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Sunset's going through a lot after everything that happened in wake of the Fall Formal. She's struggling, and she finds less than desirable ways to cope.
Takes place in between EQG and Rainbow Rocks. Not the journal Sunset talks to Twilight with, just a regular journal.
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Lots of familiar feelings in this.
Really interesting format with the solo journal entries. Definitely looking forward to more.
...Really Dash? Really!?
No, because it's obvious you don't mean what you're saying! You only said that just to get the girls off you for that lowblow!
Oh, NOW you care?
When I read this part, all I could think was "Don't girls. Don't leave her alone with Sunset."
After reading through Rainbow's low blow and that weak offer of helping Sunset. I was like, "Geez, Dashie is trashy!" and assumed she was gonna continue to verbally attack Sunset the moment she was alone with her. Like saying, "They may be pitying you, but I'm not." or "Just to be clear, Shimmer, I'm not your friend. I'm only doing this because I'm their friend."
Boy am I glad I was wrong!
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Yeah, she may appear to have a change of heart, and while that is partial because I wrote the second half of this almost a month after the first. She cares about Sunset and obviously doesn't want her friend to be hurt, but she can be a little insensitive at times and kinda just says what's on her mind.
This whole story was a delightful surprise. The vast, vast majority of SadSunny fics are hot garbage, and the ones involving self-harm are usually flat-out insulting. I'm very glad this thoughtful piece was an exception.
Your portrayal of Sunset's self-destructive depression in this chapter was spot-on. Her short, painful responses ("I just can't stop" / "I don't know") to such simple yet impossible questions really show how much she's just... shut down, really, like she doesn't--like she can't care about herself anymore. The whole story built up to this scene that a lesser author would treat as a melodramatic emotional breakdown, but again you went for the realism route, and it pays off tremendously. The darkest moments of depression aren't the grand emotional displays we see in markedly less good stories--at its worst, depression is just feeling nothing at all. That's a hard truth, and a difficult one to write well, but you show it off brilliantly here.
The girls' responses all felt varied and realistic and oh-so-human. Some start to panic, some keep a cool head and all of them blame themselves. Rainbow Dash was especially a highlight here. She's never been good at "the mushy stuff," and around others she defaults to aloofness, almost as a defense mechanism or something. When she's alone with Sunset though, we can see that she really, really does care about her friend, even if she's not always sure how to show it. On a more technical note, I know how tricky it is to balance six characters at once in a scene, so kudos to you for pulling it off so well.
I also really appreciate that by the end of the chapter, Sunset's still not okay--it's never that easy to silence those kinds of bad thoughts, even with the immediate care and support from the people who love you. And, we get a glimmer of hope at the end. Just because she's not okay right now doesn't mean she'll never be okay. And in the meantime, well, it's okay to not be okay too.
All in all, a welcome addition to the SadSunny library. I hope you write more--you clearly have a talent for it.
Or you could make my dreams come true and write Sad Wallflower stuff cuz she's perfect and precious and I love her and she needs more good authors to show her love 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏
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Thank you for the lovely comment!!
As a 13-year-old who has never struggled with depression or self-harmed before, I kinda just winged it and write what I thought it might be like, and I'm glad I pulled it off well!
I really had no idea where to end this chapter, so I thought that surrounding Sunset with all her friends and showing that they all cared about her truly, and that some part of her did feel that was the best way to go.
Maaaayybbee I'll do some Wallflower stuff. She was never my favorite character, and I have a LOT of other stories sitting around my Google Drive and one posted on here I'm not finished with, but maybe it'll happen someday.
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You're thirteen??? Holy heck, if you're writing this well at that age, you're gonna be publishing novels and winning awards by the time you're 20. For real hon, you have some serious natural talent and it's great that you're already fostering it.
Wally is a tricky one to write about, given how complex and layered her character is. I'll be keeping my eye on you just in case you decide to write about her \o/
Also, real talk for a sec. Maybe this isn't applicable now, and hopefully it never will be, but take it from someone who's gone down that road: never, ever hurt yourself. It's not worth it.
Thirteen. Geez, now I feel old ._.
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I'm impressed. You maybe 5 years younger than me I'm 18 to be exact your quite the story teller. I give this story a thumbs up
This was really nicely done! It really dived into the deep subject matter without feeling too dark or overly gore-y.
I especially love the last chapter because we do see how much Susnet's friends care for her. She's not healed yet - not by any means - but they are all more than willing to help her anyway they can.
I agree with everyone else, the whole scenario felt realistic and the last chapter added some wholesome value in a serious topic.
Great job!
I love it
Freudian slip?
The highest of crimes in pony land.
Sunburst right?
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Yep!!
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Yes, committing reason makes more sense than treason when you look at the series.
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technically I'll be 14 in two months! 😂😂
Wow, I Love It, The Way The Mane 6 Human Treats Sunset Is Very Cute
Rainbow!
*whistes*
Calm before the storm, huh?
Oh dear…
I struggle with cutting. This is very accurate. It's like a drug. Addicting. Just enough to keep you going until you crash.
Those damn onion ninjas!
committing "reason" is a capital crime in Equestria, that's hilarious, headcanon accepted.
Pretty solid. Didn't Monday Blues and Forgotten Friendship show that Sunset lives in an apartment though with Good Vibes showing she works at a sushi place for her income? Unless the other 5 were the ones who paid for Sunset's apartment and her getting a job happened after the first movie?