Can't wait for the next chapter

Off to a pretty good start, though I do have a few criticisms.

1. In the beginning, you describe some of Rarity's actions in the present tense instead of past. Might wanna fix that.
2. I think it might be a bit more organic if Orange and Rarity met at the reception as opposed to just after the wedding itself.

Other than that, I enjoyed what I read and I'm looking forward to more.

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True, you make a good point. I was trying to find ways to improvise, but I was drawing a blank, so I just went what was popping out of my head due to writer's block, but I'm glad you liked it.

I'll try to do better in the next chapter.

awesome chapter my friend i wish all your stories have kingdom hearts soundtracks in them there are hearts all around us you only have to see them to become real sora keep up the great work my friend cant wait for the next chapter

It's going to personally annoy me all night that I never knew you were planning to mention the other girls couples because I could have told you my ships for them aw well what's done is done and hey at least one of five isn't bad lol

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sorry about that

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No worries

Well that sucks that most of em won't be able to have kids of their own

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I think you're forgetting one thing: 3 of them are highly-skilled in magic, so they can conjure up spells that can help some of their friends have children, but I won't say which spell.

Mostly because it's a fetish that... kinda disturbs me, no disrespect though

Well this is a little strange?

This story just reminded me of a story that is vary similar to this story.

But I forgot the title.

nice work.

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Ah I forgot, no disrespect at all

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Awesome start, please continue

Great chapter!

This was very nice. Good to see something new from you. Bet it will be even nicer later.

a great chapter for a mare who so in need of love in this romance story.

Good work and brony on

Another who uses music to show what mood you're going for? Nice.

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It's one of my specialties