Inspiration can come from strange places, especially when you're as depressed as Adagio. At this point, she'll celebrate her victories, no matter how small or how shallow they may seem. Even a little trip to the mall could help.
Contains: self-deprecating talk, depressive habits, slight suicidal thoughts
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This was nice! I thought it could have been polished a bit early on—the second sentence of the first paragraph feels off to me, like it’s saying Adagio’s smudged by her own fingerprints, and this bit:
I thought was important enough that it could have been conveyed much more elegantly than having the narration say it so bluntly. Especially when it came so close to doing exactly that anyway, y’know?
I liked the ending a lot, though. It’s small and subdued, but I think it works really well.
It's good. It's very good.
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Thanks for the feedback, I agree that I definitely left that little bit neglected while fleshing out the rest of it.
I really, really love the Dazzlings and I so badly want to explore their mental health~
This is a good headcanon for the Dazzling's second music career:
Adagio may never be truly happy with living without magic in a world of "human scum", but she can find small joys in her new life. Even if it is just new clothes from her sisters.
Well, I really liked that. Reminded me a lot (in a good way) of BoJack Horseman's Stupid Piece of Shit episode - this is a good thing - and I loved the ending. Have a follow.
I relate to Adagio in this story when it comes to siblings and depression. Great job on your first work!
I'm currently binging a bunch of Dazzlings fanfictions because I find how they are treated to be so... hypocritical of the EqG writers, and I'm waffling on whether or not I want to put that frustration into a fanfiction of my own now that FiM and EqG are both dead to Hasbro. But enough about me, I really enjoyed this story; it feels true to the character of Adagio and my own experiences with depression, and it's a creative way to put some more meaning behind the final appearance of the sirens than just using it as a red herring.
If I were to have a single criticism, it'd be that, like a lot of these stories, it feels like it can only manage one of the Dazzlings breaking down at a time, usually Adagio or an abandoned Sonata (kind of glad the wasted final appearance at least killed that particular fanfic trend). For the length of the fic you're going for, it certainly makes sense to limit the... scope of the misery, as it were, but it does feel a little bit like Aria and Sonata too quickly and too fully "get over" what is effectively to sirens the slow execution by age and withering human bodies that becoming human entails. That said, it's not really a criticism of the story, since it's clearly a result of you wanting to focus it more on Adagio, and that I think you did really well.
(I think you did the depression voice very well. That voice in the back of your head, whispering to you... yeah. It's always there. And it's constant attacks were displayed very well.)