Later that evening, after the group departed from Podacter’s apartment, they piled together in Ace’s car. Currently, as the car sped down the highway, the Mane Six and Spike sat together in the backseat overlooking the piece of paper Twilight found. Clearly this message had to come from Phantom Dragon, but there was just so much unknown about it. After all, it wasn’t like he’d given them a location or who might be with him. The only thing on the paper was a riddle they were supposed to figure out. At the moment… they were failing.
“This just doesn’t make any sense,” Twilight spoke, shaking her head. “First of all, time isn’t up and down. It goes around in a linear circle. Secondly, racing towards the finish line has nothing to do with anything so far.”
“Maybe we have to compete in some race to find him,” Rainbow suggested. “If that’s the case then we have it won. Just throw me in there against anyone and I’ll wipe the floor with those chumps!”
“Ah’m pretty sure that ain’t it hun,” Applejack disagreed.
“Perhaps we’re going about this completely wrong,” Rarity spoke up.
“Oh, I love a good ‘Hi-Diddle Riddle’!” Pinkie giggled. “Check this out: What has a head and a tail but not any legs? A coin!”
Everyone just stared at Pinkie, who gave them all her biggest smile and tiniest wave of her hoof.
“Not the time Pinkster,” Rainbow told her, calmly.
“Perhaps the up-and-down is a metaphor for something,” Fluttershy suggested. “It may not be time itself.”
While they were in the process of figuring out their own dilemma, Ace Ventura and Melissa sat in the front seats of the car. The whole time, Ace stuck his head out the window feeling the wind brushing across his face.
“What are you thinking?” Melissa asked him.
“I’m thinking this whole thing is connected somehow,” Ace responded, frustrated. “I’m thinking I want to find that other ring!”
“Ace, you checked all the rings.”
“I know, Pessimistress. Could anyone else have gotten a ring that year?”
“No. Camp was the only honoree. Just players and coaches. Everyone in the photo.”
As they continued down the hallway, Ace was suddenly struck by another idea.
“… Receipts!” He concluded. “There must be receipts! You have a key to the office.”
“Ace, this has been a really tough day,” Melissa sighed. “Can’t we do this in the morning?”
Ace quickly eyed his watch before smirking a slight.
“Absolutely,” He said.
A little while later, Ace’s car screeched to a stop before the Miami Dolphins headquarters. Ace jumped out, followed by Melissa and the Equestrians.
“I thought you said we could do this in the morning,” Melissa complained.
“Check the time,” Ace smiled. “According to my watch, it’s now 1 am, which means it’s morning.”
“… He does have a point,” Twilight replied.
Ace began to walk towards the building, while Melissa rubbed her aching head from the headache building up inside. She used her key to let them in, knowing she was never getting home nor getting any sleep till this case was over. All was dark inside the office; team pictures adorned the walls. The team started going through the files of any and everything related to the 1982 season.
“These files go back to seventy-eight,” Melissa told him.
“Alrighty then,” Ace smiled. “Everyone, grab a folder and start researching.”
Everyone grabbed a file and began skimming through the contents. All the while, Melissa looked at Ace with a smile on her face. The way Ace flipped through a file cabinet, looking at the receipt, anyone could see that perhaps she was actually starting to warm up to him.
“That was pretty impressive,” She complimented. “What you did back at the apartment.”
“She’s absolutely right, Ace,” Spike agreed. “The way you were able to come up with a pretty good hypothesis from so little evidence is pretty cool.”
“Maybe you should have joined the police force…” Rarity suggested. “You’ve already got the makings of a real detective.”
“I don’t do humans,” Ace shook his head.
Everyone chuckled a tad, as Melissa drew herself closer.
“You really love animals, don’t you?” She inquired.
Ace put his search to a hold, gazing his attention toward her eyes.
“If it gets cold enough,” He joked.
Once again, Ace’s humor made everyone laugh all the while the man kept speaking.
“No, I feel a kindship with them. I understand them. Wanna hear something kinda spooky?”
“Sure,” Melissa nodded.
“Whatcha got fer us partner?” Applejack asked.
Everyone gathered around Ace, as he started to tell them his story.
“One time, when I was about twelve, I had this dream that I was being followed by a dog with rabies. He had these really bloodshot eyes and foam coming out of his mouth… but no matter how far I ran he just kept gaining on me. And just before I got to my front door… he jumped on me and sunk his teeth in. Then I woke up and felt the back of my neck… check this out.”
Ace motioned for Melissa to feel the back of his neck. But when she does, he snapped at her hand, barking like a vicious dog.
“ARARAR!!!”
“AHHHH!!!”
Melissa jumped out of her skin as does everyone else at the sudden action. Twilight held her now furiously beating heart, Rainbow and Applejack held each other tightly, Fluttershy hid behind Rarity, and Spike rocked back and forth in a fetal position. The only that wasn’t fazed was Pinkie Pie, who burst out laughing.
“HA! HA! HA! HA! HA! That was classic!” She laughed. “Good one Ace!”
Ace laughed as well, giving Pinkie a high five/hoof.
“Ohhh! You bastard!” Melissa chuckled.
“I’m sorry, I just couldn’t stop myself,” He said. “You really wanna know why I do what I do?”
“Suddenly, I don’t think we really want to know anymore,” Twilight replied, calming down.
“Agreed!” The group added, in unison.
Ace and Melissa both looked at each other and, for reasons the group couldn’t understand, just stared into each other’s eyes for a moment. This did not go unnoticed by Rarity and Pinkie Pie.
“Ooh la-la!” Rarity winked at Pinkie. “Looks like those two are starting to warm up to each other.”
“Don’t you just adore ‘romance’?” Pinkie responded. “It’s like the warm ooey-gooey center of a molten chocolate cake. So good!”
This went on until Ace finally broke himself away, now looking somewhat nervous.
“So—um—are these all the receipts?” He asked nervously.
“Oh, yeah,” Melissa responded, mildly annoyed. “I don’t know.”
“There’s only a dozen of them here.”
Ace turned from the file cabinet with a hopeless look on his face. Melissa began to clean up his mess.
“Gee… maybe they were misplaced because somebody didn’t put the files back when he was…”
“Who the hell is that?” Ace interrupted.
“What?” Melissa asked.
Ace crossed to a big picture of the ’82 team hanging on the adjacent wall and pointed out one player.
“That!” He emphasized. “Who the hell is that?!”
He quickly pulled out his crossed-out pictures of the whole team, comparing the two pictures.
“Oh, that’s Ray Finkle… the kicker,” Melissa explained. “Don’t you know who Ray Finkle is?”
“No!” Ace shook his head. “How come he’s not in this picture?!”
Melissa checked Ace’s photo, noticing the differences.
“This was the picture you were using?” She asked. “This was taken earlier in the year. Finkle wasn’t added to the roster till mid-season.”
A look of realization began to dawn on Ace’s face.
“He’s the guy that missed the final field goal in the Super Bowl that year,” Melissa continued. “Cost the Dolphins the game.”
“But he got himself a ring, didn’t he?” Ace smirked.
“Definitely,” Melissa nodded.
Not only that, but Twilight also looked as though she was starting to figure something out amidst this whole scenario.
“Wait a minute!” She spoke up. “Can I see that picture?”
Melissa handed the picture to Twilight, who stared at it intensely. It was as though she were trying like hell to figure something out. While doing so, the others approached Twilight’s side looking at her with great concern.
