Twilight laid there in the darkness, unable to comprehend what she had just heard. Her brain was abuzz with activity as it tried its best to make sense of what it had witnessed.
“Did Princess Luna just call me her… little love?!?” Twilight whispered to herself. Shock was now setting in and Twilight began to shiver. “Calm down Twilight, calm down!” Twilight urged her body to comply. She slowly got a hold of herself. She then slowly looked over at Luna and just starred at her. She was beautiful. Her glowing blue mane softly illuminated the room with its tiny sparkles that resembled the stars. Her face was calm and peaceful as if not a thing in the world could bother her. Twilight was in a trance, she just couldn’t look away. No matter how hard she tried her eyes stayed fixed on Luna. “A-am I in love with Princess Luna?!?” Twilight asked herself. Her thought broke her from the trance as she pondered at the possibility that she might actually love Luna.. “Well, it is possible. No, I can’t love the princess! It would never work. She would be too busy and I would be busy with my studies. But she does look beautiful, and she’s very kind…” Twilight trailed off as she was back in her trance. Her eyes then began to grow heavy and they slowly started to close. The last thing Twilight saw was Luna’s face, her peaceful and cute face.
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Luna awoke with a start, immediately sitting up and looking at her surroundings. When she saw that she was in Twilight’s library she calmed down and slowly went back to lying down on her sleeping bag.
“Phew, I thought I was late for one of the royal meetings!” Luna said to herself. She looked up at the clock which read 6:00 am. She let out a content sigh and snuggled into her little cocoon some more. She noticed something was covering her right eye. She soon realized that it was her mane. No, not her dark blue starry mane. It had been replaced with light blue hair as had her tail. It was what happened during the day since she was not of the age where her mane stays in the flowing form as her sister’s did. She did like her mane this way though. She liked how she could decorate and style it, which she had done many times when she was younger. However, what she liked most about it was its simplicity. It made her feel that her complicated world could fade away into a manageable and nice one. That and her sister always thought that she looked adorable with her mane like this. Her attention then turned away from her mane. She looked over at Twilight and smiled at the sleeping unicorn. “She looks so adorable when she’s asleep.” Luna said. Luna then put a hoof to her mouth. “W-what did I just say?”
“You said that you thought she looked adorable in her sleep. And I must agree.” A voice said from seemingly nowhere.
“N-nightmare? I-is that you?” Luna asked, now scared.
“Yes dear, it’s me. How have you been?” Nightmare asked out of the blue.
“F-fine, what are you doing here? You’re not going to corrupt me again if that’s your-” Luna was cut off by Nightmare’s voice.
“Now Luna you know as well as I do that it was not just my doing that got us our punishment. However nopony can blame you, especially from what you endured. And you know I’m not going to corrupt you. The elements of harmony have seen to that. I am now pure, just as you are. So, my little pony has been making friends?” Nightmare asked in a surprisingly kind voice.
“Y-yes, I have. Why does that concern you?” Luna asked with some shakiness in her voice.
“My dear, I am a part of you. Everything you do concerns me. I am happy for you though. You are finally making some friends unlike a thousand years ago. Oh, you were so lonely, it was heartbreaking! However, I am wondering why you are starting a love life so soon.” Nightmare said all of this with a motherly voice, much like Celestia. It took Luna completely by surprise. But what really shocked her was Nightmare talking about her starting a love life.
“What do you mean by a love life? I don’t have a special somepony.” Luna said back, a small blush appearing on her face.
“Luna, I am a part of you. I know you better than you know yourself! That and you called Twilight ‘my little love’. I know that you have feelings for Miss Twilight Sparkle, and I couldn’t be happier. However, remember to be careful in a relationship, things don’t always turn out the way you expect them to.” Nightmare was beginning to sound more like a nurturing mother than a voice inside of Luna’s mind. Luna was still not sure how or why Nightmare was acting this way. Nightmare sensed this. “Ah, questioning my change in personality? Luna, as I said before, the Elements of Harmony also purified me. And you apparently also forget that I kept you company during our, rather long period away from home.” Nightmare explained.
Out of all that explaining though Luna just asked one question.
“I called Twilight ‘my little love’?” Luna asked while trying to remember those words leaving her mouth.
“Yes, of course you were very tired. I guess it just slipped from your thoughts to your mouth and you said it by accident. But you two do make a cute couple!” Nightmare said.
“I-I I…” Luna trailed off, unsure of what to say. Then she realized who she was talking to.
“How do I know that I can trust you? How do I know that you are speaking the truth and not lies?” Luna asked.
“Because my sweet little Luna, you know that you have control over me, and that I could not hurt or corrupt you even if I tried. And what I tell you is just some friendly advice and a little slip of your tongue! Nothing more.” Nightmare said innocently. Luna knew that she did speak the truth, even if it was hard to believe. Nightmare had been like a mother to her on the moon, much like Celestia had been to her when they were still little. It was rather strange, especially because Luna remembered that Nightmare had caused much suffering to Equestria. But, Celestia did tell her before to let others have a second chance, if they deserved one. Well if she got a second chance, then why not let Nightmare have a second one?
