12: Delivered via pegasus courier.
Dear Princess Luna,
How are you finding this modern world? I won't get too much into the small talk here but to say that you should give your sister's private bath a try. Bring some pretty members of whatever gender you prefer along, if you have that kind of mood. Even better if one is a musician. Don't turn the taps as hot as they'll go: I've already learned, unpleasantly, that her temperature tolerances go a bit beyond those of the rest of us.
But besides that: I don't have a good read on you yet. If I needle you, will you respond in kind, or will you sulk? What do you really feel about my stated intentions for your nation? Do you even feel like it's still your nation? You were away for an awfully long time, after all, and there's really no telling what those Elements might have done to put you into your current state of mind.
In other words, I need to get to know you better. What would you say to lunch? Dinner? Coffee? Have you even tried coffee yet? I know a few places. I know a few places that can be suitably discreet about even a Princess. Or maybe you'd like the thought of venturing out as someone else? I can arrange that. Would it intrigue you, to be able to see the common pony without being recognized as an alicorn? Your sister wouldn't even have to know you were ever gone, if we timed things just right. Of course, this could all be a nefarious ploy to get you apart and alone... but are you afraid of any trap I could lay? Are you confident enough to try and get your own read on me? How will you even react to such blatant manipulation?
I've enclosed an address. Do write back if I have your interest.
Yours, if that's what you're into,
Queen ChrysalisP.S. I'm serious about the bath. It is one of the few pony creations in this world that I genuinely envy.
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At this point I’d just go to whatever Chrysi is suggesting with half a platoon of the best plainclothes guards available. And a secret weapon on my person.
Dear Mercyful Harmony
I would love to see Lunas reaction to this letter
More polite than I expected. Guess she doesn’t know enough about Luna to make a bunch of trenchant observations as yet.
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Nah. Just bring Pinkie Pie along as backup. Same results, but you get to see Chrysalis thrown off her game too.
I wouldnt mind seeing a Chrissy x Luna ship XD
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Hmm...
I don’t know. Pinkie does have some advantages as she might be consuming Spice Melange and is a low key reality warper but she might not be as good as half a platoon of plainclothes guards. dunno.
Is Chrissy trying to bast the fear Turkey with her letters to Celestia.
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Wouldn't Chrysalis have to adopt the moniker 'The Emerald Fukr' first?
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You're assuming Chrysalis doesn't have triple the amount of disguised changelings prepared in advance to whatever rendez-vous she's planning.
But of course why would you think that? It's not like she'd know you were preparing something as well. Why would she? She would need to infiltrate your chambers and look into your stuff, or even be present somehow to listen in when you were trying to group the Guards.
Truly inconceivable, of course.
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Assuming they aren’t Changelings too...
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Here is the thing, you say what you want then actually get four times the amount requested and end up with almost all the ponies in the area being either plainclothes or ‘lings. Therefore if you have a fight you have a chance to outnumber them.
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That’s why you hold them all for a month in solitary with meals teleported in so that any ‘ling would be found beforehand.
I have to wonder whether that pegasus courier was actually a pegasus...
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Prolly not. You know Crissiy.
Well. I can safely say that I’m already looking forward to the wedding invasion in this one.
Still plenty of episodes and thus time for letters until then, of course.
You know, I've had a fear about this story, recently. When this started, Chrysalis was poking and prodding Celestia, trying to get her to accept the Changelings into her kingdom from a position of power. "I have a lot to offer you if you do this, and also I would be able to crush you from within if you don't." That kind of thing.
But Chrysalis has really been pushing this whole thing pretty far, to the point where very few sane rulers would actually listen to her at this point. Infiltrating the castle as a show of force is one thing, the petty antagonism and flirting too. But actually going beyond Celestia's authority to embezzle national funds to build a railroad without her agreement and kidnapping several royal dignitaries? Regardless of how wealthy Equestria is or how snobbish the nobles are, that is crossing the line.
