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BradyBunch


You are going to LOVE ME!

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Shining Armor needs to use the bathroom. Twilight Sparkle wants to turn this into a clopfic. Shining Armor will have none of that.

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Everything made sense until the last scene; a twisted and somewhat funny kind of sense, but still sense.
What's with the final scene?

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Yes! I succeeded!
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That's the opening cutscene of Skyrim.

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Also, thanks for finding this absolutely unfunny. It was the goal from the beginning. 'Twas my proud privilege to make you retch in disgust. I shall continue to confuse and shock my readers in the future!

9727198 TBH, my Pinkie Pie reaction was mostly at the ending. I got the reference. But I think that meme works better in video, as it was just such a complete non-sequitur in text.

I genuinely found a few parts funny. Such as:

Twilight, after a pause, continued from behind the bathroom door. "Weren't you going to screw me?"
He looked back in utter shock. He felt like he had been hit by a bolt of lightning. "What?!" exploded Shining Armor.
"You know… I would plead for you not to tell mom, and you'd promise that you won't, but only if I screwed you in return. That's how this is supposed to work, right?"
"Ew! No!" he shot back, sticking out his tongue. "Gah!"

I can appreciate it when someone deconstructs a trope. If nothing else, it helps writers be more aware of cliche writing.

I think this could have been a genuinely good and funny deconstruction of the TwiShine ship with more focus on Twilight trying to apply her hilarious porno logic to Shining Armor playing the reasonable straight-man. But that's if you would want to make such an effort for more than a shit-fic regarding the subject.

The only parts that really turned me off was everything scat related. :pinkiesick:

Even in something as... well, strange and unappealing as this...

Your reference game is still on point.

"Hey, you," said the man right across from him. "You're finally awake."

Seriously?!? :rainbowlaugh:

Also I think this needs a random tag.

Please don’t tell mom.

Good. Good job.

that happened.

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Should I have added blood as well? Or was it good enough, for my first time writing intentionally bad?

This shit had me in stitches, start to finish. Well done!

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Aww, thanks! I hoped people would laugh at this. Please, check out my other work. I hope you like it.

God damn you Todd Howard!!!

Shining crapped so hard, he went to another universe. LOL

I am not sorry.

Maybe you should be.

What the hell did I just read?

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The worst clopfic ever, my dude. I hope it was terrible enough.

Comment posted by Golden Fang Ryu Shenron deleted March 13th

Todd you sly devil.. you’ve done it again.

I think the lesson here is to stay constipated.

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That leads into the second lesson, don't do incest.

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Twilight didn't get the memo... She seemed to have not only read incest... But incest fanfiction. :trollestia:

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Yeah, that's one of the things that bugs me about the clopfic community, and porn in general. It's so messed up that it's hard to find any redeeming qualities. So I made this in petty retaliation.

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pettiness and porn, forever rivals.

So this is the pride and glory of the fandom, eh? Not bad. Not bad at all. (๑•̀ㅂ•́)و✧

*Deleted joke after learning who the author was.*

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