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Scyphi


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It's Nightmare Night, and the Young Six have some big plans to celebrate the holiday.

Too bad the accidental creation of a slime monster running loose in the school completely derailed them.

EDIT 10/22/2021: Added in new content, new cover art, and in-story illustrations, while also breaking the story up into chapters.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 12 )

Just loved this comedic take on *The Blob* so to speak, go Smolder!!!!!!😀👍

“Gallus, I’ve just been swallowed by a sentient slime ball, I have goo all over me and in places I didn’t even know I have, and I just downed two whole cans of your oh-so- stimulating energy drink in under a minute, so where do you think I’m going?” Smolder didn’t even slow as she stomped out the door, calling back loudly, “ THE RESTROOM! THAT’S where!”

LOL this last part was golden, great work!:rainbowlaugh:

This is honestly great—love the episodic tone, the dialogue is on point, the characters are well written.

The beginning starts off wonderfully, I love the slice of life bits, and the way that everything escalates until you get to that action packed third act...

Super fun and festive, was a solid distraction from my post-halloween hangover. Thanks for the story :heart:

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Amusingly, then, I never once thought of "The Blob" all throughout the writing of this fic, and indeed had completely forgotten all about it until you mentioned it here, and I remembered "Oh yeah, "The Blob"...that was a thing, wasn't it?" :rainbowlaugh:

Glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

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It actually makes me wish I could've justified squeezing in a few more instances of slice-of-life dialogue that had originally been in the story, then...but let's be honest, this fic's already super long for a one-shot, it doesn't need to be any longer still. :rainbowlaugh:

“So we’ve been entertaining ourselves in the meantime,” Trixie butted in, “with an improvised game of Go-Fish using hot sauce packets Trixie had in her pocket.” She then turned to Starlight, who happened to be holding such a packet. “So! Starlight! Got any hot sauce packets?”

Starlight, with narrowed eyes, nodded and passed over the one pocket she held to Trixie. When Trixie motioned to keep playing, she flatly added, “Trixie, do you have any hot sauce packets?”

“Why yes, yes I do!” Trixie said, handing back the one packet. She then glanced at Smolder. “I’d deal you in…but we only have the one hot sauce packet.”

Milo Murphy's Law. always funny

“Silverstream’s not here,” the hippogriff was heard mumbling from within the sweater. “She’s in sweater town.”

Gallus bit back the urge to snap at her. “Well…can you come out of sweater town so you can come help us not get—GAH!”

and Gravity Falls!

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and Gravity Falls!

Well, considering Silverstream had dressed up as Mabel Pines for Nightmare Night, it seemed fitting. :raritywink:

This was a good story the length was never a problem as for me it just shows how much effort and thought you put into your story

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Yeah, but in retrospect, I think I should've still broken it up into chapters, if only to break it into more manageable chunks for the casual reader with limited time. :twilightsmile:

“Then what are we waiting for?” Gallus asked, pointing a talon to the office doors. “To the nearest janitor’s closet!”

Whoa This story really was crazy and I love it having that giant slime Having rampaging the school and the kids Try to stop that thing and smolder is a hero to stop the slime and save starlight and Trixie that was awesome

“I…I think so,” Ocellus said unsteadily, surveying the slime that covered the room. “There doesn’t seem to be any sign of any intact bits, at least. I suppose it’s sort of a shame, though…no matter how you slice it, that intelligent gel was still quite a scientific breakthrough, even if it didn’t work entirely as planned, and by destroying it, we’ve probably set back research for it a fair bit. Plus, when you really think about it, the intelligent gel was only doing what it thought it had been told to do, and so I don’t think it actually meant to cause har—AUGH!” In terror, she jabbed her hoof at the floor, where she had noticed a small ball of slime trying to wiggle away from the group and for the door. “KILL IT! KILLITKILLITKILLIT!”

Lol 😆 That part made me laugh just turn 180 of ocellus Trying to say it didn't do anything harm then saying kill it wow lol

Love the update! This was great.

Also, appreciate the Gravity Falls references.

Awesome update & the added sections made it even better! :pinkiehappy:

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