The Heart Chronicles: "The Twin Trap"

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Full Bloom

Full Bloom #1 · Aug 25th, 2019 · · · The Heart Chronicles: "The Twin Trap" Prologue ·

I have to agree with Jessie.

No mother would let her child be taken, she'd fight for custody and or arrangements with the child.

Simply forgetting your child is borderline cruel.

The pacing is a tad clunky.

Also I spotted a few mistakes.

But I had fun reading this chapter.

Though I enjoyed Jessie.

I kind of don't like Faith, merely for the fact she's not more passionate about reclaiming her child.

She seemed to show more passion about defending her Title, rather than her child.

But mayhaps she's just emotionally abused , I know how a relationship can dig deep into a woman's soul.

I need to read more.

Good job though.

Full Bloom

Full Bloom #2 · Aug 25th, 2019 · · · The Heart Chronicles: "The Twin Trap" Chapter #1 ·

Still a bit clunky.

Also you might want to ease up on the Cap lock sections.

Made the character come off a bit, well temperamental.

Again oddly enough, I prefer the friend characters to the others.

Also once again spotted a few mistakes.

An ok Chapter.

Full Bloom

Full Bloom #3 · Aug 25th, 2019 · 1 · · The Heart Chronicles: "The Twin Trap" Chapter #2 ·

Nothing to say about the pacing this time.

Nice and interesting Chapter.

Some decent character building as well.

I'll keep an eye out for updates.

Interested to see where this will go.

Faith Heart

Faith Heart #4 · Aug 25th, 2019 · 1 · · The Heart Chronicles: "The Twin Trap" Prologue ·

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Thank you so much for reading. I read your comments on how the friends are your favorite. Faith comes around to Jessie's suggestion, though that is much more later in the story.

-Keep it Safe & Keep it Real

-See you when I see you 👀

-Faith Heart ❤

Faith Heart

Faith Heart #5 · Aug 25th, 2019 · 1 · · The Heart Chronicles: "The Twin Trap" Chapter #1 ·

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At one point or another, you will see that all of the character's besides Aster yell to another, It'll be out of shock or protectiveness, but Sparkle does have a temper, she keeps her guard up and it's ever so rarely been bought down, because of certain situations, Nothing bad has happened to her physically though emotionally she's very thick-skin and I hope that it shows.

Faith Heart