It's always fun, seeing new updates to these types of stories, it's kind of like a mystery bag (or, blind bag, if you will), which two ponies will be writhing in pleasure for you today? I was already somewhat happy that Twilight was the first pony to be featured, so I was busily trying to guess who the partner might be (considering that the Mane 6 tag was the only tag present at time of reading). Imagine my glee when was shown a Cheerilee... yeah I'm not too good at the Zecora stuff. Still, I knew I was in for a ride.

I have to say, this was hot. The descriptions, the setting, the... activities, extremely well detailed, and extremely well done, though that may just be my love for the ship talking, not to mention the blood may or may not have drifted back to my brain just yet, being needed... elsewhere. Still, it was an enjoyable clop one-shot, with a good laugh at the end.

Well done!

I love the way you write these two. Sleepless!Cheerilee is the best Cheerilee, especially when she's seducing and fucking the hell out of Twilight Sparkle. Gotta say, as hot and well done as most of this is, what I really liked was that bit at the end with Twilight sitting there with her mane all mussed up and looking sheepish because I can see it perfectly. It's just so in-character that it forms a picture in my mind. Nicely done, particularly for a sixty minute speedfic.

dat last line

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Guys! Guys!

“Cheerilee!” Twilight snapped up, the spell slightly broken.

He wrote in past tense!

Forcing an apologetic smile.

Well... mostly. And that one could be called a participial phrase adjunct to a complete past-tenes sentence that was written without the rest of the sentence for sylistic purposes... So, yeah.

And grats on 1k watchers :)

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Caught me! I went over time on this one, and I'm pretty sure the reason was how often I had to go back and re-do sentences in past tense. I don't know what it is, but present is just my thing now, I guess.

Oh god, that last little section...

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I laughed out loud when you cut to the hospital. I really shouldn't read your stuff at work...

Again?!

Nurse Redheart just sighed and shook her head.
“Again?”

Laughed like an idiot at that.

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Awesome little fic. Can't wait for more (there will be more, right?) dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_O_O.png

I can't believe I never remembered to read this one!

Hot.