“You okay there, Twi?” Rainbow asked.
“I don’t know how I didn’t think of this before,” Twilight whispered.
“Think of what exactly?” Rarity asked.
“The riddle!” Twilight responded. “Up and down the fields refers to a football field. As for racing towards the finish line, when you’re rushing to the end zone to score, it’s a race against ‘time’.”
“She’s right!” Rainbow realized. “It’s like Buckball back home. You run up and down the field to make it to your end zone to score and you’re on a time clock between quarters.”
“If that’s the case, wherever Phantom Dragon is, it has something to do with football,” Spike concluded.
The girls and Spike turned toward Ace and Melissa (And vice versa).
“Maybe this Finkle feller’s got somethin’ tah to with all this,” Applejack hypothesized.
“Is there anything we can find about Finkle?” Rainbow asked.
“We’ve got records in the computers,” Melissa responded.
Not too long later, the entire group searched through all the files on any and everything surrounding Finkle. Newspapers, various articles, headshots, and just about ‘anything’ that would give some form of hint as to Finkle’s connection with the whole case. Until at last, they found something that would grant them an idea as to what’s going on.
“’Replacement Kicker Having Great Year’… ‘Ready for Super Bowl, Confident Kicker Boasts’,” Melissa read.
“’Field Goal Sails Wide, Dolphins Lose Super Bowl’,” Ace read.
“’The kick heard round the world’,” Melissa finished. “That was Finkle. The Dolphins lost by one point.”
“Huh. So a cocky upstart goes into a season with a full head of steam and chokes when it matters most?” Rainbow asked.
“Sounded an awful lot like y’all when yah wanted to be a Wonderbolt,” Applejack chuckled.
“Hey, I did become a Wonderbolt in case you forgot,” Rainbow argued.
“Not the time guys!” Twilight shushed.
Another headline hit the screen: ‘FINKLE CONTRACT NOT RENEWED’.
“Poor guy,” Melissa spoke sadly.
“Poor guy with a motive, baby,” Ace smirked. “Where is he now?”
“Last I heard, he went back to his hometown, Collier County. He used to work in a bar up there.”
“REHEHEALLY,” Ace pondred.
“So the answer is simple,” Twilight piped in. “We go to Collier County and find out all we can on Finkle. My hunch is when we find him, we’ll find Snowflake and Phantom Dragon.”
“Can you drop me off before you go?” Melissa asked.
“No way!” Ace shook his head. “It may not be safe at your apartment, and you shouldn’t be left alone.”
“What do you suggest?”
“Well… you could always bunk out with me tonight,” Ace grinned.
“Oh—uh—I don’t know,” Melissa chuckled nervously. “Don’t you already have a house full?”
“Oh yeah, that reminds me,” Ace grinned, handing his credit card to the Equestrians. “Why don’t you guys take this and get yourself a hotel room tonight? I’ll pick you up tomorrow morning and we’ll head to Collier County.”
“Well… okay,” Twilight answered awkwardly.
Once Twilight Sparkle had the card, the whole group proceed to depart from the Dolphin Headquarters and piled together into Ace’s car one-by-one. Soon they sped off down the highway until Ace eventually pulled the car to a screeching halt in front of one of the local hotels and allowed the Equestrians out.
“I’ll pick you guys up here tomorrow at 8,” He told them.
With that settled, the tired peeled rubber and the car sped off down the street again. The Equestrian group coughed heavily as the exhaust pipe released a large puff of smoke in their faces.
“What is *Cough* he *Cough* in such a rush for?” Fluttershy asked, clearing her lungs.
“*Cough* Trust me Flutters, you don’t want to know,” Rainbow responded. “What that man wants, none of us want to be around for it.”
“Wait, how do you know what he’s up to?” Spike asked.
“Trust me, I know,” Rainbow responded.
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The sheets bounced up and down in repeated fashion. Skin, sweat, and even the sheets themselves fly as Ace and Melissa rolled back and forth along the bed. It was plain to see that Ace was taking no prisoners in this case.
Fifty or so animals sat at the bottom of the bed, eyes as big as silver dollars, all watching them with silent fascination. Between the furious lovemaking and the staring animals, Melissa and Ace simultaneously reached the pinnacle of ‘pleasure’.
“Oh man… oh man!” Melissa gasped, totally amazed and exhausted. “Oh wow!”
“I’m sorry… that’s never happened to me before,” Ace mocked embarrassment. “I must be tired.”
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The whole team shuddered over the very thought, but they were all in agreement that it would be something Ace Ventura would do. The fact that Melissa would even agree to it… that was another story.
“Yeah… you would know that…” Spike nodded in agreement. “Considering you and A.J. are always at it on nearly every adventure.”
On ‘that’ fact even Twilight and her friends nodded with Spike, sharing a few ‘Oh yeah!’, and ‘Totally agree’, and ‘So very often’, among other forms of exchanges. To which their two friends glanced at Spike in annoyance.
“Now Spike, we don’t do it all the time,” Applejack replied.
“And even when we do, we always washed the sheets after every practice,” Rainbow added.
The group murmured amongst themselves over the matter (‘Sure you do.’), and it’s plain to see they weren’t entirely on board with that argument.
“We did!” Rainbow insisted. “Besides, with everything happening on this crazy adventure, we’re actually going to take it easy this time. A.J. insists we take it… nice and slow…”
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Sudden gasps and moans filled the room, with heavy commotion taking place beneath the sheets of one of two beds in a slightly cramped motel room. On the other bed, Rarity laid back against the bed frame taking deep breaths all while Twilight Sparkle, sharing the bed, tried to keep herself distracted the only way she can… reading a book she brought for the trip. Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie took whatever sheets the motel would allow, along with a few pillows, and laid casually on the floor like they were having a sleepover.
As for Spike… he sat on the one chair in the room, trying to keep himself comfortable laying his chin on one hand.
“’We’re going to take it easy’ she said,” Spike murmured. “’Nice and slow’ she said…”
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The following day, Ace and the Equestrians sped down Highway One en route to a ‘Deliverance’ type town somewhere deep within the Everglades. They passed a faded, old, and barely legible sign which read: “WELCOME TO COLLIER COUNTY. HOME OF RAY FINKLE”, only the ‘F’ in “FINKLE” had been replaced with “ST” in spray paint.
Twilight soon noticed the sign and attempted to bring the others attention.
“Did any pony else see the welcome sign vandalized back there?” Twilight asked.
“Yeah, that’s definitely a red flag,” Spike replied.
“So what?” Pinkie remarked, unworriedly. “Just because a sign got spray-painted like that, it doesn’t mean the whole town’s suffering because of the ‘Kick Heard ‘Round the World’ thing.”
Eventually, they came upon another sign which read ‘Gas – Food – 2 Miles’, only the word ‘Food’ was crossed out. A pitifully sad country tune played on the radio of a joint called ‘Bilbo’s Gas Station’. Fern Bilbo, the supposed owner, sat at his cluttered desk with the end of an old shotgun in his mouth. The man struggled to reach the trigger.
Through the glass behind him, Ace’s car pulled up to the only gasoline pump.
*DING!*
The bell rang. Fern Begrudgingly took the gun out of his mouth, set it down, and got up from his desk to walk out.
Ace emerged from his car, honking the horn a couple times while opening his mouth in tune. The Equestrians rolled down the windows, or what was left of them.