“Oh Luna, I do have a rather big question to ask of you.” Nightmare said.
“What is your question?” Luna asked.
“May I be free for a few minutes please? I need to stretch my wings and legs.” Nightmare asked pleadingly. Luna was very hesitant on the matter, especially since Twilight could wake up at any moment. In the end her kindness won over her logic.
“Okay, but only for a few minutes. Then you go straight back into my mind.”
“Of course, I only need a quick stretch.” Nightmare replied.
With that said Luna let Nightmare flow free from within her. Darkness began to cover her body. Her beautiful blue coat changed to pitch black, she slowly grew taller and her horn grew in length. Her cutie mark changed from black to an illuminated purple behind the crescent moon. Her light blue mane and tail dissipated away, being replaced by a dark blue mist with sparkles shining within it. And finally light blue armor formed from the darkness on her chest and head. Luna was no longer there. In her place stood Nightmare Moon. Nightmare then immediately stretched out her stiff wings and legs. She let out a deep sigh of relief.
“Much better. And now that I am free I can now make it night time eternal!” Nightmare laughed as she spoke.
“WHAT?!?!” NO!!!” Luna pleaded as she began to struggle for control of her body. Then something incredible happened.
Nightmare… giggled, yes giggled!
“Oh, oh that was too good! Luna, did you actually think I was serious?” Now Nightmare began to laugh. Luna was shocked beyond words. Nightmare Moon had just made a joke! Unfortunately for both Nightmare and Luna, Twilight began to wake up from Nightmare’s laughter. Neither of them noticed as the unicorn opened her eyes and the first thing she saw was Nightmare Moon, laughing, in her house.
“… AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!” Twilight’s scream was so loud that many sleeping residents were awoken from their slumber. However, Twilight’s scream was soon cut short as a hoof was put to her mouth.
“Twilight Sparkle, do not yell. Do you wish for everypony to come in here and see me?” Nightmare said with haste in her voice. Twilight gave a slow nod to indicate that she did. “Now Twilight, I am not here to cause any harm, do not worry or fret okay? I’m going to remove my hoof and I want you to close your eyes.” Twilight complied. Nightmare slowly removed her hoof from Twilight’s mouth. When no scream came she let out a sigh of relief. She then began to glow and her shape began to change. She was becoming smaller, her mane turning back to hair, her pitch black fur becoming blue, and her armor dissipating away. Luna now stood where Nightmare Moon had been a few moments ago.
Luna ran up to Twilight and shook her a little. Twilight slowly opened her eyes and when she saw Luna she hugged her tightly.
“W-what was Nightmare Moon doing here?” Twilight barely managed to say through her shaky voice.
“Well, the best way to put this is that she needed to get out for a little bit.” Luna said with a little blush. Twilight wasn’t really listening as she cuddled closer to Luna. She was so warm, so soft, so comforting. She almost made Twilight forget that Nightmare Moon had just been in her house. However something was different about the Princess of the Night. Twilight realized it was her mane. It was light blue hair instead of a starry night sky.
“Princess, what happened to your mane?” Twilight asked as she stared at the Princess.
“Oh, it gets like this during the day. It will return to the form you know of when night falls.” Luna gave her a small smile, happy to see her finally calmed down. Twilight put on her own smile.
Suddenly Twilight’s door burst open and Rainbow Dash, Apple Jack, Rarity, Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie, and Spike stood in the doorway.
“Twilight are you okay? We heard your scream and…” Rainbow trailed off. All of their eyes grew wide with shock with the scene before them. Twilight was hugging Princess Luna, their faces close together. “Umm, what’s going on here?” Dash asked as the rest of the group was too shocked to speak. Twilight and Luna looked at each other then back at the group.
“IT’S NOT WHAT IT LOOKS LIKE!!!” They both yelled.
Author's Notes: Here it is! Chapter 2! And it's short... That means all future chapters will be much longer! Hopefully... Anyway I hope you enjoy and SUPRISE for a new main character! Also I put a joke in here! It has something to do from the comments! Let's see if anyone can find it!!!
Awkward... also Nightmare? I'm not sure if adding her into the story is good. Still, entertaining chapter, I want me some more.
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DANG IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Now I might have to rewrite THIS chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It actually was supposed to be proof read first but I EPICALLY failed at that ... hopefully things will work out....
Ship it like Fedex Express does. Real fast and right on time.
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That's a good thing right? You're not saying the story feels rushed again right? RIGHT?!?!?
Don't rewrite please! I enjoy her and i think it's an idea that most people have been ignoring
I saw update and went ape trying to figure out witch one got a new chapter. Saw it was this and flipped. Can't wait for the next chapter. Damn that escalated nicely.
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NOT QUICKLY RIGHT?!
I think I'm over reacting... Okay, I should be good now... hopefully...
