Hey ShadowKnight, I've been a big fan of your story so far. And you have instantly got me hooked on this story. This story is the first I've ever seen we're Equestria is described as Earth but in the far future after the demise of human civilization, but that there are a few survivors of humankind after the fall of civilization. This story has gotten me hooked so far and I cannot wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work on this so far.
DEAR LORD do you need an editor. And that's based on the first 2 paragraphs alone.
EDIT: This is your First sentence :
Equestria wasn't always the only world that existed for thousands of years.
Like that is the start of the story? That is how you introduce yourself to your reader? What is the clause " that existed for thousands of years" even doing? I mean wouldn't " always" cover the period of " thousands of years?" Just?
"Equestria wasn't always the only world that existed."
There. Much better.
And there are sentences like this in every paragraph.... ooh boy....
10312667 Thanks for the note. Even though it was a little harsh!!!
I worked on this story every night, In the past few days, So I havenβt got any decent sleep. Just like I did with all my other stories. So excuse me that I was able to fix any grammar cause I was so goddamn tired!
11533063 Well if you have read it further, or not; the human is severely malnourished and he had been brutally knocked into a tree, which could have broken bones or caused internal bleeding.
You think a human could survive or go unscathed from being knocked into a tree with brutal force?
An elegant idea for a shipfic. I applaud you, even.
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Awesome bro, I love Nyx!
I come back from dinner intending to read this only to find the ratings were disabled after I left. Not expecting that.
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Fixed it. Happy!
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Sorry about that long post earlier. I was doing some proofreading for a friend before that and it's hard to turn it off
Nice one! Lol Discord pulling a Trixie, priceless!
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Hehe.... I really hate that Draconnaquus
its ok nice work and what about a chapter for wrath of midnightsparkle
Hey ShadowKnight, I've been a big fan of your story so far. And you have instantly got me hooked on this story. This story is the first I've ever seen we're Equestria is described as Earth but in the far future after the demise of human civilization, but that there are a few survivors of humankind after the fall of civilization. This story has gotten me hooked so far and I cannot wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work on this so far.
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I wrote that part in the chapter for a laugh.
you did an excellent job
You made it into the feature box, well done.
This is pretty good. I love Nyx and the others. Ryder seems interesting and I want to learn more of his past. Can't wait for more..But I will lol~
normally I don't like fics like dis, however, I like dis oco, moar, and if u cancel it I will bap your snoot into dust
DEAR LORD do you need an editor. And that's based on the first 2 paragraphs alone.
EDIT: This is your First sentence :
Like that is the start of the story? That is how you introduce yourself to your reader? What is the clause " that existed for thousands of years" even doing? I mean wouldn't " always" cover the period of " thousands of years?"
Just?
There. Much better.
And there are sentences like this in every paragraph.... ooh boy....
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Thanks for the note. Even though it was a little harsh!!!
I worked on this story every night, In the past few days, So I havenβt got any decent sleep. Just like I did with all my other stories. So excuse me that I was able to fix any grammar cause I was so goddamn tired!
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Tell that to the haters
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Just ignore or block them. This story seems to be interesting.
2381955 if anyone was wondering. Also this is an acceptable way to give the pic, for furure reference.
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Too late, I took the pic down.
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No I mean in number form. Give the number in the description, people will know what to do with it.
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Well.... I canβt help you with that.
More plz
That's it? One tail smack and he's down and out? Man, even for a human that was sadly weak. >_<
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Well if you have read it further, or not; the human is severely malnourished and he had been brutally knocked into a tree, which could have broken bones or caused internal bleeding.
You think a human could survive or go unscathed from being knocked into a tree with brutal force?
19 and already a teacher. Come on.