“Excuse me, sir,” Twilight called out. “Do you know where we can find the Pigskin Sports Bar?”
“Do I have a ‘kick me’ sign on my back, son?” Fern asked.
“I wouldn’t know anything about that,” Ace replied. “But if you could point me toward the bar—”
All of a sudden, Fern broke down sobbing.
“They all left me… all of them!” Fern bawled.
All the girls started to feel uncomfortable watching the sad scene. But leave it to Pinkie Pie to figure out a means of getting into the bar.
“Well… hypothetically speaking, say they all left you and went to the Pigskin Sports Bar,” Pinkie spoke. “How would they have gotten ‘there’ from ‘here’?”
“’Bout two miles down and take the first left,” Fern answered.
“Thanks a lot—” Ace began.
“Thanks very much!” Pinkie cut in. “Take care now, ‘bye ‘bye then!”
“Hey, that’s what I was going to say,” Ace remarked.
Without another word, Ace got into his car and pulled out.
Fern soon re-entered the gas station and took his seat at the desk. He placed the end of the shotgun in his mouth once more, reaches for the trigger and…
*DING!*
Another car pulled up to the pump. Exasperated, he removed the gun out of his mouth… again.
“Can’t get anything done around here…” Fern murmured to himself.
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The Pigskin Sports Bar, a weather dive in the middle of a swamp. That was where Ace parked the car. If depression had a home, this would be it. Several dejected men, with various degrees of missing teeth, sat around the bar. A couple hapless guys played a round of pool while another three played darts. That was all they could see as Ace and the gang entered this firm establishment, the man popped a sunflower seed into his mouth as he addressed the room.
“Excuse me, guys?!” Ace spoke up. “My name is Ace Ventura, I’m a pet detective. These are my associates, the Equestrians. I’d like to as a few questions if I could.”
But not a single soul dared even look at the man.
“Well, don’t jump in all at once,” Applejack piped in. “Just a few questions, that’s all.”
But still… no reaction. Not a murmur, not a glance… not even a ‘whisper’. Just deathly silence.
“Who wants gum?!” Pinkie offered, with a stick from her mane.
But again… no reaction. Ace released a loud *Phew!* as he and the gang walked over to the bartender and slid a five across the bar.
“I’m looking for a guy who used to work here,” Ace spoke.
“That right?” The Bartender replied, taking the money.
“He was a kicker for the Dolphins. Ray Finkle.”
A pool ball flew by Ace’s head, shattering a mirror just behind the bar. The Equestrians yelped out of fright. All eyes were now on Ace, as he picked up the thrown ball.
“That would be a scratch,” Ace spoke, to the guy who threw it.
“I’d say seven years bad luck…” Pinkie pointed to the mirror.
Several undesirables surrounded Ace, including a giant of a man with little to no teeth.
“You a friend of Finkle’s?” The toothless giant asked.
“… Yes?” Rainbow answered.
*SNAP!* *CRASH!*
The giant smashed his pool stick in half against his knee; his opponent merely tossed his aside.
“Sorry… she has ‘say the opposite of what you mean’ disease,” Ace apologized, on Rainbow’s behalf.
The giant’s partner smashed a bottle, pointing the broken end towards Ace.
“… It’s the Thug Tug all over again…” Fluttershy whimpered nervously.
“Oh, you want to play with glass huh?” Ace challenged.
“ACE, DON’T PROVOKE THEM FURTH—” Twilight warned.
But Ace started to play with eye like he were taking out some contact lens. He then picked up a tiny piece of broken glass that resembled a small broken contact lens from the bar. Spike facepalmed himself upon seeing how much trouble they were in.
“COME ON! FFFAT BOY!” Ace called out.
And he started to pretend jab it in the bottle man’s face. The rest of the hicks moved closer in a rather threatening manner.
“That bastard ruined this town,” The Toothless Giant growled.
“Eww… I hate that!”
“We bet everything we had on that Super Bowl, and that son of a bitch gagged!” One Hick spoke.
“What a jeeerk!” Pinkie feigned shock.
“Yeah, shanked a goddamn 26 yarder!!!” Another hick yelled.
“Death to Finkle!” Ace called out. “Death to Finkle!”
The bartender stepped in just as things were growing serious.
“We had a hell of a thing going here,” The Bartender spoke menacingly. “Tourists coming to see Ray Finkle’s hometown. He was standing right over there when he got the call from the Dolphins.”
The bartender pointed to a payphone. Sure enough, it had the shit beaten out of it. Every expletive you could every imagine, what with all the graffiti around it and the tons of bullet-holes not to mention the adjoined wall.
“Did he ever come back?” Fluttershy asked nervously. “I-I-I mean… after the Super Bowl?”
“Yeah… but the boys here had ways of letting him know he wasn’t welcome,” The Bartender answered.
“Excuse me, I gotta take a wicked Finkle!” One Hick called out.
Laughter erupted from that remark, while some of the Equestrians stared at them blankly… as if they were either processing the meaning or found the joke rather disturbing.
“What’s the difference between Finkle and a jackass?” The toothless giant asked. “A jackass can kick!”
“Hey!!!” Pinkie frowned. “I have friends who resemble that remark!”
“Wait… I know this one,” Ace spoke facetiously.
“He didn’t!” A hick remarked. “And I’ve got the hair on my bumper to prove it!”
Maniacal laughter and chanting ensued as a whole mob shouted ‘FINKLE SUCKS! FINKLE SUCKS!’ over and over. It was plain to see that the once hometown hero had quickly turned into the butt of everyone’s jokes. A moment of glory stolen from him, in favor of being made the subject of ridicule.
“Well… it’s good that you’re dealing with the anger…” Rarity spoke, disturbed.
“So… I don’t suppose anyone’s seen him lately?” Ace asked feebly.
“Perhaps… where he is right now?” Twilight added.
The guys all looked toward Ace and the group.
“No… but we know where his parents live!” The bartender spoke. “Don’t we boys?!”
“Yeah! We sure do!” The hick remarked.
The entire bar started to laugh insanely, while Ace munched on some sunflower seeds in the midst of all the calamity.
“Okay…” Pinkie spoke up. “I’m starting to come around the idea of red flags surrounding this town.”
“I don’t want to have to say I told you so,” Spike began. “But… I told you so!”
A colossal piece of evidence indeed, one of which was found by an accident in some form. Turns out, in the case of the subject with the ring, they've been partly going about the search all wrong. And now that they know there's someone they failed to check, with a location as to his point of origin, it's a matter of going to this Collier County to find the guy connected with the missing dolphin and 'possibly' Phantom Dragon. I will tell you folks, there 'is' a Collier County in Florida. I don't often go there myself, but I know for a fact it is near the Everglades and that lengthy highway just to get there. If you make a wrong turn and go down that highway west... you're stuck there for a few hours, there's no turnarounds on that road.
Well they got a new suspect to check out, and boy he is the exact opposite of popular even in his birth town. And Rainbow and Applejack really need to to reign it in. Especially when they're bunking somewhere with their friends in close proximity.
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Tell me about it. I wouldn't want to stay in that town if I was regaded as the guy who choked in the final quarter. Then again, I was more of a theater guy than a sports man myself. It's one thing to 'watch' the games, but playing 'football'... yeah, I have better luck in European football.
Thank God that I live in Europe. We don’t have that kind of problem.
