'Displaced: Term used to describe those who are moved to another reality. Often they are changed in some way.' I'm displaced now, a familiar blue vixen to be exact, in a world that's kind of familiar. Edited by myself. See main descript for Warnings!
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Nice this story is still alive. Actually love stories like these and ones like wolf among ponies and don't you dare, shame the last one was canceled. I wish you luck for your motivation.
Cooking can be chaotic lol
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Does this mean Sweetie Belle is connected to a chaos fairy?
I love the new cover art.
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Lol maybe
Yay it's back also like the new picture you choose the last one was a little to tame for a story line thislol
It's been a long time, how the hell are ya?
Excellent work can’t wait for next chapter keep up the great work
Holy crap. Great tk see you again. Can't wait to see where this goes
When a new chapter drops in. On you favourite reading book.
https://youtu.be/P3ALwKeSEYs
It's nice to see this story update after so long. I hope we don't get another year long hiatus.
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Good, life's been a bit crazy the last year though. Nothing to bad, just a lot of stuff one after another.
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Good to hear that,
Holy, it lives! Nice one too. I hope it doesn't die that long again though...
Why was this added to the Vore group?
There's no vore of any type in this.
Not yet, anyway.
Will Luna get a fairy? I hope so a nice shadow one. Welcome back i missed this story, i thought it might become dead. I look fotward to your next chapter.
Great story so far can't wait for more
I think I'll probably need to reread some stuff... I usually have good memory, so its th first time I'll have to do it
Me gustó mucho el capítulo espero con muchas ansias los siguientes episodios 👏👏👏
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Thank god this isn't abandoned.. i truly like the story thus far and am excited to see the next chapter! ...Whenever it'll come out
I managed to reread all the previous chapters... And to be fair, I did not enjoy it, the reason is because you want to give your character all the good toys with no effort for it, as a result, your character got everything but the nuclear launch codes, and then you spent half of the chapter with useless trivia that is not relevant to the story, we don't need to know every single detail of how an item works, only the relevant bits, if you feel that you like giving full details of an item, you could use the author notes instead to explain it, that way your story won't get interrupted for every new toy it appears.
Half of the items that Kristal got was unnecessary at this point of the story
But wait... There is more
Her armor: this one is fine, but she doesn't need all of that explanation from the get go, she could discover that later in the story and that leads to character development.
The translator: I still wonder why the suit couldn't have that built in, but it was okay.
The mega stone: that is one item that the character doesn't need to have, at least not that soon in the story, yes there is Pokemon, but the character did not meet any yet and even if she did, she wouldn't use that so soon.
The bag of holding: this one i have mixed feelings, it was explained that the regular version can store the equivalent of a moon, and then the character got one that is infinite... Why? She won't be able to fill the regular one in her lifetime, and by the time she does, she wouldn't need the bag anymore.
There is still more.
Luna, yes I get a thousand years in solitude may wreck her sanity, but the older a being is the faster is its perspective of time, but that is just me ranting, the real issue is making Luna act like a naive teenager... I would expect someone that lived over 500 years (not counting the banishment) would have a bit more composture...
The final problem I found is the interaction between Luna and Kristal, I could only find 2 (3 at most) genuine interactions between them the rest was just exposition after exposition...
Tl;dr: the story can still be good, just try not to give the entire bag of Santa's toys at once to Krystal
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Thanks for the review and criticism of the story so far.
First, the getting of items so fast? Won't happen so often from here on out. That is just luck, Zecora and the goddesses looking favorably on Krystal. I like your idea for the scan info being in the authors notes, I'll give that a try next time Krystal scans something.
Next, I'll give you the bits about the bag and translator. Could've handled that a bit better. The megastone, again just Zecora looking out for the future in her own shamanistic way. Krystal scanning things and the amount of info given? The first thing you do in any strange or dangerous situation is assess said situation, your surroundings and what you have available to use, including yourself. I'll give the AN thing a try.
Luna: Luna was literally on the edge of insanity, getting away from that left her feeling extremely vulnerable, her reaction to that vulnerability is to feel like a child again in the face of such an ordeal, it can even be seen somewhat in the show, she acts like a small girl right after she is hit with the elements. She doesn't exactly breakdown but I think the elements of harmony had a big part in that.
Now interactions. I'm not a very good author, I went to school on a reservation, in a tribe run school taught by teachers willing to work for even less pay then most teachers. I mostly got Cs and Bs in english class. I have not gone to college and don't plan too. I am not a social person, never was, in fact for the past few years you could call me a shut in. I don't have much experience with people, and that will reflect in my writing.
Perception of time: What you said about the perception of time is true, from a human perspective. We don't live for centuries at a time, we literally can't know how that would effect a human, would the mind find a way to adapt? Maybe, but probably not. Not without help anyway. But this story isn't about humans, alicorns are built for eternity. I don't think they would suffer the same drawbacks we would from repetition ad naseum.
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Why are you screaming?
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For the lulz.
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And here I figured I would need to spit ball theorys to get you out of your writers block...
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No, creativities not the problem. I just have a bad case of lack of motivation.
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NNNNNNOOOOOOOOO (throws piles of motivation at zoruatrainer66 till it's chest high) *breaths heavily* this should do for the next 4 chapters hopefully .....................* heavy breathing* we need the sexy fox we need more of getting to at least the main town and cities at least the build up is killing me and they only got a little past zacora's hut from the castle they haven't even got to the edge of the forest yet
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Don't worry about rushing anything, Self motivation is something ya gotta work at yourself, hence the self motivation part. and motivation from other people can help, and just in case it helps, whenever i lose motivation to keep working on something I've started, whether its something for school or a personal project, i step back and take a break, whether its a day break or a weak, than i come back with a playlist of music to get me concentrated and i just dive in, and when i lose motivation i just repeat the process. Not sure if it will work for you but its worth a shot! i find that having music to bump your head to helps me concentrate! good luck!
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I too have often trouble with motivation to start writing. What helps for me is that I listen to music find a moment where I don't have anything to do and than force myself to begin once I start writing I than slowly get into the swing of it again and than I don't stop until the chapter is done or even start with the next one without trouble.
I hope this helps a little.
Hope that you come back to this?
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I don't think I'll ever stop writing this, but it's hard for me to find the motivation to write.
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Hope you find it soon.
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(throws even more piles of motivation at zoruatrainer66) *breaths heavily* need to find our way to ponyville they haven't even gotten there (falls to my face tired) we need more this is a amazing story and so rich in build up and with 3-5 different crossovers it will have so much you can use to build adventure
Cuando saldrá el siguiente episodio 🤔🤔😊?
Is this story dead or something
when will the next chapter come out?
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I've had no motivation to write in a good while, the ideas are all there but no will to write.
The laptop I wrote with before broke down completely, I'm using a tablet now and that is just to cumbersome to write a full chapter with. My wrist would get sore from holding it up. On top of that the writing speed is cut by half.
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but you will continue it?
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Eventually, don't know when but I will.
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if this is a displaced story and we know the character is Krystal, why is there no Star Fox tag?
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They aren’t Crystal they only look like her.
You still work on this, right?
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Need to get a hold of a laptop, I have a large tablet (kindle fire) right now and that is way too clunky for me.
More please
>A long list of extreme fetishes
>No watersports
So this fic is totally safe for preading
Any updates yet?
So any news from the writer to what's going to happen to this story is it getting canceled or what I hope it continues though
Really hope this story is still continuing but it really feels like this story has been abandoned and won't be continued.. which is a massive shame if it is because its genuinely such a good story
Hello?