I'm starting to have a difficult time rooting for human-Chrysalis because she no longer looks like she actually cares what any pony thinks of how she's going about this. Putting myself in Celestia's horseshoes, I could say confidently that the most logical course of action for her to take is to treat the changelings as the greatest national threat that she has seen in the last millennium, even above Nightmare Moon.
I hope that Chrysalis tones it down a bit because I really want there to be peace between them, and I want that to happen in a believable way.
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I agree for the most part, it's starting to get a bit over the top. Of course, the whole railroad and bank thing might just be Chrysalis bullshitting to make her sound more powerful and competent than she really is because in truth her 'lings all make Pinky (of Pinky and the Brain) look sane and stable and she herself is the only sane 'ling there.
So Unreliable Narrator is in effect. But having said that, IF everything in these letters is true, then yes, she's starting to look like the greatest threat to Equestria ever and Celestia would be better off trying to double cross the scheming bughorse because at this rate bughorse is proving herself to be completely untrustworthy. Not to mention being able to do all these things really starts making bughorse sound like a massive Villain Sue.
But we shall see. Sometimes the best stories have powerful villains that take a critical hit or something to bring down.
Well, me and Chrysalis do agree on one thing. A large bath is amazing. Im looking for a new place to live and my one requirement is a luxurious bathroom and shower.
I dont care how nice the place is, if the bathroom sucks im not interested. My realtor gave me a funny look when i told her that.
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Something I will say here is that there's a serious case of unreliable narrator present, in part for a couple of extended punchlines that haven't concluded yet (and one of which will related directly to the railroad thing, at that). I'll think about rewrites to up the 'you know I know you know I know you know, you know' obvious nonsense factor of the hypotheticals, though. I'll also be looking at adding or changing something with 7 and 8 to make it clearer that it's meant to be a hammy wrapper around normal bureaucratic things (thus the 'rented event hall') rather than ponies actually getting abducted for any length of time.
I also have plans to show how this isn't all just going seamlessly among changelings despite Chryssy's grandiose proclamations, but it's hard to fit that in much with the letter-writing format.
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I do have a hard time picking up on narrator unreliability, to be fair. I am enjoying the story, especially the letters to Twilight and Luna, now. And it's fun to put myself in the shoes of this kind of mischief-maker.
But I was just day-dreaming about this story a bit at work, thinking about how this would be affecting Celestia with the intention of living out her kicking herself for not taking up Chrysalis' offer in my head, but very quickly realized that not only were all of Celestia's fears actually validated by Chrysalis' actions, but that Celestia is probably so paranoid, sleep-deprived, and furious that she is likely to have a Daybreaker event soon.
That's probably not where this story is headed, but the disconnect between the fun I'm having experiencing this story from Chrysalis' point-of-view, and the negative reactions that the other characters would logically be having, gave me a wake up call of sorts. I just had to say something.
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To My Esteemed Future Self:
If this letter is not back in our hooves in three days' time, find a new drone for courier duty. And make an example of the previous one.
Yours In Exasperation,
HM Queen Chrysalis
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Fair enough. As I said I figured the unreliable narrator was in effect, as the posturings is a bit too aggressive, almost as if Chryssie here is trying to cover something. It's just this story format unfortunately can be vague sometimes, which is why it's not a common one. But so far it's been good so I'm sure we're all giving you the benefit of the doubt, just sometimes one wonders is all.
nice work
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It was... a joke.
The EUP couldn't secure a spot in line at a cafeteria, let alone the borders of the kingdom against a shapeshifting species.
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It would be more funny if the answer to "You must state the password before entering the castle" is stating, as seriously as you can, "The password before entering the castle".
But maybe that's just my fondness for literal humor speaking.
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I know it was a joke. I was making a suggestion for it while being semi-serious
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Wait, is that a Changeling of the Guard reference?
Did she throw shots at Luna?
Chrysalis x Luna ? ... Nice~♡
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Thanks for that! I enjoyed it.
Wow, I either forgot or missed how openly flirtatious the end of this letter was on my first read.