Me when I think of Ray Finkle:
"Finkle..."
Makes me glad I am more of a movie and game lover than a sports fan.
Spike is a savage in this chapter lol, the poor town in shambles due to one failed kick, oh boy oh boy oh boy, what a mess, hysterical chapter XD
Deleted scenes are definitely used in this chapter because I don't recall this stuff when I saw the film.
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You don't have that kind of problem... 'yet'. Never say 'never' my friend.
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Well, even they get their bad moments too. It was no picture for those who were part of the 'worst' movies in cinematic history and I can name plenty.
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Oh yeah. That angsty teen deal is really starting to form in that guy. But yeah, he's definitely got some moments in this chapter.
Awesome
Oh, dear... I think A.J. and Rainbow need to control themselves. Anyway, good work as always, Double E!
So they have a new lead...but they can't find the lead
My god Rainbow And Applejack Control yourselves you got company!
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This is getting interesting
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Agree with you there Tim
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Add to the fact that Ace's funds are so low that they 'literally' could only afford 'a' room... to accommodate the whole group. Like that second special with The Nostalgia Critic and his entire team.
Well they've definitely come a long way from friendship town.
Was that a batman Arkham reference?
Ah yes, the Receipts, as in the former and disgraced players that were no longer part of the team because of either injuries or unsportsmanlike conduct.
Yeah, and you ended up being annoying about it whilst also boasted a lot.
HA!! Stinkle!! That's a good one.
Wow, who'd thunk that a town can suffer a lot because one guy mucked up. You don't see that often every day. Or do you?
Music for someone like Ace Ventura:
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Canterlot Mall Theater, Discord's Branch
Sci-Twi: Actually, Time is more then just a circle, It is a line that can branch off into different possibilities. For example, If i were to have two cards in front of you to chose, there are a number of cosmic factors that would happen after. If you were to chose this ace, you could be on your way to be an actor. But if you instead get the 3 of clubs, you could just get a job at a department store.
Rainbow: Ugh,...even at the movies, you can't go 5 minutes without making something a lesson from school.
Rainbow: I could take myself anytime and any day!
Pinkie: OOH! I got one! What travels around the world, but stays in one corner?.... A Stamp!
Sci-Twi: We all know that he's just going to ignore everybody and takes them back to the stadium to look for those receipts, right?
Everyone: Yep.
Sci-Twi: And i'm right.
Sunny Flare: Touché, Mr. Ventura. Touché.....
Some of the girls and boys in the theater couldn't help but chuckle at the pet detective's joke.
.
Fluttershy: I can relate, as i bet my counterpart can as well.
The Teens and pets moved and leaned in a little closer....
And Everyone else and the theater recoiled back as well. Some of them even let out a scream of shock. While Winona was barking at the screen, Opal had shot out of her seat and was clinging onto the celling until she lets go and drops down into Slappy's hands as the other animals were settling down.
Pinkie: I'll say. You got us all real good.
Sugarcoat: Yeah,....and made some of us see our lives flash before our eyes.
Everyone: Same!
Pinkie: Looks like the Love Boat is making another run again!
Rarity: They actually are so adorable for each other!
Flash sighs as Derpy enters the theater and give him his usually pat on his back.
Sandelwood: I don't think I've seen the gang talk to that cat yet.
Applejack looked closely at the man in the picture
Applejack: And yet some how, i can't shake the feeling that I've seen him before,....
Everyone: Oooooooooooooooh......
Sci-Twi: I think we just got a lead on a new prime suspect.
Rainbow: Football! Of Course!
Flash: It was right in front of us this whole time!
Sci-Twi: And I'm willing to bet that the same person who kidnapped Snowflake, also has Phantom too!
Rainbow: So they have their own version of basketball, Huh? ...... Interesting.
Apple Bloom: Now, we're starting to get somewhere.
Sweetie Belle: But what happen to him after this is the real question.
Applejack: And sounds like you when you became the captain of every sports team back at school.
Rainbow: At least i had a little more modest and tried to keep the team from losing, which I Did!
Sci-Twi: Not the time guys!
Spike: He is definitely looking like our guy!
Sci-Twi: We got a motive. Now i think it's time to pay the man an interrogative visit.
Sci-Twi: Oh,.....I think i know where this is going......Rainbow, Rarity, Applejack, when i tell you, cover the girl's eyes.
The respected girls just shrug and got ready with their orders.
Sci-Twi: Girls! Now! CMC, ALSO COVER YOUR EARS!
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Flash: Oh Man!
Snails: Guys, remember when i asked earlier about how to get a girl to like me?
Snips and the rest of the theater: NOT NOW, SNAILS!
Spike covered his eyes while the other pets looked on with the same reactions as the animals in the movie.
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Sci-Twi: Ok,....all clear!
The girls uncovered the CMC's eyes and ears.
Sweetie Belle: So why couldn't we see that part of the movie.
Rarity: We'll definitely tell you when you aLOT older....
Rainbow: WHOA! Go me!
Sci-Twi: Oh, for FAUST's SAKE!
Scootaloo: Hey Applebloom, Sweetie. Did you guys just get deja vu for last Christmas when we saw the Gri-
Applejack: Kids, Just close your eyes and start thinking about Halloween! And it'll pass.
Spike: Trust us, other me. We all here know the pain and feeling.
Trixie: Trixie thinks that is a concern.
Rainbow: You know, for once, i think i can agree with you.
Pinkie: I agree with me. What could possibly go wrong?
Sci-Twi: Our lives' famous last words....
Rainbow: (sigh) You just Aaallllways have to say things and stuff like that, don't you?
Wallfower: Oh my gosh!
Juniper: Cover your eyes!
Wallflower: Phew,.....saved by the bell.....literally.
Fluttershy: I'm feeling uncomfortable right now....
Everyone gasps,....
and then, they all sighed in relief.
Pinkie: or commonly known by their stage name of Exposé.
Sci-Twi: .....What?
Sour Sweet: (sweetly) Well this quite a home establishment. ...... (sourly) If You want to bring the whole room down.
Everyone: AAAH!
Sci-Twi: WHOA!
Fluttershy: EEP!
Pinkie: Touched a nerve there....
Flash: That got their attention.
Rainbow: Wrong Answer!
Everyone, including the pets:
Rainbow: Pinkie,..... for now on, ..... every time you think about getting the urge to saying the phrase, "What could possibily go wrong?"......Just. Don't. Say IT!
Pinkie: Noted.
Snails: HAhahahahahaahah!......I don't get it.
Rarity: Probably best if you don't, sport.
Pinkie and Applejack: So do we....
Flash: Well,.....now we know that Ray isn't exactly top dog around here because of the you-know-what....
Sci-Twi: and I guess our next stop is Ray's family household.
Rainbow: Also, need i say more about asking that question, Pinkie?
Pinkie: Yeah, i had that coming....
Next>>>
Finally there is an important advance in the investigation. Twilight solved the riddle, and it seems Ace discovered there is a ring that neither he nor the equestrians have checked: the one that belongs to Ray Finkle, a former Dolphins' player who was " the best player of the moment" and screwed up in the end. The worse is that he not only lost the game, but also his work and everyone's respect. Even the city where she was born and raised was ruined by her relationship with him (that's already a bit too much, isn't it?). That sounds like a good motive for revenge. They already have a principal suspect.
