-crossover, and my first 1st-oerson fic.

Self-edited only.

Special thanks to Totalynotabrony for pre-reading.

Yes it's here! *starts reading*

Time to read!

Woo! It's here! Sounds interesting Gyvon.

=^.^=b <-- the highly coveted 'Otter Thumbs Up'.

Haha, this is your first non-crossover? It still feels pretty crossover-ish to me!

Anyways, you get a big ole read later sticker. Congrats, you're number 8 on the list.

I will return.

One day.

Hmmm... I like the premise here. I definitely look forward to seeing where this goes.

But if I may query you so, why the .50? Overkill much?

Seriously though, I look forward to the next chapter.  

>>12561741256174

ANOTHER!

Pretty good, overall.

His first instinct WAS partially right, considering there's a place in Africa called Equestria... ( http://goo.gl/maps/KcL6x )

A six shot revolver chambered in .500 S&W would be goddamn HUGE, considering that the Model 500 takes 5 shots and is already a hand cannon.

>>12560871256087 Otters have thumbs?   (Sorry, I couldn't resist)

>>12563021256302

Hence why getting an Otter Thumbs Up is so rare and coveted!

While I'd agree anything chambering the .500 S&W might be overkill, remember there are manticores on the way to Canterlot.  The way this seems to be going, the Everfree is on the itinerary.  Unplanned, of course.

Mr. Clark, eh?  I think Fallout and Tom Clancy are about to have a long, heart-felt ... conversation.  Yeah, that's the ticket.

You fooled me with the red hair, I was guessing that he was getting hired by a disguised Fausticorn so I totally missed the hints about who was actually hiring him. Not a bad start.

hmm wondering if i should read already have 17 other stories to read hmm only 5k words might as well

In the world of self defense and firearms, no handgun is overkill, many large caliber side-arms where designed with bear hunting defense in mind, but not all. The Desert Eagle was made for shooting out engine blocks originally. Just some examples of why big ass bullets in handguns actually makes sense.

It was a decent beginning, but while fending off an assassination attempt does provide action and sets the mood/tone of the moment (as well as the reputation of the protaganist) the fact of the matter is that it didn't make any sense really for the diamond dog to attack him. Other than profit, there wasn't a lot of gain to be had, and it was in front of a TON of witnesses, with the sheriff apparently in town. Now if the human had done something to Piss Off the diamond dog, it would be a different.

I like it, but I think Gyvon needs to make sure things don't stretch the sense of disbelief. Unless of course, the Diamond Dog was hired by Chrysalis and the author is a whole lot more savvy then I realized. If so, carry on, author, carry on.

Your in CLIFFHANGARLAND

Moare

Interesting, though I have to echo the hope that there is more of a story behind the diamond dog attack.

Aww. He sould've disarmed the mutt, steal his knife and shiv him with it. That would've been cooler.

Also he would've acquired a knife, and have two more bullets than he does now.

Nice to see H-Town mentioned in a story, Houstonians really cant drive can they? Anyway, nice start to the story, this will be interesting.

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In this particular case, it doesn't need to really make sense. Because, at it's heart, despite the Fallout references, despite the ponies, this is a spaghetti western.

Speaking of...

Just curious but how much ammo does he have on him? Something tells me he is going to go though it like nothing in a short amount of time.

>>12567821256782

I thought I made that clear in the first chapter.

Edit:  I did.  18 + 17 in the holdout (minus two in a diamond dog skull)

I loik it.

I like it so far! I not only just got finished playing New Vegas, but I also lived in Conroe, TX for six years (about 45 minutes north of Houston if you don't already know). Looking forward to where this story is headed!

Liking the logical progression of plot; this could turn out to be an excellent adventure if you play your cards right.

If you don't make more, I'm going to cry...

This is looking very, very promising. Here, have a favorite.

Twilight seems relatively unshaken by seeing someone meet a violent bloody end right in front of her.

Needed more reaction.

less than an hour in equestria, and he's planted two .22 rounds in a Diamond Dog.

...I like this guy

Good job on this story. I like where this is going

>>12567291256729

I suppose you are right. I'm not that familiar with westerns myself, other than The Good, The Bad, and the Ugly (which is an awesome movie). Now that I think about it, this being a Western, what he did was perfectly believable. But seeing as he is going to be leaving that setting soon to go to Canterlot, I think it might be more akin the Texas Ranger style persona. Or is that persona already considered "western?"

Looks good.

yay Walter!

Haha! Jeff Dunham!

Just Twahlaht? Some random militaryish guy as the main character? Hoping there isn't unending combat or this'll get old fast.

A badass start to the story if i do say so myself.

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If The Man with No Mane goes to Canterlot, I somehow see it turning out kind of like the relevant scenes from a Fistful of Dollars. Or possibly The Good, The Bad, and The Weird (not really a spaghetti western, but still good).

Nations even unrecognized ones, usually had their own security force to handle diplomatic protection.

Rather, it was the intense, dry heat of a summer day in Arizona  Those of you going

I'm too tired right now for any meaningful discussion of the story's contents, but I am intrigued. Let's see where this goes.

what map are you using?

the nation in South America is spelled COLOMBIA not Columbia. I should know since  my family is from there. Columbia is a university in NYC a river in the Pacific Northwest and a Sportswear company. the country again, is COLOMBIA  two "o"'s No "u" s

that aside this is  VERY well written and an interesting concept. MOAR

Very nice. A human portrayed as a bad-ass for once. He should have taken the diamond dogs knife though, or bought one with his supply of money.

