You find yourself back in your homeland of Equestria, having been pulled away so many millennia ago. While your heart is telling you to reunite with your soulmate Celestia, could you live with yourself if you abandon planet Earth in its time of need?
*Populace. "Populous" isn't quite what you want, as it doesn't refer to the population itself, just how large it is. For example, "a populous city" is one filled with a lot of people - but "the general populace" is referring to said people as a single group. If you get what I mean.
proven it's resistance
in it's current raw state
It's body was covered
visor of it's helmet
It's very presence is the embodiment of rage
It's hands are balled up into tight fists
*It's = it is. Its = referring to the object itself. "Proven it is resistance" makes no sense; "proven its resistance" does. Handy little trick there.
Another doom story? Ooooh I'm so in!
Hmm... very interesting
No space between "friend" and the comma.
*Populace. "Populous" isn't quite what you want, as it doesn't refer to the population itself, just how large it is. For example, "a populous city" is one filled with a lot of people - but "the general populace" is referring to said people as a single group. If you get what I mean.
*It's = it is. Its = referring to the object itself.
"Proven it is resistance" makes no sense; "proven its resistance" does. Handy little trick there.
Nice first chapter. It's really gotten my attention. Can't wait to read more.
Bets are on his daughter being a changeling.
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or a demon