Now that is mentioned. It sure would be interesting to know why Ace decided to become a pet detective. Did he want to be a police officer but he wasn't admitted? Or did he have a pet that was kidnapped?
At the moment we see that he can be very romantic, having an experience with Melissa that he will never forget (later all of you will known why). And Applejack and Rainbow are in for an experience Spike won't forget (Good reference to Skinner from The Simpsons)
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Me: Plus, people would find it cheating with your speed being magic an all.
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Me: That was terrible.
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Me: Maybe.
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Me: When you're right, you're right.
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Me: Aye aye, Captain!
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Me: Right, we forgot.
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Me: We're all ears.
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Me: Ace Ventura everyone!~
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Me: Young love...
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Me: Wasn't added until mid-season...
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Me: *speaking like M.Bison* Of course!
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Me: Well then, let's check them out.
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Me: That hunch is to my liking Twitwi~
Twilight: *gives me a look like she's weirded out by that nickname*
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Me: *smiles knowing what's going to happen*
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Me: *without them knowing, I secretly teleport to the window outside Ace's apartment and use a special device to call a cartoon friend of mine*
???: Ok Cinema, I got the facetime thing on. So what'd you wanna show me?
Me: This~ *positions the device against the window to show him what Ace and Melissa are doing*
???: Hehe, alright~ *pulls his pants down*
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Me: *teleport into the room*
Twilight: Where did you go off to?
Me: Oh nowhere special. *produces pizza boxes* Pizza anypony?
Pinkie: I'm in!
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Me: *gives a look that says 'Really Pinkie?'*
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Me: You snooze, you loose.
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Me: Don't believe that superstition, Pinkamena.
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Me: *secretly writing it down*
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Me: She's not joking you know.
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Me: Do you know where he is?
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Me: Let's head to Finkle's parents' house and find more answers there.
Ace: Allllrighty then~
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Discord's Theatre, Galaxy Branch
Ahsoka Tano: It would appear that all of them are hard at work trying to find Phantom.
Postwar: Phantom is one of our most important members. Without him, we'd all be dead in the dust. (Looks at Sunset, gaining her attention). And Sunset, you should also thank him, after all, he personally tried to lead a rescue mission from within your subconscious by reaching out to you via Jedi Masters from the past (Sunset was surprised by this)
Sunset Shimmer: Uh, they call it a riddle for a reason Twilight.
Cal Kestis: Everything in the galaxy has riddles for only the most focused could solve.
Galen Marek: Wish Ben would focus more (Ben blushes from embarrassment whilst pouting).
Sunset Shimmer: (Groans and slaps forehead), Rainbow.
Postwar: No matter what world, Rainbow will always be lazy.
Byph: Uh, you think?
Sunset Shimmer: Ah, now that's a riddle i haven't heard in a long time.
Postwar: Same here. Glad to know riddles like these never fade.
Postwar: She forgot the other ones.
Han Solo: Other ones?
Postwar: Yeah, there are players with rings that also got kicked out and banned because of unsportsmanlike conduct, cheated and also illegally bet on their own games.
Ben Solo: Betting on your own game is illegal?
Sunset Shimmer: Yeah, there are plenty of players who tend to bet on these games. Like say, you secretly bet on both teams. If one team wins, he'll gain the profits from the other. If they did that all the time, many places that host them will go bankrupt, and the whole Football business would never recover.
Lando Calrissian: Classing gambling 101. There's also a slight chance that if you win, you'll end up being robbed by the ones who also betted on it.
Han Solo: He's speaking from experience (Gets a glare from Lando).
Luke Skywalker: When in doubt, go to the source of a team's information.
Petro: Timing is both key and everything.
Katooni: She does have a point.
Sunset Shimmer: Pff, good luck with that, there are like over twenty years of players to go through.
Ben Solo: Why so many?
Han Solo: What, did you really expect the team would be the same.
Leia Organa: Like Postwar said, there are also those who got kicked out and banned from their fields.
C3-PO: Oh, it seems miss Melissa is warming up to him.
Ahsoka Tano: It takes everyone a long time to warm up to one another.
Postwar: Yeah, it took you lot a while to warm up to each other. (Though some blushed, he wasn't wrong with that claim.)
Postwar: He would, but then he wouldn't have found his calling. (Grogu babbled a bit in baby talk). That's right Grogu, a calling, one that would help you define of what you're really good at.
Postwar: Who wouldn't. I'm surprised Sunset's Fluttershy never got the chance to meet him, the two would hit things well off.
Sunset Shimmer: That she would. (Miss you Fluttershy.)
Gets a laugh from the audience too.
Ahsoka Tano: I like him. He seems to know how to brighten others' spirits.
Postwar: Were the universe lucky enough to have folks like him around.
Cal Kestis: Ain't that the truth.
Postwar: Pff, whimps. (Gets a chuckle from most of the group)
Han Solo: Uh, what?
Sunset & Postwar: It's Pinkie Pie, don't question it.
Sunset Shimmer: And just like that, the moment's ruined.
Postwar: (Jokingly), I can sense a thousand drama queens wailing out in despair for the lack of romance. (Everyone laughed at that)
Huyang: And so, they find a person that was not among them.
Postwar: Spot on there.
Ben Solo: But who is he?
Sunset Shimmer: Just be patient Ben. You'll learn soon enough.
Lando Calrissian: And so things finally begin to unfold.
Galen Marek: Wonder why they couldn't have done this sooner?
Postwar: Plot convenience. Don't ask, just take my word for it.
Sunset Shimmer: He's not wrong there.
Ganodi: Ooh, looks like they finally found their suspect.
Postwar: Oh geeze, Twilight is doing the bummer researcher thing again.
Sunset Shimmer: She's a what?
Postwar: A bummer, you know, as in the more you know, the bigger bummer you are, like Twilight.
Sunset Shimmer: No she's not.
Postwar: (Pulls out chart and shows her) Look at this chart and you'll see the difference between knowledge and being a total bummer. Take Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash and their counterparts for starters. Together they know virtually nothing and everybody loves them (Sunset was surprised by this). Then there's you, Sci-Twi, Starlight, along with Spike, Rarity, Applejack and their counterparts. They don't know too much, or too little. Leaving not to many feeling strongly about you lot one way or another (Gets a pout and flexed eyebrow look from Sunset). And then there's Twilight. She knows a lot, and she bums everyone out.
Sunset Shimmer: (Ponders whilst crossing her legs and places her hand under her chin)Huh. So that would make a lot of sense for a lot of us.
Katochi: Now they seem to get it.
Leia Organa: Those are computers?
Postwar: Well what'd you expect, not everyone lives in a galaxy far far away with advance technology and robots ya know.
Sunset Shimmer: He's not wrong. Remember, I used to come from a world like this before I settled here.
Luke Skywalker: They sort of remind me of the old technology my uncle uses for farming.
Ben Solo: So he ended up being overconfident for the upcoming match, and when he finally begins to play, he suddenly gets a fright and loses?
Galen Marek: Sounds like it.
Ben Solo: Did any of you choke when you lot started out?
Everyone mummers and "Oh yeah" and "Definitely" lines
Sunset Shimmer: And left you with a really big ego.
Zatt: That bad?
Postwar: Put it this way, she's got an ego as big as Tatooine.
Ganodi: Wow, that is bad.
Postwar: And also got banned. Kinda reminds me of this one soccer player in the Super League.
Galen Marek: What did he do that was so bad?
