Dragon-kin, A magnificent, and powerful evolution of the Dragoninans, who everyone wants to become, yet fear terribly
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Sorry for unpublishing this chapter for a few minutes.
Had to fix some parts of it.
Here comes the Sisters!!!
Oof. Dude, I suggest you stop writing this, and go watch Friendship is Magic all the way through. Never start writing for a franchise unless you have watched all their is for it, in this case.
99% of new stories fail miserably because the author didn't do their proper homework before starting on it. You don't need to be an expert on it, but it cuts down on the chance you look like you have no bucking idea of what you're doing, and just hope no one notices it.
Just some friendly advice, since this does seem to be going somewhere in the end.
Ok, please forgive me if it's too harsh but these are serious problem in many writing around Spike harem, I still feel like story is still too fast suddenly many characters are introduced , and the anime cliche just will it bad, the girls suddenly take a like in to Spike? There are already many of these type out there. A relationship dynamic need to happen otherwise it would be just doesn't make sense or outright boring (This is the also the problem in Spike Gambit) . Spike personality is still questionable, is he cool and calm or he just angry all the time? You need to establish the world and characters first.
This was a epically battle / reality check chapter. I'm happy Blue Blood and Trixie changed for the better. I hope Spike and DD sibs can be friends.