This is the start from the other's viewpoint compared to last chapter which is nice. I wonder if Derpy managed to reach her daughter and if Dinky will be effected by the curse and if so how.
I love Certified Mail. He's like the inverse of the RGRE mare and something you don't see too often in our neck of the woods. This is one of those instances where I actually am rooting for the virus because it genuinely feels like it's doing the infected a favor.
This is the start from the other's viewpoint compared to last chapter which is nice. I wonder if Derpy managed to reach her daughter and if Dinky will be effected by the curse and if so how.
I admit, I don't quite have the answers for her or Dinky yet, but I did need to clear her out since the main story already stated she was a cyberpony, meaning this group didn't infect her. So she had to have caught it elsewhere. If I wanted to show what happened, I think I'd have to tread very carefully on anything dealing with her and and her daughter.
I love Certified Mail. He's like the inverse of the RGRE mare and something you see too often in our neck of the woods. This is one of those instances where I actually am rooting for the virus because it genuinely feels like it's doing the infected a favor.
That he turned out the way he did in the story was due to your prereading suggestion, my friend. It was definitely a good one! Gave him a lot more depth and the scene more oomph.
"Sorry for the slow build" don't be sorry, a slow build-up can help a story greatly. especially a clop story as most would fall flat for lack of build-up for me. keep doing what you think is good
"Sorry for the slow build" don't be sorry, a slow build-up can help a story greatly. especially a clop story as most would fall flat for lack of build-up for me. keep doing what you think is good
Apologies for not responding to this earlier, but thank you very much! That's what I try to go for generally, though in this case I think it hurt me when I only released the first chapter to start. It needed more than the initial teaser, it would seem, to draw in new readers quickly. Lesson learned. And I will, promise.
This is the start from the other's viewpoint compared to last chapter which is nice. I wonder if Derpy managed to reach her daughter and if Dinky will be effected by the curse and if so how.
I love Certified Mail. He's like the inverse of the RGRE mare and something you don't see too often in our neck of the woods. This is one of those instances where I actually am rooting for the virus because it genuinely feels like it's doing the infected a favor.
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I admit, I don't quite have the answers for her or Dinky yet, but I did need to clear her out since the main story already stated she was a cyberpony, meaning this group didn't infect her. So she had to have caught it elsewhere. If I wanted to show what happened, I think I'd have to tread very carefully on anything dealing with her and and her daughter.
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That he turned out the way he did in the story was due to your prereading suggestion, my friend. It was definitely a good one! Gave him a lot more depth and the scene more oomph.
"Sorry for the slow build" don't be sorry, a slow build-up can help a story greatly. especially a clop story as most would fall flat for lack of build-up for me. keep doing what you think is good
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Apologies for not responding to this earlier, but thank you very much! That's what I try to go for generally, though in this case I think it hurt me when I only released the first chapter to start. It needed more than the initial teaser, it would seem, to draw in new readers quickly. Lesson learned. And I will, promise.