Postwar: He shoved a whistle in the referee's nose and uh...neutered him. (Everyone was shocked and taken aback by that)
Galen Marek: Okay, that's really bad.
Sunset Shimmer: And I thought Lightning Dust was bad.
Ben Solo: What's a motive?
Postwar: A reason to commit a crime and why.
Ben Solo: Did this Emperor you told me in the stories have a reason?
Postwar: Yes.
Everyone: He was a mad power hungry lunatic.
Leia Organa: That's easier said than done.
Han Solo: Trying to find someone is like trying to find a gemstone in a snow pile.
Postwar: Ho boy. (Face palming)
Sunset Shimmer: What?
Postwar: I believe you know the term, "When a mommy and daddy like each other very much"...(Everyone widened their eyes and blushed, realizing what he was getting at).
Lando Calrissian: Nice save.
Postwar: And three...two...one...(Used the Force to block Ben Solo's eyes and ears, whilst also bound and gagging him at the same time)
(Everyone blocking their eyes from the embarrasing ordeal)
Sunset Shimmer: (Surprised tone) Seriously?!
Postwar: Yeah, they do it at every chance they get.
Han Solo: I was wondering what all that noise was at the Falcon's secret compartment.
Leia Organa: And why the sheets smelled like sweat and shame.
Postwar, Sunset, Leia and Galen: Sure you do.
Postwar: In three, two, one...
Everyone were surprised by what they were doing.\
Pesto: Okay, wow.
C-3PO: Oh my.
Han Solo: Wow, those two are really going all the way.
Postwar: Well Applejack does have a lot of endurance.
Sunset Shimmer: And Rainbow Dash does have a lot of stamina.
Galen Marek: So it kind of makes sense.
Katochi: Well, it is kind of their fault for not getting a separate room in the first place.
Zatt: You got that right.
Postwar: (Looks at Sunset and Galen mischievously) Are you two getting any ideas? (The two stare at him angrily, then tackled him over, trying to beat him up)
Postwar (After avoiding the beatdown and used his version of the force to calm them down), laughed his head off after seeing this.
Gungi: (Growling and speaking in his native language)?
Postwar: Don't you get it, his last name is Finkle, but remove the F and add the letters ST in front of it, you get...
Everyone then got it and ended up laughing too.
Byph: Something tells me that's not the case.
Sunset gasped and clasped her mouth shut.
Ganodi: What is he doing?
Mando: Isn't it obvious? He's trying to kill himself. (Many gasped at that whilst Ben was able to get himself free)
R2: Beeps in worry.
C-3PO: I agree R2. Something tells me this will not end well.
Leia Organa: This man needs some Therapy.
Postwar: Or at least move to a new place before it turns into a dump, like you did. (Gets a glare from Leia, with Sunset giving him a "Seriously" look. Postwar realized what he said and sheepishly chuckles). Do'h shoot. Sorry about that.
Mando: Death will have to be delayed a little much longer.
Leia Organa: That place has seen better days.
Han Solo: The Canteens on Tatooine are more well maintained than this.
Luke Skywalker: Agreed.
Lando Calrissian: Ain't that the truth. (Chewbacca growls in agreement)
Cal Kestis: Did they let themselves be reduced like this because of one mistake?
Postwar: Things like this tend to fall on people a lot.
Leia Organa: Still, even I wouldn't let any place be reduced like this.
Postwar: To quote Johnny Bravo, this won't end well.
Galen Marek: For once I agree with you.
Ahsoka Tano: Thug Tug?
Sunset Shimmer: She means the place the last time they traveled together.
Luke Skywalker: He may be strange, but he does know when to be brave, even if it is foolish.
Postwar: Speaking from experience? (Luke clears his throat after that)
Postwar: As Obi-Wan's master one said, Whenever you gamble, you will eventually lose.
Sunset Shimmer: Ain't that the truth.
Mando: This is just sad.
Galen Marek: Agree with you there.
Postwar: And cue the bad jokes.
Petro: Yikes, that is horrible.
Postwar: Told you.
Postwar: Not really. We must not feed anger too much. As a psychologist once said, It's alright to be angry, it's what we do with that anger that's important.
Luke Skywalker: True words of wisdom there.
Postwar: They're almost as bad as the joker.
Sunset Shimmer: Who?
Postwar: Long story.
Postwar: She's Pinkie Pie, what's you expect. She always had trouble picking something up whenever it comes to problems. It's the thing with Maud and the Yuvidiphone all over again.
Sunset Shimmer: (Rolls her eyes) Tell me about it.
Considering the fact that Rainbow Dash and Applejack are two peaches without an eggplant, does that mean on their adventures they carry with them an artificial....you know I shouldn't even go there, this whole hanky-panky episode has put dirty thoughts into all of us!
this is my first time here and my question is: after that movie can you cinematic adventures cloudy with a chance of meatballs movies Please?
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Look buddy, since you're new here, I'm going to level with you as 'gently' as I can:
The Cinematic Adventures Team, that being Mr. Enigma and myself as his loyal assistant, do not... and I'll repeat...
We do NOT take orders... from 'anyone'.
We already have a set schedule as far as what we plan to do following the events of this story. If you want to see a movie covered for the series, though I'm sure someone's already suggested this multiple times before you, you'd have to submit your request in the Request Thread Forum. And to do that you'd have to be a member of our group.
And based on first impressions about you as of this moment... I'm not convinced you have the maturity to be part of the team. So the answer to your request right now:
No.
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So if not then when is the author gonna do cloudy with a chance of meatballs? i mean that is my favorite movie since i was young
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Oh, Batman Begins? I saw that one. I think it will be an interesting movie to work with.
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OK, I get the other shit you gotta deal with except for the last one, who are you talking about with suction-cups?.
the young six pov
Gallus: " Does he mean Harry?"
Smolder: " I think he does, but I'm more courious about that box.
Yona: " Yak say we follow!
The young six then charged out the door before the adults could stop them . Ocellus flew behind and only just remembered what or who was guarding the halls now.
Ocellus: " Hey guys wait! Remember when I came back smelling like a dog well the reason for that is....
But before she could finish the gang stopped dead in their tracks because who was in front why Fluffy of course. They trimble at the three heads growling at them and closed their eyes when like before all the heads began to lick the young six happy to see them.
Silverstream: " Ha ha ! Hey Fluffy down boy.
Smolder: " Eww! Dog slobber.
Gallus: " I'm going to be cleaning that off my feathers for weeks. What's he doing here.
Ocellus: "I guess Hogwarts doesn't need him now the stone is destroyed. Massager adding him as well as other things like cameras and anti-shapeshiting traps as security to protect the theater. "
Soon they made it to my temporary office and quietly opened the door. My desk was placed with my back to the door so I didn't hear them. A magic puzzle box was difficult to open, it could have many compartments each with different requirements to open one could require a powerful spell while the next a mental formula equation once.
This first compartment had symbols on the four corners of the elements water, fire, earth and air but why I couldn't understand.
Meanwhile back with the others the movie continues, but the others began debating.
Shining Armor: "We shouldn't continue till the young ones and Massager return. What if something happens?"
Ember: "He's a wizard, he can take care of himself plus his got a Changling and another dragon to help if worst comes to worst.
Thorax: "Ember as the leader of your race you must always worry about their safety. "
Ember: " I do Thorax but I also allow them to express themselves freely. So long as they don't piss me off we'll get along just fine."
