Magnet

Songfic based off of the Magnet vocaloid song. Fluttershy and Discord realize their feelings for one another but try to keep their relationship secret.
I know technically the song is about two girls but I thought a Draconequus and a Pony was "taboo" enough to write about and still get the same message across.

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FanficReader920

FanficReader920 #1 · Sep 11th, 2019 · · ·

This is an interesting concept, but I feel like it was too rushed.

Dashie1995

Dashie1995 #2 · Sep 11th, 2019 · · ·

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It was the first one shot I ever did so the flow isn't the best. Still getting the hang of writing fanfics again, I strayed from it for 4 years so I'm a bit Rusty

FanficReader920

FanficReader920 #3 · Sep 11th, 2019 · · ·

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Well, If I had to give a recommendation.

I'd make this story longer, and give each of it's major plot points time to breath.

For instance, we already know what happens in "The Beginning of the End," so have the story begin afterward back in Fluttershy's cottage. This can be where they realize their feelings for each other. I would personally have this scene take up the entire chapter since it's the foundation for what the rest of the story builds on.

Dashie1995