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Glad another chapter came out.
I'm guessing you meant "waist" and were not attempting to allude to a scat fetish of sorts.
Should be interesting to see both Sisters attending school and what that leads to.
I would have appreciated a bit more description in this chapter. These two mares are belly to belly (I'd imagine pussy to pussy) and your MC doesn't acknowledge this fact once, visually or otherwise. You also left a lot to implication. Ideally, you want to show but you sir didn't even tell, which makes it difficult to discern the purpose of the chapter.
Just a suggestion but you might want to go back through and rewrite this one
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I... really fucking hate this word.
Fixed, thanks.
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I was experimenting with new scenes. Now that I think about it.. I definitely could've expanded the sexual parts quite a bit more. Thanks, I'll look into improving this chapter, just maybe not right away.
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It wasn't fixed
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What?
Okay... Fixed, THANKS. This time I went back and triple checked.