Cadence: " That isn't very reassuring."
Discord: " Oh hush all of you the movie is almost at its peek. Now on with the show.
Fleetfoot: "Maybe it has something to do with derbies. When we race to a finish line and our places can go up or down depending on the times we finish.
Spitfire: " You may be right."
Cheese sandwich: "IT IS ALWAYSTIME FOR A JOKE!"
Garble: " Then the photo is wrong."
Gilda: and very loud too!
Gabby: "Awe! I love character back stories. "
Now back to me after what felt like hours I figured out the compartment. The symbols themselves were the keys but I had no way to open them. That was when the young six lost their balance and fell in making me drop the box.
Myself: " Guys what are you doing here, the movie is still going.
Yona: We wat help. Stange box appears and you don’t explain.
Myself: You're right. This is a Magic puzzle box. In ancient times before wizards and muggles became enemies and fought each other some tried to join forces creating what was called Alchemy but this isn't like Alchemy you studied at school or those sad faild attempts you see muggles do to get extra money.
This was true Alchemy. A combination of science and magic, these boxes were created for the sole purpose of relaying hidden messages and clues between factions. Once the two races split people over the generation would forget how to open them.
Either focusing on just the magic and never getting anywhere with the science puzzles or focusing on the science and never understanding the magic."
Smolder: " But how would you know which puzzle you've received?
Myself: The puzzle was designed to only be opened a certain way in the cerect order. This is a magic first box meaning you need magic to open it first but there is another problem. Each box is made of different compartments and the number can vary from box to box I can't say for certain how many there are in this one and this first one I can't figure how to open. "
Ocellus: "Wind blows. Fire burns. Rain falls. Earth shakes."
As Ocellus said those words my mind turned. Those words! Those words, I know I heard them before.
Myself: " What! Ocellus say that again."
Ocellus: " Ah wind blows, fire burns, rain falls and earth shakes. "
Smolder: " Where did you find that?"
Ocellus: " it's written here on the top in small print. Each side has lines diving the corners leading to the circle in the center where I assume the box opens.
Each section has the words placed where their respective elements are on the sides."
I thought how stupid it was I didn't see this. I now know how to open it.
Silverstream looked at me worried that I might be beating myself that was when I lowered myself to her and said
Myself: " Sil, I need you to go to concession stand. Ask them for a bottle, tell them I sent you and be quick. "
She could see I was serious and rushed away but the others were still confused.
Smolder: " Is this really the time for a drink? Maybe you'll like some pretzels to go with.
Myself: No I'll explain when she gets back. In the meantime Gallus fly up that self and grab a small silver bag."
Gallus flew up and tossed me the bag, I opened and pulled out my wand so to place it in and call out Accio sand vile. From that a small vile containing sand popped right out and landed in my hand, Silverstream came back just in time with the water.
Myself: "Now listen, I know how to open the box. We need to give each side its respective elements once combined the compartment will open and tell us where and who to send it to next."
Smolder: " What do mean it's element?"
I then pointed one finger telling them to watch then place said finger on the one side that said wind blows. I inhaled a strong breath and blew it onto the side, from this the symbol glew yellow.
The light followed the line up and formed around its portion of the circle.
Myself: " You see! We need air for air, water for water, fire for fire and earth for earth.
That is where these come in. Sil you splash some water onto your claw and touch the water symbol while Gallus takes the vile of sand and sprinkle some of it on the earth symbol. Finally Smolder will..."
Smolder: " Let me guess, breath fire."
So she let out a puff of fire as Silverstream and Gallus opened their elements. Once opened Silverstream splashed the water and Gallus sprinkled the sand completing the circle. Now the box lit and cracked shacking its debry off revealing a more metallic feature then the light took shape.
The shape showed a video of a single planet with vast space cruisers coming and going. I knew this planet Coruscant.
Yona: " Where this be?"
Ocellus: " it looks like a planet from the star wars universe but I don't recognize it.
Myself: That’s because you didn't see it in the movies you saw. This is the city planet Coruscant. It was the central system of the old Republic till the empire took over now Skywalker and the rebellion are trying to return it to it former glory."
Gallus: "But why there?"
Myself: "One of my colleagues Postwarmonkey is their running the theater of that universe if the puzzle box is showing us this it means he is the next one to receive the box and open it. "
Then something happened. The box lifted itself up and spun around till a portal of sorts opened and it went in.
Yona: " Where box go?"
Myself: " If I had to guess it teleported itself to Coruscant and is on its way to Postwar. Hopefully he'll unlock the next puzzle and we'll find Phantom.
Now you guys go back to the show I got to worn Postwar."
As the gang left I was proud of them. Truly gifted they were, when the last one past the door I waved my wand to shut it and headed to a large painting of a fruit basket was hanging.
I began to tickle the left strawberry and it turned into a handle that immediately grabbed and slid the painting to side where it revealed small enchanted painting each with the pictures of us. The temporary runners of the theaters including myself.
I guess Phantom made these for us to communicate incase something happened to him. So I placed my hand on the one for Postwar and began to send telepathic messages telling him of the box and that it's coming to him now. Hopefully he received it.
Garble: " Ah-Ha, I new it."
Then the Young six returned, they told everyone about the box and everyone told them what the missed.
But that was not easy to believe.
Sweetie Belle: I pretty much lost my taste in gum after what happened to Violet Beauregarde.
Apple Bloom: " And Blueberry pies too."
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Again, dialogues need spacing. Helps me to see the words better when they aren’t a jumbled clump.
Also:
I don’t mean to be nitpicking, but when has Rarity ever referred to someone as “sport?” That’s more Rainbow Dash’s character.
Try to keep the characters “in-character.” Understand?
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Nice reactions, but again some humor and some more world building could spice it up than tagging along with Twilight and friends.
I.e. You could’ve explored the town, and then get into all kinds of mishaps with the locals.
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Galaxy
Start of my reaction
Me: “…Oh. It was nothing.” 😬
Inner thoughts: 🗯 (Lewbert Sline impression) “OF COURSE I DID!!! But then, at the last minute, you chose to stay behind in the GALAXY that was holding you prisoner to begin with!? ARE YOU KIDDING ME?!”
(My inner thoughts continued raging)
Inner thoughts: (Ranting and raving like Lewbert and listing)
Inner ME: “And worst of all…YOU. SANG. DISNEY’S DESCENDANTS to INSULT ME?!” (Screams like Lewbert from iCarly)
(We cut back to me in the real world.)
Me: 😓 “I’m a wreck…”
End of my reaction
But seriously, the exchanges are good, the battle of wits are humorous, although that “Bummer Knowledge” was long-winded.
But otherwise, it’s good!
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Ah-ha. Got yourself a story going on. Nice to bring back Fluffy from Hogwarts.
Again, watch the grammars…
Besides that, where and when did the box come from?
This is exactly why we try to encourage our commentators to be more organize and clean with their comments. It helps me a lot to keep track of your stories and to follow the flow of it.
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Again, watch the grammars. I’m not being — how do you say — a grammar Nazis. I’m just saying it’s a little difficult for me to read and understand the context when it’s long-winded and a few misspelled words.
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On first glance, it’s all a big copy from the book, and it’s not what the viewers came to see.
Where’s Future G5?
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Zipp Storm: "It just had to be riddles."
