For My Love

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Even though her infirmities have caught up with Rarity, she can always depend on Applejack to take care of her. No matter what.

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Jackster

Jackster #1 · Dec 9th, 2019 · · ·

This was a pretty good story, I especially liked the twist at the end. However, there are a couple of grammar mistakes but it's nothing too bad. If you like I can help you edit this because this is a very nice story. : )

Jhoira

Jhoira #2 · Dec 9th, 2019 · 2 · ·

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Well certainly. If you want to do that I'll be happy to put in the edits. I tend to just get them to a nice service level of no typos and fairly well structured but I don't put a ton of time utilize editing myself.

Jackster

Jackster #3 · Dec 9th, 2019 · · ·

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I understand, but still this is a very nice story and I really enjoyed reading it.

Sugar Coat

Sugar Coat #4 · Dec 9th, 2019 · · ·

Short and (bitter)sweet. That last paragraph made my heart sink.

witegrlninja

witegrlninja #5 · Dec 9th, 2019 · · ·

...Oh. Ohhhh.

That was a wonderful twist at the end.

Toriandthehorse

Toriandthehorse #6 · Dec 10th, 2019 · · ·

This is really good. Really sad, too...
That last paragraph... oh my. What happened?!

Jhoira

Jhoira #7 · Dec 10th, 2019 · 1 · ·

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Well besides the obvious I didn't think of anything specific.

Jhoira

Jhoira #8 · Dec 10th, 2019 · · ·

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Yeah, I've been on a kick recently to make my shorter stories exactly 1k words.

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Thank you. ^.^

Natedogg2006

Natedogg2006 #9 · Dec 16th, 2019 · · ·

That.. not sure why I did that. That was definitely not something I needed today. Well written with an amazing ending. Just wasn't the right day for me to decide to get around to this one.

Jhoira