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It's a miled summer's day and the Mane 7 are heading back to Camp Everfree to put on a concert for the reopening of the camp. Everyone was excited but no one was more excited than Rarity because she was going to use the concert to show off her new fashion line and designs. But things are off to a rocky start when it starts raining causing the concert to be put on hold. When it does stop raining Rarity goes back to the bus to grab more microphones she runs into trouble

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This story deeply confuses me.
Prose was not very good but the ideas are well written and explained, pacing was actually pretty good.

If this was for practice then GJ,
However you should really edit your work at least twice fully to catch basic errors, but otherwise not a ton to say on it.

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