Nice work.  Our good Mr. Clarke seems like an interesting character, and I loved how he introduced himself to Twilight.

It looks like this is going to be a whole lot of fun.

That diamond dog was too hot headed thinking he could take Clarke on. At least now his brain has cooling vents.

XD

I'm impressed. Can't wait for more.

Typo I noticed: "She loks like the bookworm type"

This is... Surprisingly good. I thought I wouldn't like it, but I feel that this has plenty of potential. One favourite for you.

A bag of gold worth thousands of dollars wouldn't have a noticeable weight.  To put it in perspective, hold a dozen quarters in your hand:  That's the weight of over $3000 of gold.

This is a very common error writers make.  Partly because Hollywood insisted on using massively oversized coins and huge numbers of gold bars.  (Those 'bricks' you see in some movies and TV shows?  You could probably retire on just one of them.)

Amazing so far. I salute you on youre imagintation. also, if you need any help with the story, just send me a pm and I'll see what I can do.

"Mr. Clark" eh?  Someone like Tom Clancy books?

Yes!! I wen catch um only two chaptas in

Very good! Amazing imagination!

Good job with the editing, I was only able to spot one error:

'Sure thing, kid.  Just let me finish my drink."  I went to grab my glass, and froze.

' opening dialogue instead of a "

>>12574161257416

Everyone and their mother has tried to portray their human character as a bad-ass on this site. There are a lot of Soldier in Equestria fics, and unfortunately, only a few decent ones.

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>>12561911256191 Why the .50? WHY NOT???

>>12579611257961 Ha I know. I actually like the idea of him carrying a .50 in Equestria. Its just that when reading it I thought, "A .50 cal pistol? That's a... very big gun." But I can see it becoming useful later, especially with all them big critters that Equestria has.

>>12577881257788>>12572181257218

I swear, it's the keyboard.  I'm not used to using a laptop.

Should be fixed.

Wait a sec, so he just accepts a contract from a person who know's something about him that he hadn't told anyone else?  That's usually a bad call when you're a private military contractor

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*Throws mouse onto floor*

Shit, I didn't mean to do that!

Interesting, i will keep an eye on this fic.

Holy Shit, That's Awesome!

MOAR!!

I'll be damned, you done told a darn good yarn there, son.

Sure is nice 'ta see a fellow Texan 'round here.

I'm lookin' forward to seein' this feller continue his mission.

By Terra's emerald mane....

I must have more..

MOAR

Something feels missing... It's the next chapter.

Have a thumbs up. And a favorite. Way to make Texans look badass. And Houston traffic is stupid. Aside from some minor grammatical errors, great story! All you need for that really is a good proof reader. I'd be willing to help with that (although I'm less of a "good proof reader" and more of a "fanatic grammar nazi").

Fav'd just for someone finally getting through their heads that PMC's are no the same thing as Mercenaries

Lastly, my biggest scar goes over my left eye.  I got that one in Kalamazoo, Michigan, and I'm not proud of it.  Long story short, tequila was involved.

Getting drunk in a mid-Michigan city, eh? I wonder what he was doing there?

Dis shit good.....

> 2 chapters into the fic.

> What can be assumed as 1 hour into Equestria.

> Already has a body count.

I like this guy.

But I have this nagging feeling that he's all around screwed when he gets out of ammo.

This is so good it made me laugh.

I love how he seems like such a badass, slamming open the door, and then:

Damnit!  I opened that door way too hard.  Now everyone's staring at me,

He really should find a blacksmith and explosives expert soon.

... Proceed.

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Sligh problem I spotted though... his pistol apparently changes from a .50 to a .22

Or did I just miss something?

>>12588791258879

He has two pistols

Awww, I was hoping he was going to get his helmet and gas mask in the bug-out bag! Now I can't read about ponies wondering who this guy with 'red eyes' and funny looking 'nose' is!

LOL'ED so hard. Looking forward to updates!

was feeling too chill to care

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He should've swiped that knife, given that he was lamenting his lack of one earlier.

So... apparently the story is #1 rated on Fimfiction...

It went from not even being approved, to #1. How does that feel?

Gonna read in a few hours (should be free then)

>>12590121259012

Maniac laughter, found once more ye be!

>>12589001258900 It's so obvious that I missed it

Boy, is my face red!

>>12590471259047 Lol. Not really that hard to find me. I mean, Seriously... I think I'm tracking you just for shits and giggles....

Dear lord this got popular fast! I can see why though. Keep up the good work!

You certainly got my attention good sir

I'll keep an eye on this, it looks promising

So when you say Bumfuck, Egypt. You're actually talking about Conroe right?  

>>12590121259012

Again?

>>12583451258345 Hey mate? I've seen that character multiple times, and yet I've never found out where she's from. Do you know, and if so, could you tell me?

So, you beat me to the Featured Box didn't you? Well then, I'll be a good sport. This is one of the greatest fanfictions that I will ever read and probably greater than any I will ever write. I tip my hat to you, cowboy.

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>>12590561259056

Surprising when I find people that are familiar is most of it

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Good a reason as any

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>>12592361259236 True. True.

>>12567251256725 He wouldn't have known how strong a Diamond Dog would've been. Hand to hand combat with one is probably out of the question.

>>12591681259168 Yes... Again.

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>>12592581259258

Should have another Blog in ~1hr (Checking with CO)

Giggling may occur (idk)

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