"Darn you, Celestia! Darn you to Tartarus!" Sunset cursed as she was being escorted out of the castle after Celestia removed her from her position as her personal student. Rage filled her as her horn lit up with a bright glow, engulfing everything in its radius.
"Ooohhh... My head... What happened...?" Sunset moaned in pain at the sharp pain in her head as she pushed herself up. Looking around, she realised that she was in Equestria, but not in Canterlot. "What the-? Where am I?" She couldn't recognise a single pony around.
"I've never seen you around before." Sunset jumped back at the new timid voice, almost barely a whisper. "S-Sorry, I didn't mean to startle you."
"You did not startle me!" Sunset barked as her pride got the better of her. The other pony, a yellow Pegasus, just gave a timid shriek and shrunk back, hiding her face behind her mane.
"I-I'm sorry!" She whimpered as Sunset just sighed.
"Whatever. Where is this place?"
"T-This is Ponyville."
"Ponyville, huh?" Sunset looked around the place again. She remembered Celestia having mentioned it before. Celestia said this place was full of smiles and laughter and everypony got along. Maybe it's time Celestia check her sources. This is nothing like what I was told! Sunset thought to herself. All she could see were bickering ponies everywhere. Everypony just looked angry at one another. And to be honest? Sunset didn’t really like all the hostility in the air. The frowns and glares on everypony’s face made them look unapproachable and unfriendly. Even the most handsome stallion and the most beautiful mare there had their faces marred by their ugly frowns and angry glares. In just the few minutes since Sunset awoke to this place, some fights have already broken out. No, Sunset really didn’t like it at all. “Doesn’t look like a nice place to be at all.”
“It used to be.” The timid pony looked down sadly. “Everypony used to be cheerful and friendly to one another.” Sunset looked in surprise to her.
“What happened then?” The other pony just looked down.
“W-Why don’t we go to my house and I’ll tell you the rest. I’m Fluttershy, by the way.”
“Sunset Shimmer.” Sunset just shrugged as she followed Fluttershy back to her humble little home.
Yeah. Have to say, I can't believe it took me this long to find this story, but at least Sunset and Fluttershy's characterization is reasonably accurate for this point in time.
Now, on to the next chapter.
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haha thanks! I was worried about getting them in character tbh
This What if catches my attention.
Hmm this is a pretty interesting start of a story so instead of going to the human world she went to a different alternate universe of Equestria which apparently she's in Ponyville and every pony is not really the most friendliest town but at least Fluttershy still is I wonder what is going on
Somehow not a very good entry.