The unexpected has happened to Rainbow Dash--she's given birth to a Unicorn! She's completely lost on how to take care of her new magical child, so she turns to the resident magical expert--Twilight Sparkle. Twilight's so busy with her royal duties that she didn't even have time to visit her friend in the hospital, let alone help her raise her children!
Well.....she's got to try, hasn't she?
Cover art by me
Ship warning: This fic supports FlashLight. If you don't like that ship, there's no need to start a war in the comments.
Chapters (6)
I'm interested.
Wow this is pretty good so far can't wait for more.
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Soarin. I think I mentioned it in the first chapter. XD
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Maybe they have Unicorn ancestors? 🤷
That's my best idea. XD
I'm liking some of the shenanigans so far, but the dialogue formatting needs work. The description ould use some clean-up too:
This isn't really the kind of thing that needs to go on your story. If you think people won't be able to tell what ship is present, having a picture of the characters in the relationship, or just one of the characters in that relationship as your cover normally works out just fine.
You never need that many periods in an ellipse. There's only three... and whatever comes after should be spaced, like so.
The 'we broke her' moment was very chuckle-worthy. Another thing make use of in the future is to avoid the random tag as much as possible. It's essentially tag for when people are making trollfics or don't know how to tag. Most readers will avoid it because 'random' plots aren't usually very fun and it doesn't say much about the story itself. What you have here is a very natural comedy and you don't really need it.
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Ah, such a young and inexperienced child I was... lol.
Cow is only used for female bovines. I feel like it would be funnier for Twilight to have to resist correcting the kiddo every time 'cow' is said, even when it's incorrectly applied to a bull.
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This was published last year.
The ending was very cute. There isn't enough Flashlight family fluff.
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Yeah, I know, it was a joke. I meant it was posted before I really had knowledge of how FiMfiction worked or how to tag. I like to think I've come far since then.
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Aw, thanks! Thanks so much for reading it, as full of grammar and punctuation errors it is. 😅
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Definitely. All those blood, sweat, and tears behind the scenes paid off.