Oh god I can just imagine it now, Nightmare will come out at random times during Twilight and Luna's relationship, and she'll be the more kinky of the two being an embodiment of pure emotion!
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Oh sweet Celestia what have I done?
I've seen more and more TwiLuna stories that involve NMM and I have to say that I'm not a fan of them. Still, glad to see the story finally taking shape!
Oh, and I really like the idea that Luna is big and imposing with the flowing mane only at night and reverts to cute little Woona in the day!
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So...am I going to be pre reader for the next chapters? Lol. I'll read this later, I have to cook dat dinner right now.
Edit: Why is Nightmare Moon a main character, but Luna isn't?
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Thanks! I'll try not to dissapoint anyone with Nightmare, after all she does have a new personality! So no one really knows what she is going to do! That also includes me...
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Thanks!
1145697 Sorry if my last comment made you think other wise. Was trying for a "I see what you did there". Like I said nicely not quickly. Sorry if it came off as something it wasn't meant to. Didn't seem rushed to me thought it went with the flow quite well if you ask me. It felt like this chapter was set for Luna's character development. As it goes this is a great piece of work. Keep it up.
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Thanks, although I was wondering why you used those choice of words.
I just want to start the story progression instead of having to spend time on rewrites.
Aw buck.
1145615 The part where Nightmare Moon is simply an alternate personality has been done before in TwiLuna, many times. That's not to say it's a bad thing.
Wait, what?
Is it that if she is careful in a relationship things will turn out bad, or if she isn't?
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If she isn't careful things turn out bad. I'm guessing I need to change that.
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Maybe something like
The last line made my evening.
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Okay, thanks!
Just finished reading the chapter. I love the idea of a purified Nightmare Moon in Luna's head. The trolling was funny too
Dat ending.
Well giving Luna a split personality disorder that is more or less rendered harmless do to exposure to the elements may make things interesting if done just right.
Luna to therapist Twilight: I don't have a problem with Celestia.
Basically Luna and Nightmare would conclude that Twilight is in more need of help then them.
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Thanks! Oh and yes you will be proof reading the future chapters hopefully! As soon as I find out how to....
Random question. Apparently Nighmare is a cliché but do you think this spices it up at all?
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I'm glad to hear that! Thank you!
1145786 I'll just give a piece of advice (opinion) that I give to many authors that I comment too. Don't rush. Really, I think that's the No 1 problem in good writing here. Like this checklist that goes: Plot. Check! Characterization. Check! Pacing? What pacing.
YMMV. I think Lord of the Rings has excellent pacing. But don't feel like you need to start pushing through the story. Doesn't mean add stuff not relevant to the plot, but give plenty of detail, and don't do rapid-fire major events.
As a general rule, I only comment on stories I like. So there's your compliment.
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Thank you very much!
1145984 PM chapter? I dunno lol.
I like how you've created a non-malevolent Nightmare Moon. The old evil NM invading Luna to mess with her relationships is getting old. Keep up the great work! I hope it stays a happy romance tale. Bring on the d'awww moments! My Emotions are prepared!
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Dually noted!
And will do!
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CUTENESS OVERLOAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *BOOM*
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You do realize you are acting exactly like Twilight in Episode Zero, right? Calm down, the chapter was fine. it was an interesting idea to add in Nightmare Moon as you did. I don't think I've seen anyone do that before. Bravo!
Its ok Luna, I have a voice i my head too...
i like the way you used nightmare in this chapter and i kind of hope to see her in some more chapters but in a friendly and funny way ofcours
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Thanks but didn't I do the dialouge right?
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Okay, Thanks!
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What's goin' on!
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Stress plus nervousness plus ADHD equals very stressed out nervous hyper person.
But thank you for telling me because I really do need to relax and have faith in my writing! Thank you!
I love the innocent Nightmare Moon! :D
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I... don't know what to actually say. Like, seriously. Well. I do.
It was too short. That is the one flaw. I loved it. And you surprised me greatly with the Nightmare Moon appearance. Wonderfully done.
Also, I want you to know, that your writing is excellent, enough to stop me from killing stuff to read! Just keep doing what you are doing and you'll always at least have one person who loves your stories! I'm trying not to e rambly and start conversations everywhere I go... so... Have a few mustaches!
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Wait, What? Luna is a main character...
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This is turning out better than I thought it would! Thanks!
I like how this story has gone so far. I'm personally a big TwiLuna fan, and the idea of NMM being the whole motherly voice rather than some crazy witch that comes out from time to time is really nice.
Looking forward to how both progressions turn out. Liking the rewrite more at the moment though, might be because there's more written for it as of now.
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I see your mustaches and raise you four smile of thanks!
And I promise that future chapters will be much longer. This one was a 'get the freakin plot moving' chapter.
1147222 I usually dislike Re-writes of fics because i don't want to read the same thing slightly different over, but you've done a wonderful job with this! keep writing!
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Thank you!
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Thank you and I will!
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Oh! Good! Then I.... Actually my mind is a blank. Have a cupcake.
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Umm, have a cute Luna pic with juice!
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