Written by DeathWitch
aka Necromancer
Everything came to a screeching halt for Sunset when Fluttershy died. But the “end” was merely the beginning of prolonging the inevitable! With Fluttershy’s secrets weighing her down and a massive hole in her heart keeping her from ever being happy, Sunset resorts to some rather… drastic measures.
This is my first story to ever be published, despite writing since 2012 and having been juggling fics since I first joined FiMFiction!
This was a personal triumph for me to complete an idea in a month and a half, start to finish! I hope you all enjoy this labor of love.
My undying thanks to: Krickis, Starry, Bolt (TallFry), Krixwell
Made for the 2019 Sunset Shipping Contest: Endings
Cover made by me.
Chapters (3)
Off to a very interesting start! Not many stories would go where this one is, and it's clear you're writing from a place of knowledge when you talk about stuff most of us would know next to nothing about. It's very appreciated.
On to the rest of the fic!
This was almost painfully sweet... Sunset’s feelings shine really clearly here and it makes me want things to work out for them so much, even though there’s no way that’s possible with a story like this one.
And finished. That was a sweet ending, all things considered. I was ready for it to hurt like hell, but I walked away feeling pretty good about things here. A fantastic story all in all and I'm glad to have read it
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May I ask what specifically you meant?
And while I have been trying to master the art of making reader feel
pain, the Human Tempest stuff made me try to give this depression exploration a glimmer of hope.9836738
I was referring to stuff like paganism and real world magick. It's not something many people know a lot about, not it's clear you wrote from a point of personal knowledge on the subject.
Yeah, I plan on tackling the subject again in another fic. I actually also wrote a research paper in college English on various pagan traditions, witchcraft, its misconceptions/eronious association with Satanism, and Neo-Paganism and Wicca. That process converted me from Christianity-shunning Nihilist to a Pagan Witch with a Nihilistic view of societal norms.
Very good to see you publish something. This is a very competent first fic (even if you have been juggling others I guess this is your first).
I understand that there is a time limit for the contest you entered so I won't go on about how the emotional stuff was sometimes sped along faster than I would have liked.
I know that you know you have a tendency to exaggerate certain description (like crying for an eternity) so I will only say that I hope people like that about your writing style.
Good hook at the end of this chapter.
Lets read some more!
Well that got allot happier.
Sunsets spell worked, Fluttershy can come back any number of times, they can make physical contact as well as talk, no one found out about it, and no one turned evil as a result of it all. I wonder whats next...
Checks tags.
Oh dear.
The first two chapters had the sorrow, joy, romance, loss, magic. But i thought that this last chapter really stands out as the best of the three by allot. I expected the ending to be far more depressing (which kinda makes me wonder why it has a tragedy tag as it ends on such a hopeful note).
Love the ideas with tempest and storm king.
Thanks for messaging me about this. You've made a follower out of me.
I thought that second scene was awfully hokey. Then I realized, if it had been Fluttershy and Sunset praying to Jesus for Rarity's fashion show, it would have been no less hokey. So good job making me confront my biases! :B
That was not as dark as I had anticipated. o.O
An original idea for Tempest, but I wish she had either been a larger focus in the story or in a completely other story to begin with. Her cameo and backstory just have nothing to do with the story about Sunset being unable to let Fluttershy go. Oh well.
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I appreciate your opinion, even if the time/word constraint I was under makes the point sour.
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That happens! :B