Izzy Moonbow: (To Zipp Storm) "Well, nobody says a detective's work is easy. It ain't Blue's Clues."
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Izzy Moonbow: "Depends on what point-of-view you're looking at it."
Pipp Petals: (To Izzy Moonbow) "And how would you know?"
Izzy Moonbow: (To Pipp Petals) "I saw this in a TV Show before. A guy explains how time's very complicated and it's more like a...a big ball of wibbly, wobbly...timey wimey...stuff."
Future G5
Sunny Starscout: "I agree."
Zipp Storm: "Me too. Maybe you ponies need to look at it from a different angel."
Future G5
Zipp Storm: "Yeah, I just said that." (Remembers that the movie is from the past) "Oh. Right. It's already happened."
Future G5
Opaline: (From Misty's locket) "I lost almost all of my powers, with my plans for a world wide conquest foiled, to these nimrods?"
Misty: (To Opaline) "Hmmmm. They don't seem like the selfish type to me, Opaline."
Opaline: (To Misty) "Oh sweet naive Misty. Soon you will learn...never to feel sympathy for Princess Twilight and her washed up hazbins."
Future G5
Zipp Storm: "And by the looks of it, an entire week or so. That must've been like thirty-nine rings, or so..."
Pipp Petals: (To Zipp) "I counted forty!"
Future G5
Pipp Petals: "Uh, puh-lease..."
Zipp Storm: "Next thing you know, someone's going to order a hayburger and eat it at 3:00 AM."
Izzy Moonbow: (To Zipp) "Hey! The early bird gets the worm. And besides, nothing like a good hayburger for this unicorn to start the day with."
Alphabittle: (To Izzy) "Izzy...you are the strangest pony we've ever met. Who would eat hayburger 3 in the morning?"
Elsewhere
Future G5
Izzy Moonbow: "Well, she's not far off. He's quite the lady's man~"
Pipp Petals: (To Izzy) "...After he properly washes himself and learns a thing or two about etiquette, then I couldn't agree more."
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Sheriff Hitch: "Eh, to each his own my friend."
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Sunny Starscout: "Like how animals love you, huh Hitch?" (Nudges Hitch playfully)
Future G5
Everyone in the theater all laughed along with the joke, except for one...
Opaline: "I don't get it."
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The Audience: "AAAAAAAAAHHHHH!!!!"
Critters: "AAAAAAAAAAHHHHH!!!"
Opaline: "AAAAAAAAAHHHHH!!!!"
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Opaline: "Ugh! I hate it when these things do that. That's why I don't go to movie theaters anymore!"
Misty: (To Opaline) "I thought that was pretty funny, your majesty."
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Sprout: "A little...after I finish doing the laundry with my tighty-whiteys..."
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Zipp Storm: "Hmmm. Shouldn't you leave those two alone for a moment?"
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Random Kid: "OH COME OOOOOOONNNN!!!!"
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Sheriff Hitch: "Wow. Someone's got eyes of an eagle!"
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Sunny Starscout: "Omigosh. That changes everything!"
Izzy Moonbow: (To Sunny) "Oh? How much?"
Zipp Storm: (To Izzy) "They were missing one guy!"
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Sheriff Hitch: "Tough break."
Izzy Moonbow: "Yeah. I'd be disappointed too if I ever missed a field goal."
Sunny Starscout: (To Izzy) "But...you don't play football, Izzy."
Izzy Moonbow: (To Sunny) "Which saves me from the disappointment!" ;)
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Phyllis: "She seems to have a crazy look in her eyes!"
Sunny Starscout: (To Phyllis) "Oh you don't know Twilight at all."
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Pegasus Guard: "By Jove, I think they're onto something!"
Izzy Moonbow: "YEAH! TAKE THAT!"
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Zipp Storm: "Hmmm, all talk and no walk, huh?"
Izzy Moonbow: "Y'know what they say. He who laughs last, laughs best."
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Izzy Moonbow: "Ouch."
Alphabittle: "Ooh. Tough break."
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Sunny Starscout: "Sounds like a plan."
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Izzy Moonbow: "What exactly is going on?"
Pipp Petals: "Uh...you probably don't want to know."
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Izzy Moonbow: "...I'm sorry I asked."
Sheriff Hitch: (Covering Sparky's innocent eyes) "Is it over yet?"
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Zipp Storm: (Feigns throwing up) "EW! We didn't came here to watch this kind of movie. I think I'm gonna go see Kathmlp at the concession stand and get something to wash my mouth with. Anypony want to join me?"
Pipp Petals: (To Zipp) "Right behind you sister."
Izzy Moonbow: (To Zipp and Pipp) "Ooh! And on your way back, can you get me one of those Binging with Babish Specials?"
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After they got their sweets to wash away their disgusts from their mouth – and washing their faces in the little filly's room in an attempt to clean the unsightly sights, Zipp Storm and Pipp Petals came back in time for the next segment of the movie.
Zipp Storm: "Hey we're back. Did we miss anything?"
Sunny Starscout: (To Zipp) "You're just in time to catch the next scene! They're on their way to Collier County right now!"
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Izzy Moonbow: "How of Ray Stinkle."
Alphabittle: "Looks like his reputation precedes him."
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Pipp Petals: "Oh yeah. Famous last words..."
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Audience: *GASP*
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Audience: *Phew.*
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Izzy Moonbow: (Mutters to Sunny) "This guy needs some serious therapy session."
Sunny Starscout: (To Izzy) "Yup."
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Izzy Moonbow: (Sing-song) "Great minds must think alike~!"
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Audience: *Gasps*
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Audience: *Phew.*
Sunny Starscout: "But seriously, would it hurt for that guy to reconsider before he takes his own life? Not every place has a superhero to save you at the last minute."
Izzy Moonbow: (To Sunny) "...Yeah, and if they do, odds are...that superhero will probably get sued by someone who didn't want to be saved and...yaddy yaddy ya da, it just becomes a major lawsuit nonsense."
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Zipp Storm: (Sarcasm) "Quite the welcoming atmosphere..."
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Sunny Starscout: "Well, don't jump in all at once..."
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Izzy Moonbow: "Tough crowd..."
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British Unicorn Kid: "Seven years of bad luck!"
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: "Hurry! Before we get jinxed!" (Proceeds to do the ritual with the other unicorn kids)
Unicorn Kids: "Bing-bong! Bing-bong!"
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Izzy Moonbow: "Uh, did she say yes? She means no. No, no, no, no, no!"
Zipp Storm: (To Izzy) "Can it, Izzy. They can't hear you..."
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Izzy Moonbow: "What's a Thug Tug?"
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Sheriff Hitch: "AAAAAAAnd he's provoked them..."
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Sunny Starscout: "Okay, that sounded...harsh."
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Zipp Storm: "Yeesh. Too bad."
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Queen Haven: "Oh..."
Alphabittle: "My..."
Phyllis: "Faust."
Posey Bloom: "All that because of one guy?"
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Zipp Storm: "Yeah...a good thing."
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Zipp Storm: "Well, here's a clue for ya. That Ray Finkle guy really blew it and everyone's been wearing their crazy hats 24/7!"
Sunny Starscout: (To Zipp Storm) "No kidding. But still, what's that got to do with Snowflake? And more importantly, this Phantom-Dragon friend of theirs?"
Sheriff Hitch: (To Sunny Starscout) "Well, I think we're gonna find out real soon."